Haiku Club Challenges, Book II
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "haiku(hands entwined)"an anthology of haiku written by fanstory poets
13 total reviews
Comment from Douglas Paul
I Like this one. I can relate to silent prayer. I heard you were asking about me - thank you for caring. I am still doing pretty well. Just got new scan results that were very encouraging
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2017
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I Like this one. I can relate to silent prayer. I heard you were asking about me - thank you for caring. I am still doing pretty well. Just got new scan results that were very encouraging
Comment Written 15-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2017
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Oh Douglas, I'm so glad to hear from you. I am so pleased for you that you're doing well and that your results are encouraging. That is great. Thanks a lot for coming back to me. That is so kind. And then of course your wonderful review. Thank you so very much for the recognition. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment from Bill Schott
This haiku, Hands Entwined, marks a moment and creates a scene that moves our thoughts to the silent and powerful moment we have the privilege to experience whenever the need or feeling arises. Nice.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2017
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This haiku, Hands Entwined, marks a moment and creates a scene that moves our thoughts to the silent and powerful moment we have the privilege to experience whenever the need or feeling arises. Nice.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2017
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Thanks a lot, Bill. I'm glad you liked it. All the best. Ulla:))
Comment from Susan Chetcuti
This short piece had me visualize his hands entwined below his moonlit face. I loved that line. The picture also blends in well with this. If I can visualize the scene, then that's a plus. God bless.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2017
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This short piece had me visualize his hands entwined below his moonlit face. I loved that line. The picture also blends in well with this. If I can visualize the scene, then that's a plus. God bless.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2017
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Hello, Susan. Thanks so much, and I'm glad you liked it. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment from rama devi
Love the imagery, dear. Superb word economy. Superb tone and tenor and theme. No nits in the writing but I do wonder about your artwork choice, as the poem says moonlit but the art looks like bright streaming SUN.
Nice phonetics with alliteration of H, assonance of I and cosnoancne of W, L, S and soft C.
Lovely.
Serene.
Love,
rd
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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Love the imagery, dear. Superb word economy. Superb tone and tenor and theme. No nits in the writing but I do wonder about your artwork choice, as the poem says moonlit but the art looks like bright streaming SUN.
Nice phonetics with alliteration of H, assonance of I and cosnoancne of W, L, S and soft C.
Lovely.
Serene.
Love,
rd
Comment Written 13-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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Hi Rama, thank you so much. I'm happy you liked my haiku and the feeling I wanted to emit. Your so right about the artwork. I edited the hauku and never thought the picture wouldn't support it anymore. I have now changed the artwork. Thanks a lot for bringing it to my attention. Love. Ulla:)))
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:))))))) Much improved!
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Aww, Thanks for looking into it!!!!. A hug. Ulla:)))
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:-)))))
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PS Hugs back!
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
You have written a lovely haiku here Ulla. I found the prayer one is quite difficult and was interested to see what other people would write. The Satori is quite effective in this one, Giddy :):)
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2017
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You have written a lovely haiku here Ulla. I found the prayer one is quite difficult and was interested to see what other people would write. The Satori is quite effective in this one, Giddy :):)
Comment Written 13-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2017
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Hi Giddy, thank you so much.I found it a rather difficult one myself. I'm not religious so even more difficult, but I suppose we all pray for something in our own way and that gave me the inspiration. Thanks a lot again. A hug. Ulla:)))
Comment from Sasha
I am sure you have grown tired of hearing me say this but I know nothing about Haiku. That said, I found this beautifully written and gave me a sense of peace. I enjoyed this one very much.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2017
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I am sure you have grown tired of hearing me say this but I know nothing about Haiku. That said, I found this beautifully written and gave me a sense of peace. I enjoyed this one very much.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2017
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Hahaha, Sasha, no, I'm not tired of you at all. I'm so glad you liked it. That's the main thing. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment from Ric Myworld
Thanks for sharing another of your fine poems. Sitting with hands entwined at night in silent pray. A good time to sort things out and enjoy some peace and quiet. Great job. :-)
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2017
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Thanks for sharing another of your fine poems. Sitting with hands entwined at night in silent pray. A good time to sort things out and enjoy some peace and quiet. Great job. :-)
Comment Written 13-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2017
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Thank you so much, Ric. All the best. Ulla:))
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice image.
-Good syllable count.
-A nice message in your poem.
-Imagery is effective,
esp. "moonlit face."
-A good satori, as well.
-Thanks for sharing, Ulla.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2017
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-Nice image.
-Good syllable count.
-A nice message in your poem.
-Imagery is effective,
esp. "moonlit face."
-A good satori, as well.
-Thanks for sharing, Ulla.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2017
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Hello Pam, thank you so much. So glad you appreciated it. All the best. Ulla:)))
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You are welcome, Ulla.
Comment from lalajovanoski
Hello my dear friend, I very much enjoyed reading this beautifully written Haiku. I like the content here and the structure and flow is very soft and smooth flowing. I found it to be very interesting. Thank you very much for sharing this. With love, Lala
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2017
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Hello my dear friend, I very much enjoyed reading this beautifully written Haiku. I like the content here and the structure and flow is very soft and smooth flowing. I found it to be very interesting. Thank you very much for sharing this. With love, Lala
Comment Written 13-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2017
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Ahh, thanks a lot, Lala. I so appreciate it. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment from Kingsrookviii
This evoke a wonderful and dare I say, spiritual image for me! LOL Excellent haiku with an economy of words, my talented friend. This grasshopper may learn from you, yet! This suits you well and I read this is tune on one level with your saga that I have been following. Pure joy to read, and learn. Thanks. Bruce.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2017
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This evoke a wonderful and dare I say, spiritual image for me! LOL Excellent haiku with an economy of words, my talented friend. This grasshopper may learn from you, yet! This suits you well and I read this is tune on one level with your saga that I have been following. Pure joy to read, and learn. Thanks. Bruce.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2017
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Hi Bruce, what can I say? I'm so pleased. Thank you so much for the great recognition. All the best. Ulla:))
