Comment from jeremyvnv

Excellent

Loved this, unrequited love is the worst and sometimes it takes years to love again when everyone leaves you, I especially love the fish lure analogy and the last stanza about your heart still beating, good job

 Comment Written 13-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017

Thank you so much:)

Comment from Heather Knight

Excellent

This is very sad. I really feel for your friend. I hope one day she meets a really deserving man.
I love the fish metaphor you use at the beginning of your poem.
Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 13-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017

Thank you Maria:)

Comment from MizKat

Excellent

Hi Tab,

The poem you wrote about your friend was wonderful. I sure hope she will find other friends like you. It is sad that her heart keeps getting hurt.

Kat

 Comment Written 13-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017

Thank you Kat:)

reply by MizKat on 13-Jul-2017

You're so welcome, Tab. Kat

Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin

Excellent

Hi, Teresa

= What a sad story.
= Makes you wonder how love/life can be so cruel to one person.
= Well told story, but I hope things turn around for her.
= Good luck in the contest.

<> A Smile Is A Frown Turned Upside-down (*>*)
<> Cheers <> Jax / Jackie


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 Comment Written 13-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017

Thank you Jax:)

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

Teresa,
I enjoyed reading your free verse. Your lines flow well. The story is sad, but true of many. I am sorry your friend was hurt & wish her well.

I like the short line/phrase at the end of each verse.

Best wishes in the contest. Jan

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 Comment Written 13-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017

Thank you Jan:)