This Time - That Time 2
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "This Time - That Time the Sequel"Veronica is sent back again
43 total reviews
Comment from c_lucas
Red eyes have been
Associated with demons
Throughout the History of Time
The shock when they stared back
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This is very well written with a smooth flow of words making for a very good read.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017
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Red eyes have been
Associated with demons
Throughout the History of Time
The shock when they stared back
***
This is very well written with a smooth flow of words making for a very good read.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017
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It must be a shock to see red eyes, I can imagine the creepy feeling it would give someone. Thanks, Charlie, for your lovely review. Big hugs. :) Sandra xx
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My pleasure, Sandra. Charlie
Comment from aryr
Wow, what an amazing twist Sandra. I was totally unprepared for the final paragraph. How horrible for Sir John to behave in such a manner. And what a shock for Veronica. You provided great details which made one feel like they were drifting through the rooms with her. It was indeed an interesting chapter, thanks so much.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017
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Wow, what an amazing twist Sandra. I was totally unprepared for the final paragraph. How horrible for Sir John to behave in such a manner. And what a shock for Veronica. You provided great details which made one feel like they were drifting through the rooms with her. It was indeed an interesting chapter, thanks so much.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017
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Thank you, Alie, for the great feedback. Now we have to find out just what will happen to the child. Lots for Veronica to find out. Thanks, my friend, I'm so pleased you are enjoying the trip. :) Sandra xxx
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You are most welcome Sandra, this is actually an adventure within an adventure.
Comment from Ric Myworld
Every chapter you post is outstanding and deserving of six stars, but given so few, I seldom have any left after the first day or two of the week. I'm just thankful that today, I did. Great job. :-)
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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Every chapter you post is outstanding and deserving of six stars, but given so few, I seldom have any left after the first day or two of the week. I'm just thankful that today, I did. Great job. :-)
Comment Written 12-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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What a lovely thing to say, Ric, thank you so much! The six stars are a bonus on top of your wonderful review, and I really appreciate them. Thank you! :) Sandra xxx
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, my friend,
Whoa, that was unexpected and a great development in the story to keep the readers on the edge of their seats. Great description and story flow.
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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Hello, my friend,
Whoa, that was unexpected and a great development in the story to keep the readers on the edge of their seats. Great description and story flow.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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Thank you so much, Gypsy, for reading and reviewing my story. I'm so very pleased you are enjoying the plot, lol, it's a bit different to the first book. Big hugs, my friend. :) Sandra xx
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Quite a surprise discovery in the attic. The boy would have red eyes if he were an albino, which would explain the white hair as well. I once had an albino neighbor. Her eyes were purplish-red. Took some getting used to.
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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Quite a surprise discovery in the attic. The boy would have red eyes if he were an albino, which would explain the white hair as well. I once had an albino neighbor. Her eyes were purplish-red. Took some getting used to.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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LOL!! You are the only one who has come up with this. Thank you so much, my friend. You'll have to tell me a bit about your neighbour, was it offputting seeing that coloured eyes? :) Sandra. xxxxxx
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Her skin was sooooo pale... almost white but with a pinkish cast. She had to stay out of the sun. I met her dad. He had the same condition. As I recall, his eyes were even redder than hers, not as purple. He was a scary-looking guy. Full head of white hair that had been that way long before he got old. The woman was very pretty, slim, with red lips.
Comment from Drew Delaney
Oh, so nicely written. The ending is freakish. Is this going to be a thriller?
I could not detect anything off. Or toke note to any errors. Your writing is filled with interest and I love your voice. Nice job!
Drew
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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Oh, so nicely written. The ending is freakish. Is this going to be a thriller?
I could not detect anything off. Or toke note to any errors. Your writing is filled with interest and I love your voice. Nice job!
Drew
Comment Written 12-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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Aw, thank you, Drew. That poor little baby, bless him, I'm sure you'll love him! LOL. Big hugs, my friend. :) Sandra xxx
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
What the hell? What on earth is wrong with the man, and why would he call his son a freak? It doesn't matter what your child looks like. When they're yours, they are the most beautiful children in the world!
"Look after him, Meg, please don't let him hurt my boy ... he ... doesn't understand." Lady Gwendolyne begged, her breathing becoming shallower by the second.
Meg leant over and promised her, then picked the child up again and cradled him in her arms. Her tears were flowing as we both watched Lady Gwendolyne take her final breath. Meg stood there in silence, her face soaked in tears. Then, for the first time, the child turned his face toward me.
My breath caught in my throat, but it wasn't the fact that he appeared to be able to see me that had shocked me. Instead of the lovely baby blue eyes I'd expected to see ... I was staring into two piercing red orbs....
This ending made my heart jump into my throat. An amazing totally unexpected write. Well done this is superb! So spooky! Love Meia xx
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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What the hell? What on earth is wrong with the man, and why would he call his son a freak? It doesn't matter what your child looks like. When they're yours, they are the most beautiful children in the world!
"Look after him, Meg, please don't let him hurt my boy ... he ... doesn't understand." Lady Gwendolyne begged, her breathing becoming shallower by the second.
Meg leant over and promised her, then picked the child up again and cradled him in her arms. Her tears were flowing as we both watched Lady Gwendolyne take her final breath. Meg stood there in silence, her face soaked in tears. Then, for the first time, the child turned his face toward me.
My breath caught in my throat, but it wasn't the fact that he appeared to be able to see me that had shocked me. Instead of the lovely baby blue eyes I'd expected to see ... I was staring into two piercing red orbs....
This ending made my heart jump into my throat. An amazing totally unexpected write. Well done this is superb! So spooky! Love Meia xx
Comment Written 12-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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Thank you so very much for your wonderful review, Meia! I'm so pleased you are enjoying it. Big hugs, my friend. :) Sandra xxx
Comment from damommy
Wow! Totally unexpected ending. I was expecting a Down's Syndrome baby, you clever little imp. Now, we're dealing with something entirely different. Maybe this child is that future John that was so horribly mean.
-"What is it[,] Meg?" he said, not bothering to look up. "Speak up[,] woman!"
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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Wow! Totally unexpected ending. I was expecting a Down's Syndrome baby, you clever little imp. Now, we're dealing with something entirely different. Maybe this child is that future John that was so horribly mean.
-"What is it[,] Meg?" he said, not bothering to look up. "Speak up[,] woman!"
Comment Written 12-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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Thank you so much, Yvonne, and big hugs for pointing out those missing commas! I don't know what happened there! LOL. Ageism? I'm glad I've got you wondering!! LOL. More hugs! :) Sandra xxx
Comment from alexisleech
Talk about a cliff hanger! What a great chapter to keep us on the edge of our seats. No wonder the boy was locked away and his father was concerned because someone had seen him. Back then, a child with red eyes would scare the living daylights out of anyone!
I can't wait to read on.
Alexis xxx
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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Talk about a cliff hanger! What a great chapter to keep us on the edge of our seats. No wonder the boy was locked away and his father was concerned because someone had seen him. Back then, a child with red eyes would scare the living daylights out of anyone!
I can't wait to read on.
Alexis xxx
Comment Written 12-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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Thank you so much, dear friend. I won't take quite so long next time, I've no one else to pay for a holiday for me!!! LOL. Thank you for the lovely 6 stars, my dear! :) Many big hugs. :) Sandra xxx
Comment from giraffmang
Another good chapter of 'This time, which was last time, which isn't really that time as this time happens in a future time which hasn't come yet'.
I'd occupied Mrs Humphries body. - need an apostrophe in there.
There'll only be me left to love 'im."/ "Well, I'd better be tellin' him," - same speaker here but you use 'im and then him.
into the same bedroom what would become - not sure about 'what' here, maybe which?
I'd sort of figured the child was different but this is very well paced and well-written.
Another great continuation.
G
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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Another good chapter of 'This time, which was last time, which isn't really that time as this time happens in a future time which hasn't come yet'.
I'd occupied Mrs Humphries body. - need an apostrophe in there.
There'll only be me left to love 'im."/ "Well, I'd better be tellin' him," - same speaker here but you use 'im and then him.
into the same bedroom what would become - not sure about 'what' here, maybe which?
I'd sort of figured the child was different but this is very well paced and well-written.
Another great continuation.
G
Comment Written 12-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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Thank you so much for catching those nits, my friend. I've made all the corrections. I'm glad Mrs Huphries doesn't feature much in this one, I am always forgetting her apostrophe!! The child is such a sweet thing, you'll love him!!! Big hugs, my friend. :) Sandra xxx
