The Products of Love
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "Good Love Gone Wrong"...the story of Jenny and Ron
75 total reviews
Comment from gsuarez
An amazing transition from Love found to Love lost. This was a very imaginative piece which captured my imagination; a job well done.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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An amazing transition from Love found to Love lost. This was a very imaginative piece which captured my imagination; a job well done.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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thank you so much for your thoughtful and concise review,
~patty~
Comment from closetpoetjester
Nicely done
I'm sure you've narrated how it is for many and at least ONE relationship in their lives.
Both are such polar opposites so it's easy to feel completely powerless when trading one for the other as things go from great to pear shaped.
Well written
Cheers P
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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Nicely done
I'm sure you've narrated how it is for many and at least ONE relationship in their lives.
Both are such polar opposites so it's easy to feel completely powerless when trading one for the other as things go from great to pear shaped.
Well written
Cheers P
Comment Written 14-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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thank you so much for a thoughtful and concise review. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem,
~patty~
Comment from Raoul D'Harmental
Hi MustangPatty1029
I like the structure of this poem which I find quite intriguing as it describes the descent from love to hate. Excellent summary of the transition. It does make me wonder however if it could go the other way i.e. hate ascending to love. Is it ever possible? i would like to know what you think and perhaps a poem about the possibility or impossibility of this reverse scenario would be apt! :) Thanks for sharing this. R
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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Hi MustangPatty1029
I like the structure of this poem which I find quite intriguing as it describes the descent from love to hate. Excellent summary of the transition. It does make me wonder however if it could go the other way i.e. hate ascending to love. Is it ever possible? i would like to know what you think and perhaps a poem about the possibility or impossibility of this reverse scenario would be apt! :) Thanks for sharing this. R
Comment Written 14-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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thank you so much for this lovely and thoughtful review. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem and I do appreciate your challenge to write the emotions changing from hate to love...
~patty~
the shining sixth star is a wonderful compliment
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
The story of far too many relationships it seems. So many people get married multiple times rather than work through the rough spots and stay together. Well done, my friend~Debbie
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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The story of far too many relationships it seems. So many people get married multiple times rather than work through the rough spots and stay together. Well done, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 14-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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Hi Debbie; thank you so much for your thoughtful and kind review,
~patty~
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
The two are inextricably linked in love's sweet and sour circles and both emotions are strong and raw, your poem outlines the rollercoaster ride Patty, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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The two are inextricably linked in love's sweet and sour circles and both emotions are strong and raw, your poem outlines the rollercoaster ride Patty, love Dolly x
Comment Written 14-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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Hi Dolly, thank you so much for your lovely and thoughtful review,
~patty~
Comment from Thal1959
This is really very well done, Patty. Alternating the one syllable lines with love then hate makes a good pivot from the joy of the relationship into its failure. The last line is almost like a Haiku Satori - overcome, forget, and move on.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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This is really very well done, Patty. Alternating the one syllable lines with love then hate makes a good pivot from the joy of the relationship into its failure. The last line is almost like a Haiku Satori - overcome, forget, and move on.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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thank you so much for your very thoughtful review. I'm glad you saw the pivot and felt the satori.
~patty~
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You're welcome - it was my pleasure, Patty.
Comment from Joan E.
I admired your creative, mirrored Etheree and your antonyms. Your descriptions are quite vivid and the striking artwork and color presentation reinforce the emotion. Sighs- Joan
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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I admired your creative, mirrored Etheree and your antonyms. Your descriptions are quite vivid and the striking artwork and color presentation reinforce the emotion. Sighs- Joan
Comment Written 14-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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Hi Joan; thank you so much for your thoughtful and kind review. I'm glad you enjoyed the piece,
~patty~
Comment from AnnieGale
The art work is very captivating. Your words capture the new of romance. Then when things go wrong, that is sometimes the way to feel,,,to forget him and not mention his name. I think we all have been there. Very well written.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017
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The art work is very captivating. Your words capture the new of romance. Then when things go wrong, that is sometimes the way to feel,,,to forget him and not mention his name. I think we all have been there. Very well written.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017
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thank you so much for the thoughtful review of my poem,
~patty~
Comment from Hitcher
A very clever use of the form friend, I do enjoy writing and reading these cascading forms of poetry when they are done well : ) Yours was done well and I enjoyed the Love turning to Hate ellement you expressed here. Very good!!
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017
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A very clever use of the form friend, I do enjoy writing and reading these cascading forms of poetry when they are done well : ) Yours was done well and I enjoyed the Love turning to Hate ellement you expressed here. Very good!!
Comment Written 13-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017
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Hi there; thank you so much for your thoughtful review. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem,
~patty~
Comment from XGoneX
Hi,
This poem describes your story. I always write poems for my novels, too. It started like a beautiful story. It did not end well. But there is a sense of hope towards the end, as she is looking or finds love again. The scars will remain, though.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017
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Hi,
This poem describes your story. I always write poems for my novels, too. It started like a beautiful story. It did not end well. But there is a sense of hope towards the end, as she is looking or finds love again. The scars will remain, though.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017
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Hi; thank you so much for your thoughtful review of the poem. I had a wonderful time putting this together and building it around the theme of the story.
~patty~
