The Urban Pirate
The story of a wannabe swashbuckler7 total reviews
Comment from BeasPeas
Oh give me the TV (or FanStory) and a full larder anytime. Your poem rhymes well with some internal rhyme as well, which is always a favorite of mine. Story telling is good too. An enjoyable piece. Marilyn
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2017
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Oh give me the TV (or FanStory) and a full larder anytime. Your poem rhymes well with some internal rhyme as well, which is always a favorite of mine. Story telling is good too. An enjoyable piece. Marilyn
Comment Written 30-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2017
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Yes, It appears we both enjoy our creature comforts (your comfort, no doubt, enhanced by a lap creature). I'm glad you liked my pirate poem, Marilyn. It was fun to write. I'm way behind on my review replies, and I know I'llbeback with somethnk you Marilyn's. Don
Comment from B.B. Rose
Terrific poem. Even though life happens, I like the way you handled the turnabout. I read about that nice guy pirate who went broke being a brigand.
However, I believe you are missing a couple of words in this sentence: "It was time to advancing years, succumb."
Maybe "due" and "to" or simply or just reversing things a bit:
Due to advancing years, time to succumb.
Great fun. Hope were still friends.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2017
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Terrific poem. Even though life happens, I like the way you handled the turnabout. I read about that nice guy pirate who went broke being a brigand.
However, I believe you are missing a couple of words in this sentence: "It was time to advancing years, succumb."
Maybe "due" and "to" or simply or just reversing things a bit:
Due to advancing years, time to succumb.
Great fun. Hope were still friends.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2017
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What a pleasant surprise! I'm so glad you liked my pirate, and, of course, tickled pink with the sixer. Thank you so much!
Thank you also for taking the time to try to "fix" the line you didn't like.
I gave you a comma, where it should have been in te first place, and I think you'll it'll better for you now - or maybe you just don't like that poetic syntax.
Thanks again for everything, BB.
Don
Comment from Sasha
This is such a fun entry for this contest. You do a great job combining humor with a smidgen of serious. No, the pirate's life is not for everyone. I'm all for becoming a couch potato as long as I get to hold the remote. Great work with this one and I sincerely wish you all the best in this contest too.
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2017
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This is such a fun entry for this contest. You do a great job combining humor with a smidgen of serious. No, the pirate's life is not for everyone. I'm all for becoming a couch potato as long as I get to hold the remote. Great work with this one and I sincerely wish you all the best in this contest too.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2017
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What a terrific review, Sasha! Lots of luck holding onto the remote, (and go easy on the ice cream).
Don
Comment from rosehill (Wendy)
No longer on wall street? The modern pirate need not worry about scurvy or need seasickness pills. I loved you little pirate piece, chock full of pirateese and ending up walking the plank into the surf of the TV remote. You are correct in that the daily offerings of the ship of state are enough high seas lawlessness for any pirate wannabe. I am a sucker for rhymed poetry and love a good pirate tale in any form. This was as much fun as swinging from the yardarm. - Wendy
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No longer on wall street? The modern pirate need not worry about scurvy or need seasickness pills. I loved you little pirate piece, chock full of pirateese and ending up walking the plank into the surf of the TV remote. You are correct in that the daily offerings of the ship of state are enough high seas lawlessness for any pirate wannabe. I am a sucker for rhymed poetry and love a good pirate tale in any form. This was as much fun as swinging from the yardarm. - Wendy
Comment Written 29-Jul-2017
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Oh yes there comes a time to hang up the skull and crossbones and settle for the couch and TV. lol
This was very cute and so true of the aging, I never thought of what happened to retired pirates.
Nice story with alternating rhyme
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Oh yes there comes a time to hang up the skull and crossbones and settle for the couch and TV. lol
This was very cute and so true of the aging, I never thought of what happened to retired pirates.
Nice story with alternating rhyme
Comment Written 29-Jul-2017
Comment from lyenochka
Great little commentary about what piracy really was and transition to city life and enjoyed the humorous ending of the kind of imaginary pirate one can be via the TV.
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Great little commentary about what piracy really was and transition to city life and enjoyed the humorous ending of the kind of imaginary pirate one can be via the TV.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2017
Comment from PoemsOfDD
G'day Don, it's been a while since I've read your work. I would not have known that you used to be a pirate in your younger days. And to think you were one to ignore the teachings of your loving mother. No, that can't be true.
Pleased to see you have succumbed to living the urban life and now sit comfortably on your couch with your remote. I enjoyed reading about your life ;-) Thank you for sharing and best of luck in the competition. ~DD
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G'day Don, it's been a while since I've read your work. I would not have known that you used to be a pirate in your younger days. And to think you were one to ignore the teachings of your loving mother. No, that can't be true.
Pleased to see you have succumbed to living the urban life and now sit comfortably on your couch with your remote. I enjoyed reading about your life ;-) Thank you for sharing and best of luck in the competition. ~DD
Comment Written 29-Jul-2017
