Comment from Thal1959

Excellent

Patty, you must be working some kind of magic with your writing. I decided to stop by and read this because it is one of your works. I normally have no interest in romance or love stories. So, I was surprised how quickly and smoothly I read through it. To be able to keep the attention and interest of a reader who is not into the genre like that speaks for the writing far more than analyzing grammar or style. Good job.

 Comment Written 10-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 10-Jul-2017

Such a wonderful compliment! THANK YOU! I'm glad you enjoyed the story. Thanks for stopping by,

~patty~

reply by Thal1959 on 10-Jul-2017

It was my pleasure, Patty.

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

Patty,

Thanks for the update. I enjoyed this part of the story. You told it well.

I liked finding out about them individually & how they met. That staple project sounded really interesting.

I am glad that you are continuing to share installments of their story. Thank you. Jan

 Comment Written 10-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 10-Jul-2017

Hi Jan; thank you for reading and reviewing. When my friend relayed this story to me, I took notes and she didn't tell it all in order, so I'm working through the pages I have. She loved this chapter--it reminded her of all the hopes and dreams she had,

~patty~

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

Hello my friend

Ron and Jenny's love story, how wonderful it's to fall in love. You set out the story well and made it interesting so readers want to come back for more. Good job sweetie pie.

Gypsy hugs

 Comment Written 10-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 10-Jul-2017

Hi Gypsy; thank you so much for the lovely review. That first blush of love is so wonderful, isn't it?

~patty~

Comment from Cybertron1986

Excellent

I enjoy reading stories with a convincing and genuine storyline, and I strongly believe your story did capture that. The dialogue starts out naturally, and that I had an slight inclination that it may lead somewhere that builds up either something positive, or negative. Then, reading the last part, as well as the notes, I was correct. Your story has much potential to build something appealing. I recommend adding substance to the background of your characters. Maybe developing their histories with memories to provide the reader with more attachment and relativity. Overall, a fine piece. Thank you

 Comment Written 10-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 10-Jul-2017

thank you so much for your lovely review. I will work on developing the characters.

~patty~

Comment from dmt1967

Excellent

This is a good story. I don't think I have read the other ones in this series. If I have I can't remember. This saga could be taken on its own or added onto the saga. Either way it makes sense. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 10-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 10-Jul-2017

Hi there; thank you for reading. I'm trying to make sure each part of the story stands on its own. I appreciate your kind review,

~patty~

Comment from Thomas Bowling

Excellent

This is a very good story. No spags were noted and the dialog was just right. Some of the best inventions are discovered by accident. For instance, I discovered that the green toothpaste that hardens in the sink can be scraped up and used as after dinner mints.

 Comment Written 10-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 10-Jul-2017

LOL! Wow - I don't think I ever want to come to your house for dinner. I usually love after dinner mints - but now, well, I have a new way of looking at them.

~patty~

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written story about a young couple falling in love for the first time but never seems to find their love to be fulfilled together as they probably wished it to be

 Comment Written 10-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 10-Jul-2017

Hi Sandra; thank you so much for the lovely review. Yes, it all started out so well...


~patty~

Comment from royowen

Excellent

Their story is a very poignantly written story, a biographical account of Ron and Jenny's life. How they met, the great circumstances surrounding part of their lives seems to make them suited to one another Patty, well done, excellent scribing, blessings, Roy

 Comment Written 10-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 10-Jul-2017

Hi Roy; thank you so much for this lovely review. Jenny and Ron were quite the pair. I wish the rest of their story was as blissful as the beginning days of their relationship,

~patty~

reply by royowen on 10-Jul-2017

Well done! Patty

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

Love can find
Participants any where
A smile, a wink
Anything will do
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This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.

 Comment Written 10-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 10-Jul-2017

thank you so much for your lovely review. Yes, anything will do as long as it is directed in a loving fashion,

~patty~

Comment from Poetic Friend

Excellent

Patty,

This is a beautiful romantic story. Who does not like a good "girl meets boy" story?"

You captured the giddiness and the anticipation prevalent in the beginning stage of a budding romance.

The reader immediately connects with the characters. I am looking forward to reading more about these two.

Thank you for sharing.

This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.

 Comment Written 10-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 10-Jul-2017

Hi; thank you so much for reading and being the first to review this story. Jenny and Ron have a story that is one of love, hurt, betrayal, etc.

I hope you will follow along. I'm not putting them into a book, but identifying them with 'another part of Jenny and Ron's story.'

~patty~