Alone... I Walk
Love missed at Christmas time.9 total reviews
Comment from Mame
You have certainly relayed the feeling of loss and isolation in this poem. Great contrast of lighted homes and the misery of cold in the snow. Good work and good luck in comp.
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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You have certainly relayed the feeling of loss and isolation in this poem. Great contrast of lighted homes and the misery of cold in the snow. Good work and good luck in comp.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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Thank you for your read and your thoughtful review.
Comment from Bill Schott
This rondeau, Alone I Walk, is set up well and is so very expressive of the terrible loneliness that fills the vacancy in a severed relationship.
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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This rondeau, Alone I Walk, is set up well and is so very expressive of the terrible loneliness that fills the vacancy in a severed relationship.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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Thank for the read and your comment.
Comment from Mustang Patty
thank you for sharing your rodeau for the poetry contest. Your poem reads well and though it made me sad, I could relate to the lines. You did a great job of constructing the poetic form and I wish you well in the contest,
~patty~
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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thank you for sharing your rodeau for the poetry contest. Your poem reads well and though it made me sad, I could relate to the lines. You did a great job of constructing the poetic form and I wish you well in the contest,
~patty~
Comment Written 11-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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Thank you so much for your read and your kind words.
Comment from w.j.debi
Very nice rondeau form. You have chosen an excellent repeating line that adds to the overall melancholy of the theme. Excellent opening line
Alone I walk into the winter bite
It sets up the chilly mood for the poem.
Excellent presentation including the blue to add to the chill.
Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2017
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Very nice rondeau form. You have chosen an excellent repeating line that adds to the overall melancholy of the theme. Excellent opening line
Alone I walk into the winter bite
It sets up the chilly mood for the poem.
Excellent presentation including the blue to add to the chill.
Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 09-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2017
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Thank you so much for your read and your comments.
Comment from Marykelly
The strength of this poem is its delicate, beautiful imagery. The message of loneliness at Christmas comes through clearly but the imagery makes the sad experience unique to the speaker.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2017
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The strength of this poem is its delicate, beautiful imagery. The message of loneliness at Christmas comes through clearly but the imagery makes the sad experience unique to the speaker.
Comment Written 09-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2017
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Thank you for your read and your kind review. Much appreciated.
Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Poet,
A sad and sober scene you've set for us, and I think most of your readers will be able to relate to the feelings created here, if not the exact situation. Lovely! I wish you the best of luck in the voting!! Great job!
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2017
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Dear Mystery Poet,
A sad and sober scene you've set for us, and I think most of your readers will be able to relate to the feelings created here, if not the exact situation. Lovely! I wish you the best of luck in the voting!! Great job!
Comment Written 09-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2017
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Thank you for your read and your kind words.
Comment from smbau
The reminds me of "all alone on Christmas" song by Darlene Love. Like the flow of the poem, the picture, background and font colors add value to the content of the poem.
I wonder why there is need of three dots in "Alone...I walk".
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2017
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The reminds me of "all alone on Christmas" song by Darlene Love. Like the flow of the poem, the picture, background and font colors add value to the content of the poem.
I wonder why there is need of three dots in "Alone...I walk".
Comment Written 09-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2017
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The dots (ellipsis) is to give a bit of a pause and emphasize loneliness of the walker. Thank you for your read and your comments.
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
Snowflakes swirl in sallow moonlight
Fireplace flames dance on windows' iced
Tears frozen where you kissed my cheek
My heart in such pain that I want to shriek
Lovers at home share Christmas delights
Alone...I walk
This is beautiful good luck in the competition with this gorgeous write which reminded me so much of Christmas even then we are not shielded from heartbreak,in fact it is often worse at that time. kindest regards meiax
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2017
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Snowflakes swirl in sallow moonlight
Fireplace flames dance on windows' iced
Tears frozen where you kissed my cheek
My heart in such pain that I want to shriek
Lovers at home share Christmas delights
Alone...I walk
This is beautiful good luck in the competition with this gorgeous write which reminded me so much of Christmas even then we are not shielded from heartbreak,in fact it is often worse at that time. kindest regards meiax
Comment Written 09-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2017
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Thank you so much for your read and your kind review.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks the feeling of sorrow, unhappiness, isolated walk all the night in show on the Christmas night when the family afar enjoys the festival at home; I liked.
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2017
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This speaks the feeling of sorrow, unhappiness, isolated walk all the night in show on the Christmas night when the family afar enjoys the festival at home; I liked.
Comment Written 09-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2017
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Thank you for your read and review. Much appreciated.
