Bearded, But Bewildered
He was just sticking by his beliefs51 total reviews
Comment from Oatmeal
jaybird1,
You, many years ago but it is my husband right now. lol The poem flowed well. The theme was very nice. Very reflective, all thoughts are very well described, understandable and comprehensible.
There was no SPAG. No typos. No homophones. No problems at all.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
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jaybird1,
You, many years ago but it is my husband right now. lol The poem flowed well. The theme was very nice. Very reflective, all thoughts are very well described, understandable and comprehensible.
There was no SPAG. No typos. No homophones. No problems at all.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
Comment Written 08-Jul-2017
Comment from Mitchell Brontė
Really enjoyed this excellent poem, which flowed effortlessly,
lovely rhythm and rhyme throughout with some wonderful lines within.
The chosen subject of a beard was unique and gave me a smile.
I particularly enjoyed the last stanza which completed this excellent poem tremendously well.
Mitchell.
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Really enjoyed this excellent poem, which flowed effortlessly,
lovely rhythm and rhyme throughout with some wonderful lines within.
The chosen subject of a beard was unique and gave me a smile.
I particularly enjoyed the last stanza which completed this excellent poem tremendously well.
Mitchell.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2017
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hahaha.... good job, my friend,
This is a very funny and well composed poem about a man and his beard. I enjoyed the rhyme and meter scheme.... it has great flow and rhythm. The topic made me smile. Good job, honey.
Gypsy hugs
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Hahaha.... good job, my friend,
This is a very funny and well composed poem about a man and his beard. I enjoyed the rhyme and meter scheme.... it has great flow and rhythm. The topic made me smile. Good job, honey.
Gypsy hugs
Comment Written 08-Jul-2017
Comment from lalajovanoski
Hello my friend, I very much enjoyed reading this beautifully written poem. I think that is very interesting and I like the alliteration throughout. I also like the rhyming scheme it's very soft and subtle. Good content here I can feel a lot of emotions. Thank you very much for sharing this. God bless you. With love, Lala
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Hello my friend, I very much enjoyed reading this beautifully written poem. I think that is very interesting and I like the alliteration throughout. I also like the rhyming scheme it's very soft and subtle. Good content here I can feel a lot of emotions. Thank you very much for sharing this. God bless you. With love, Lala
Comment Written 08-Jul-2017
Comment from lyenochka
Humorous write, Jay. I do think that it's the beginnings of a beard that is the real "wife repellent." After the hairs soften, it's not so bad and might improve the face.
One typo:
"unstead of female furor" (instead?)
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Humorous write, Jay. I do think that it's the beginnings of a beard that is the real "wife repellent." After the hairs soften, it's not so bad and might improve the face.
One typo:
"unstead of female furor" (instead?)
Comment Written 08-Jul-2017
Comment from Hansel1
A fun concept to the read. There is a playful feel behind the lines, which makes for a pleasant piece.
I would encourage taking a look at some of the syllable counts in some of the lines. A majority of the piece reads smooth, however there are a few stumbles due to the longer syllable count. Likewise, **Instead** in place of **unstead** in stanza 3.
Overall, a nice piece of work - Cheers!
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A fun concept to the read. There is a playful feel behind the lines, which makes for a pleasant piece.
I would encourage taking a look at some of the syllable counts in some of the lines. A majority of the piece reads smooth, however there are a few stumbles due to the longer syllable count. Likewise, **Instead** in place of **unstead** in stanza 3.
Overall, a nice piece of work - Cheers!
Comment Written 08-Jul-2017
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about a bearded man. To meet a man with a beard for the first time is most of the time a strange experience. I myself prefer a clean shaved face.
Typo.
some call hin(him)dirty face
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A very well-written poem about a bearded man. To meet a man with a beard for the first time is most of the time a strange experience. I myself prefer a clean shaved face.
Typo.
some call hin(him)dirty face
Comment Written 08-Jul-2017
Comment from humpwhistle
You bring up a good point, my friend.
Women change their appearance at whim,
and with little flak.
Every man should give his facial hair a sprout at least once.
But not so others can approve or disapprove.
But so he can.
Peace, Lee
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You bring up a good point, my friend.
Women change their appearance at whim,
and with little flak.
Every man should give his facial hair a sprout at least once.
But not so others can approve or disapprove.
But so he can.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 08-Jul-2017
Comment from Bucketlist
WELCOME BACK.! WHAT A GREAT SURPRISE. THIS POEM GAVE ME A CHUCKLE BECAUSE 2 SONS CAN GROW THICK BEARDS, BUT THEIR FATHER CANNOT GROW EVEN A GOATY ! THANKS FOR SHARING.
SUPPORTIVE HUG
TRISHA
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WELCOME BACK.! WHAT A GREAT SURPRISE. THIS POEM GAVE ME A CHUCKLE BECAUSE 2 SONS CAN GROW THICK BEARDS, BUT THEIR FATHER CANNOT GROW EVEN A GOATY ! THANKS FOR SHARING.
SUPPORTIVE HUG
TRISHA
Comment Written 08-Jul-2017
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks how a man grew beard hoping it would bring grace, dignity and charm but it brought in grief, taunts and severe criticism and made him bewildered; I liked.
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This speaks how a man grew beard hoping it would bring grace, dignity and charm but it brought in grief, taunts and severe criticism and made him bewildered; I liked.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2017
