2017 JAPANESE POETRY
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Comment from Thomas Bowling
This is an excellent example of haiku. I don't write haiku. I tried once and the syllable counters came down on me hard. I never went back. It's too much work.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2017
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This is an excellent example of haiku. I don't write haiku. I tried once and the syllable counters came down on me hard. I never went back. It's too much work.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2017
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thank you very much for the lovely review.
Comment from Dean Kuch
Ahhhhh...warm memories indeed, Anonymous Poet.
Your 3/8/4 syllable count comes in at just 15, well below the limits of 17 syllables, or less, stipulated by the form.
Your kigo, or seasonal reference, may be late fall or early spring if it is cool enough to start a fire.
Your haiku is written in present tense--a moment in nature, captured in time--and your kigo is insightful creating a "warm and fuzzy" feeling.
Excellent work, great haiku.
Best wishes to you in the contest.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2017
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Ahhhhh...warm memories indeed, Anonymous Poet.
Your 3/8/4 syllable count comes in at just 15, well below the limits of 17 syllables, or less, stipulated by the form.
Your kigo, or seasonal reference, may be late fall or early spring if it is cool enough to start a fire.
Your haiku is written in present tense--a moment in nature, captured in time--and your kigo is insightful creating a "warm and fuzzy" feeling.
Excellent work, great haiku.
Best wishes to you in the contest.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2017
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thank you very much for the lovely review, handsome :) I appreciate the six stars.... specially this late in the week....wow! thanks!
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My pleasure... :)
Comment from Cybertron1986
Challenging, but accomplished piece despite the limitations a haiku allows for the writer. I liked how you incorporated, and utilized each word to the topic in focus: the beach, bonfire, and warm memories. This is a main contributor in a quality haiku, and you accomplished it. Well done!
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2017
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Challenging, but accomplished piece despite the limitations a haiku allows for the writer. I liked how you incorporated, and utilized each word to the topic in focus: the beach, bonfire, and warm memories. This is a main contributor in a quality haiku, and you accomplished it. Well done!
Comment Written 07-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2017
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thank you very much for the lovely review.
Comment from Ricky1024
Haiku Writing Challenge Prompt.
3 lines based on the beach.
Having fun as fireworks crackle.
No Grammar issues.
Easy read and flowed well.
Complete Synopsis-*****
Good job here.
Ricky 1024
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reply by the author on 07-Jul-2017
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Haiku Writing Challenge Prompt.
3 lines based on the beach.
Having fun as fireworks crackle.
No Grammar issues.
Easy read and flowed well.
Complete Synopsis-*****
Good job here.
Ricky 1024
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2017
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thank you very much for the lovely review.
