Comment from rosehill (Wendy)

Excellent

Just a bit exacting in its requirements, would you say? You did it, but I got buried in the instructions, let alone try the poem. I loved yours with all your delicious d,k, sounds and a few nasty b words as well. Yes, work and dirk rhyme - just had a go with my brother who said that buoy and joy didn't rhyme. Here I was congratulating myself for finally being pleased with a minute poem I wrote. Humbled by your crafting again. - Wendy

 Comment Written 05-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 11-Jul-2017

Many thanks, again! Rhyming words are often a source of lively dissent here on FS! Of course 'buoy' and 'joy' rhyme! LOL

Comment from Walu Feral

Excellent

G'day Tony.

Long time no see, mate. I hope you've been well.

This is a very interesting form and you did it in great style. The only problem I had was the translation of the epitaph lol. Well it's not really a problem, but I'd like to know what it says so I can compare it with yours.

But nicely done and good to see you posting.

Cheers Fez

 Comment Written 05-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017

Hi, Fez. Good to hear from you and thanks for the review. I'm afraid that I don't have a clue what the poem on the tombstone says. I just dragged it down off the Internet. All the best, Tony.

Comment from ~Dovey

Excellent

Hi Tony!

Thanks for the introduction to an unfamiliar (and I suspect underused) form of poetry. The rules of structure seem a bit complicated, but on a second read I think you've covered them all quite adeptly. It seems like a really cool twist or variation of monorhyme.

I enjoyed the style and your well written epitaph/englyn.

Thanks for sharing!

Kim

 Comment Written 05-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017

Thanks, Kim. It was an interesting form to try - once! All the best, Tony

Comment from Aussie

Exceptional

Wow! This certainly grabbed my attention. For the form to be so old and like a British haiku (of sorts.)
Good subject matter, shows that no one gets away from a loan-shark." Dirty work, easy mark " Liked that line. Well done.

 Comment Written 05-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2017

Thanks for your kind words and the sixer, Kay. Much appreciated. This one took more time than I expected for so short a poem!

Comment from Mitchell Brontė

Excellent

Another very interesting format of poetry you have bestowed on us Tony,
Love the simplistic way you written with such craft to employ such words to wit.
A brilliant englyn poem in the form of an epitaph.
Mitchell

 Comment Written 05-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2017

Thanks for your kind words, Mitchell. Much appreciated. This one took more time than I expected for so short a poem!

Comment from Marvin Calloway

Exceptional

You've fulfilled the englyn requirements with an entertaining piece. It appears to be a challenging poetic form. Nice work.
Marv

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2017

Thanks for your kind words and the sixer, Marv. Much appreciated. This one took more time than I expected for so short a poem! Best wishes, Tony

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

What an interesting format! I never heard of it. The story is rather "dark." I'm guessing he was killed by the loan shark? I had to look up "dirk" which rhymes perfectly with "work." Thanks for introducing another fascinating form.

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2017

Thanks for your kind words, Helen. Much appreciated. This one took more time than I expected for so short a poem! I tried to leave the interpretation a little bit open so it could be taken to be the loan shark as the killer, or possibly the victim committing suicide.

Comment from Brittany phelps jones

Exceptional

I am loving the darkness and descriptive word play that you used in this poem. I am also intrigued with the talent and genius it took to create such an in depth look at this person with so few lines. Great job TFawcus I look forward to reading more of your work.

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2017

Thanks for your kind words and the sixer, Brittany. Much appreciated. This one took more time than I expected for so short a poem! All the best, Tony.

Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

The last person you wanna borrow money from is a loan shark with a sharp dagger who's ready to kill without conscience, Tony.
If you do, you'd better make darn sure that you pay them back, and on time, too!
Thanks for introducing me to yet another form of poetry.
I enjoyed reading this englyn unodl union form of Scottish/Welsh poetry.
Very different.
~Dean

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2017

Thanks for your kind words, Dean. Much appreciated. This one took more time than I expected for so short a poem! These Celts are a bloodthirsty lot it seems!

reply by Dean Kuch on 05-Jul-2017

You're more than welcome, Tony.

Comment from damommy

Excellent

Sounds a very complicated form, but you've seemingly mastered it.

I like the use of 'dirk' and 'dirty work' says a lot by itself. Of course, I don't read Welsh, although I've always wanted to ever since I read the book, 'How Green Was My Valley.' I understand it a very hard language.

I'm glad you found this form and shared your work with us. 8-)

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2017

Thanks for your kind words, Yvonne. Much appreciated. This one took more time than I expected for so short a poem! Perhaps they are easier in Welsh - but that is well out of the ball park as far as I'm concerned! Best wishes, Tony.