Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

Hello my friend

Great chapter about the miracle of birth and also about adoption. The detail is realistic and the plot is engaging. Very well done, party.

Gypsy hugs

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 04-Jul-2017

Hi Gypsy;
thank you so much for your kind and thoughtful review,

~patty~

Comment from Mrs Happy Poet

Excellent

Hello my friend this must have been a hard decision for your friend but having the adoptive parents their at the birth would give her reassurance that all was going to be ok your friend is a very strong person a beautiful story regards Jill

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 03-Jul-2017

Hi Jill; thank you for the lovely review. I tell my friend that she did a wonderful thing all the time. The rest of her story will be coming in parts - I think the end result will surprise you,

~patty~

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Glad you're writing this, Patty. This is the prequel to the one you did for the Call contest, right? I think this is a great way to do it and what a joy it is for the adoptive parents to be at the delivery!

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 03-Jul-2017

Hi there; yup, this is indeed part of that same story. I'm going to do the parts out of order - I think it makes the reader more mindful of what's going on, and for me - the writer, I will have to make sure each part is a complete stand alone story,

~patty~

Comment from Thomas Bowling

Excellent

This is very good, but I would like to see more dialog. That's just me. Do with it what you will. I write a lot of scripts so I'm prejudiced.

You change your profile picture more often than I change my socks, which is about twice a week.

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 03-Jul-2017

Hi Thomas; thank you so much for stopping by to read and review. Since I relied so heavily on dialogue in my last piece, I wanted to vary it a bit in this one. Is there too much telling? Or, do you think you are just used to more dialogue?

(thanks for noticing that I change my profile pic - for some reason, FanStory keeps erasing what I have - so I change it!)

~patty~

Comment from Hansel1

Excellent

A touching story. I can imagine being put in a tough position, carrying a child that you already know you will be giving up. While relief comes by way of knowing the integrity of the parents adopting the baby, it can still be difficult knowing you are creating life essentially for someone else. Thank you for sharing this story with us Patty - Cheers!

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 03-Jul-2017

Thank you for the lovely review.

~patty~

Comment from rtobaygo

Excellent

Good morning, Patty

Out of sixes.

Heart-felt story. I can only imagine the excitement/worry of taking a young mother to the hospital. It's a shame she was treated the way she was by many of the medical staff. The wife and I never experienced the rush to the hospital as are children were delivered by C sections. Enjoyed.

Take care and stay safe,

Ray

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 03-Jul-2017

Hi Ray; thank you so much for reading and reviewing this piece. I'm glad you enjoyed it and found it worthy of the virtual six.

~patty~

Comment from nancy_e_davis

Excellent

People are always so quick to judge. Why is that? Could it be they are happy to know they are not the only sinners in the room? This is a real to life story. You did a good job my friend. Nancy

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 03-Jul-2017

Hi Nancy; thank you so much for the lovely review. I don't think my friend has ever really recovered from the shame she felt at that time. I've known her for over ten years, and she just shared this story a few weeks ago.

~patty~

Comment from TAB_that's me

Excellent

Sometimes adoption is for the best for the baby and the birth mother. It is a happy day for the adoptive parents.

Truly enjoyed your short story. Well written. No spag.

teresa

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 03-Jul-2017

Hi Teresa; thank you so much for the lovely review. I totally agree - adoption is the best solution in some cases,

~patty~

Comment from Rasmine

Excellent

Patty, :)

I talked to two mothers who said that they can still feel pain in the area where the epidural was administered. Is that true? Does that happen a lot?

I regret not having kids, but not the pain, LOL.

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 03-Jul-2017

Hi there; I never had an epidural - that's why I had to give the definition from a website. I had both my children without any pain killers - my friend didn't mention that she still suffers any pain. I know the needle is big, and if it is administered incorrectly, I can imagine it would be painful for the rest of one's life,

~patty~

Comment from JDRBAR

Excellent

This is as heartbreaking as it is wonderful. I know I could never have given any of my five away at birth. (That feeling didn't come until they became teens LOL). And, you have to be just as happy for Rita in her desire to raise someone's baby as her own. Great story.

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 03-Jul-2017

Hi there; thank you for reviewing this story. It was hard to write this from my friend's memories - as I was a bit overwhelmed when she shared her story with me. I only hope I can do it justice,

~patty~

reply by JDRBAR on 03-Jul-2017

You did it justice

reply by the author on 03-Jul-2017

thank you!