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A Trump Tyburn20 total reviews
Comment from sharonlshelley
i like this little donald trump poem as it basically sums it all up the wording and the picture reflected well. thanks for sharing your work with u Sharon
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2017
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i like this little donald trump poem as it basically sums it all up the wording and the picture reflected well. thanks for sharing your work with u Sharon
Comment Written 04-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2017
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Hi Sharon, Thanls for your review and yes I was pleased to find this image to accompany the tyburn. glad to share Cheers
Comment from Rasmine
Hello, :)
I don't know if these are really rhyming words: raging I see raging as rhyming with staging, acting rhyming with combating, ranting with panting, raving with craving.
I'm not saying I don't like it but just not really rhyming. I simply love the last two lines, though!
I wish you luck in the contest. (I don't really write too much poetry so I may be wrong).
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2017
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Hello, :)
I don't know if these are really rhyming words: raging I see raging as rhyming with staging, acting rhyming with combating, ranting with panting, raving with craving.
I'm not saying I don't like it but just not really rhyming. I simply love the last two lines, though!
I wish you luck in the contest. (I don't really write too much poetry so I may be wrong).
Comment Written 04-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2017
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Hi Rasmone Ha ha you may just be right so ,au have to review again and make some subtle changes. Perhaps I'll try again LOL Cheers anyway for your support
Comment from marybell1
I enjoyed reading your tyburn poem "Twitter Tweet". All you lines were correct except for line five. I could only count eight syllables. If you wrote Trump is - I think that would make nine syllables. I could be wrong so you may wish to review this.
Best of luck.
Marybell1.
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2017
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I enjoyed reading your tyburn poem "Twitter Tweet". All you lines were correct except for line five. I could only count eight syllables. If you wrote Trump is - I think that would make nine syllables. I could be wrong so you may wish to review this.
Best of luck.
Marybell1.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2017
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Hi Marybell1 Thanls for your review .I originally had Trump is really ....... but was informed that the word ' really' has 3 syllables so I checked on syllable counter and it said it had three also So i can only have 4 syllables before the others. I think then I do have 9 syllables in line 5 bit thanks for your help much appreciated. Cheers
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These pronunciations confuse me no end. That is why I suggest that you look into it as I have been caught.
Best of luck.
Marybell1.
Comment from Thesis
You've captured the essence of the leader of the free world, who is desperately trying to have the USA remove itself as the lead nation in the world, so he can capitalize on profits from his businesses. It doesn't seem that he cares for right or wrong, he just appears to want to tell everyone and everything to go to hell, since he won.
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2017
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You've captured the essence of the leader of the free world, who is desperately trying to have the USA remove itself as the lead nation in the world, so he can capitalize on profits from his businesses. It doesn't seem that he cares for right or wrong, he just appears to want to tell everyone and everything to go to hell, since he won.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2017
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Hi Thesis. Thanks for reading and reviewing my tyburn A bit of fun doing this as it is but he is not and he seems to be getting worse . We shall just have to wait and see Hmmm Cheers
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I's a crazy world when the most powerful man in it is doing this! I despair for the young people seeing such crazy acts and wonder who should they look up to? A poignant write, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2017
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I's a crazy world when the most powerful man in it is doing this! I despair for the young people seeing such crazy acts and wonder who should they look up to? A poignant write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 03-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2017
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Hi Dolly, Thanks for your review but have had to change a couple of my words to meet the contest requirements All the 4 lines have to rhyme so have included Ranting and acting and taken out crazy and wacky and hope it reads similar to the original LOL Cheers
Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Writer,
This is a humorous tyburn for the poetry contest, and should do well, but I would like to offer a couple of small suggestions, if I may?
1.) Trump is really raving, raging, bad
--> I don't think the comma after 'raging' is needed.
2.) Not behaving Crazy, Wacky, mad.
--> currently, you are saying that Trump is NOT behaving that way. A bit of punctuation between the phrases might help -- if you are trying to say what I think you are...? (as below:)
--> Not behaving(;) Crazy, Wacky, mad.
--> I also do not think those words in the last line need capitalization. The others aren't... right?
Thanks and good luck!
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2017
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Dear Mystery Writer,
This is a humorous tyburn for the poetry contest, and should do well, but I would like to offer a couple of small suggestions, if I may?
1.) Trump is really raving, raging, bad
--> I don't think the comma after 'raging' is needed.
2.) Not behaving Crazy, Wacky, mad.
--> currently, you are saying that Trump is NOT behaving that way. A bit of punctuation between the phrases might help -- if you are trying to say what I think you are...? (as below:)
--> Not behaving(;) Crazy, Wacky, mad.
--> I also do not think those words in the last line need capitalization. The others aren't... right?
Thanks and good luck!
Comment Written 03-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2017
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Hi Robyn, Thanks for your review and suggestions have corrected that also apparently really is 3 syllables so have changed that also Cheers
Comment from HarryT
I love your poem. It is so scary that a person of his ilk could hold the highest office in our land. He is a true embarrassment to not only Republicans but to all who consider themselves good citizens. However, I think there is a problem with the line "Trump is really raving, raging, bad" I believe the line has 10 syllables. Really has three syllables.
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2017
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I love your poem. It is so scary that a person of his ilk could hold the highest office in our land. He is a true embarrassment to not only Republicans but to all who consider themselves good citizens. However, I think there is a problem with the line "Trump is really raving, raging, bad" I believe the line has 10 syllables. Really has three syllables.
Comment Written 03-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2017
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Hi HarryT Thanks for your review and I think a lot would agree he seems to be getting worse very Over the top with behaviour Have corrected to Trumps really, cut out the is Thanks for that and Cheers for your help
Comment from Tod Moran
I like this, very well done, especially considering the rules, hard to do.
I might transpose is and really to read really is, but that only a suggestion. The pic is very well chosen, adds to the work.
Nicely done.
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2017
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I like this, very well done, especially considering the rules, hard to do.
I might transpose is and really to read really is, but that only a suggestion. The pic is very well chosen, adds to the work.
Nicely done.
Comment Written 03-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2017
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Hi Tod, Thanks for your time to read and review my Tyburn entry and yes I have changed the wording slightly and left off the is as Really has three syllables Cheers
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written Tyburn poem you have penned for the contest. I did not see anything on President Trump lately. I try to avoid world news and focus more on hometown stuff. Very good wording and imagery. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2017
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This is a very well written Tyburn poem you have penned for the contest. I did not see anything on President Trump lately. I try to avoid world news and focus more on hometown stuff. Very good wording and imagery. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
Comment Written 03-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2017
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Hi Teri. thanks for your review . I am afraid he lends himself to satire at times. Tweeting ridiculous images of hime beating up a journo ( 10 year old image but he tweeted it this week. He is so uncool for a President . Thanks for your best wishes We shall see Ha Ha, Cheers
Comment from Mustang Patty
thank you for sharing this well written tyburn about the twitter master. He seems to not realize how childish this behavior is, and I believe it will be his downfall. I wish you well in the contest,
~patty~
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reply by the author on 03-Jul-2017
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thank you for sharing this well written tyburn about the twitter master. He seems to not realize how childish this behavior is, and I believe it will be his downfall. I wish you well in the contest,
~patty~
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Comment Written 03-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2017
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Hi Patty, Thanks for your review. I tend to agree with you. He seems to be getting worse. How sad for America Cheers
