Travesty of Justice
Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "No Escaping the Past"Two people accused of a crime they didn't commit.
13 total reviews
Comment from Ricky1024
"Nice Short Script piece."
Great Theme as well as Imagery.'
"Flowed well and was loaded with info and goodies!"
No grammar issues."
{I Think?}
"Adjective Content is Important giving this Piece fantastic,
Descriptive Measures.'
'Nice Objective Content, too."
"Complete Synopsis-*****
" A fine write.'
Thanks,
Ricky1024.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2017
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"Nice Short Script piece."
Great Theme as well as Imagery.'
"Flowed well and was loaded with info and goodies!"
No grammar issues."
{I Think?}
"Adjective Content is Important giving this Piece fantastic,
Descriptive Measures.'
'Nice Objective Content, too."
"Complete Synopsis-*****
" A fine write.'
Thanks,
Ricky1024.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2017
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Thank you for your wonderful review, I'm so glad you enjoyed it. It wasn't meant to be written as a script, but I guess it did turn out that way. That's what watching years of Law and Order does to you, lol.
Thanks again for your review and your kind words, take care.
Comment from smudge
I like it. I like the amount of dialogue in the story. It is almost like a movie script. The flow of the words is excellent and believable. I like the technical bits. I find the internal dialogue using the first person a little unconventional.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2017
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I like it. I like the amount of dialogue in the story. It is almost like a movie script. The flow of the words is excellent and believable. I like the technical bits. I find the internal dialogue using the first person a little unconventional.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2017
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Thanks for the great review I'm glad you liked it. First person POV is a little unconventional but chose it because I wanted to give the readers a different take on a story I'm sorry you found it to be a bit odd.
Thanks again for your wonderful review, take care.
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
I'm walking aimlessly around the house trying to find something to pass the time. I've already cleaned the place top to bottom. Some places I scrubbed twice.
I start watching TV and soon discover the only thing on is soaps. Who needs to watch drama, when I have so much in my life as it is? Throwing the remote on the couch, I start looking for something to read.
I notice a sedan parked in front of the house as I walk by the window. Uncertain about what I just saw, I slowly turn around. That's the same car that's been following me through town, I think, staring out the window.
A vague memory of the same car flashes through my mind. I know I've seen that vehicle somewhere else, but where? I start racking my brain, trying to picture the surrounds.
No, it can't be, it just can't be the same one. I think, glancing at the SUV again. The memory starts becoming clearer as I continue to stare. How can that possibly be?
I recall trying to get away when the SUV blocks me in. I then see the driver climb out of the car with a large gun in his hands.
He found me, he finally found me, I think, collapsing on the floor....'
WOW! This is brilliant writing. Follow your writing dream because you write in a fantastic and punchy way that I really enjoy I saw no errors nor need for change.Well done. kindest regards Meia xx
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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2017
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I'm walking aimlessly around the house trying to find something to pass the time. I've already cleaned the place top to bottom. Some places I scrubbed twice.
I start watching TV and soon discover the only thing on is soaps. Who needs to watch drama, when I have so much in my life as it is? Throwing the remote on the couch, I start looking for something to read.
I notice a sedan parked in front of the house as I walk by the window. Uncertain about what I just saw, I slowly turn around. That's the same car that's been following me through town, I think, staring out the window.
A vague memory of the same car flashes through my mind. I know I've seen that vehicle somewhere else, but where? I start racking my brain, trying to picture the surrounds.
No, it can't be, it just can't be the same one. I think, glancing at the SUV again. The memory starts becoming clearer as I continue to stare. How can that possibly be?
I recall trying to get away when the SUV blocks me in. I then see the driver climb out of the car with a large gun in his hands.
He found me, he finally found me, I think, collapsing on the floor....'
WOW! This is brilliant writing. Follow your writing dream because you write in a fantastic and punchy way that I really enjoy I saw no errors nor need for change.Well done. kindest regards Meia xx
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2017
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Thank you so much for such a fantastic review and for all of your encouragement. It's reviews like this that make all the hard work well worth it.
Thank you again for all your support, I really do appreciate it. Take care.
