Repressed Emotions
A Cuarderna Via poem - see notes below35 total reviews
Comment from bichonfrisegirl
Fabulous and creative poem, Tony! I love the whole 'slightly bent' vibe that emanates from this write. Ya, repressed emotions are not a good thing. :)
Perfect pairing of picture and poem. Terrific imagery especially with "Restraint like learnt convention, I'm like an insect pinned, a museum specimen, become frail and brittle-skinned". I absolutely love your strong concluding line as it infers that this person is just teetering on the edge.
Thanks for introducing me to a new form of poetry. I love the mono-rhyming in each stanza. ~ ~ Connie
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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Fabulous and creative poem, Tony! I love the whole 'slightly bent' vibe that emanates from this write. Ya, repressed emotions are not a good thing. :)
Perfect pairing of picture and poem. Terrific imagery especially with "Restraint like learnt convention, I'm like an insect pinned, a museum specimen, become frail and brittle-skinned". I absolutely love your strong concluding line as it infers that this person is just teetering on the edge.
Thanks for introducing me to a new form of poetry. I love the mono-rhyming in each stanza. ~ ~ Connie
Comment Written 30-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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Very many thanks for reviewing this, Connie. You understood exactly what I was driving at! I appreciate your kind words and the six stars. Tony
Comment from pipersfancy
You've hit a bit of a raw nerve with this one, Tony--but then, we won't talk about it now, will we? So many great lines in this piece! This one leapt off the page for me:
With hesitating footsteps, I have sometimes almost sinned.
Loved the notes on the form! I always learn something new from you!
pf
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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You've hit a bit of a raw nerve with this one, Tony--but then, we won't talk about it now, will we? So many great lines in this piece! This one leapt off the page for me:
With hesitating footsteps, I have sometimes almost sinned.
Loved the notes on the form! I always learn something new from you!
pf
Comment Written 30-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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Thanks for another lovely six star review, Christina. Very much appreciated. That line which you picked out seems to have been one that struck home for many! All the best, Tony.
Comment from estory
This is a great poem of inhibitions, told in a solemn voice, in a subdued meter, with a sturdy rhyme scheme and great images. I loved the image of the insect pinned, I thought that was really original and hit the theme right on the head. It's harder and harder to come up with those. I liked the hesitations of the language, the reaching without getting anywhere, the starting stopping, I think that was a good use of form; creating these sentences that start us out towards something that becomes unrealized. The brain holds back the heart, hope is held back by fear, the habitual becomes a cage of our life. Interesting piece that tells it like it is. estory
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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This is a great poem of inhibitions, told in a solemn voice, in a subdued meter, with a sturdy rhyme scheme and great images. I loved the image of the insect pinned, I thought that was really original and hit the theme right on the head. It's harder and harder to come up with those. I liked the hesitations of the language, the reaching without getting anywhere, the starting stopping, I think that was a good use of form; creating these sentences that start us out towards something that becomes unrealized. The brain holds back the heart, hope is held back by fear, the habitual becomes a cage of our life. Interesting piece that tells it like it is. estory
Comment Written 30-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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It is a rare pleasure to receive such a detailed analytical review. Thank you very much!
Comment from Mustang Patty
thank you for sharing this whimsical look at life and the temptations of ice cream. Within the words of your poem, I could feel the repressed emotions we all feel at times, and our love of sweet release,
~patty~
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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thank you for sharing this whimsical look at life and the temptations of ice cream. Within the words of your poem, I could feel the repressed emotions we all feel at times, and our love of sweet release,
~patty~
Comment Written 30-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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Very many thanks for reviewing this, Patty. I appreciate your kind words! Tony
Comment from Mitchell Brontė
No one comes close to you Tony in stitching language together to paint a picture ,I loved all alliterations, the dense thicket of sounds carefully woven in this piece. I think the images were excellent as well, love the abstract expressionist sense of caution as metaphors for moods and personality.
Mitchell
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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No one comes close to you Tony in stitching language together to paint a picture ,I loved all alliterations, the dense thicket of sounds carefully woven in this piece. I think the images were excellent as well, love the abstract expressionist sense of caution as metaphors for moods and personality.
Mitchell
Comment Written 30-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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Many thanks for reviewing this, Mitchell. I appreciate your very kind words and the six stars! "Dense thicket of sounds" - I like it! Tony
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Hello my friend this again is well written you done very well with the rhyming and I love the closing Mr whippy rings I scream who wouldn't for ice cream well done again my friend regards Jill
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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Hello my friend this again is well written you done very well with the rhyming and I love the closing Mr whippy rings I scream who wouldn't for ice cream well done again my friend regards Jill
Comment Written 30-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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Very many thanks for reviewing this, Jill. I appreciate the kind words of a fellow ice cream lover! Tony
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem according to your notes. A very different poem format than the usual ones I learned so far. There are very few people who can resist a soft serve ice-cream.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2017
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A very well-written poem according to your notes. A very different poem format than the usual ones I learned so far. There are very few people who can resist a soft serve ice-cream.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2017
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Thank you, Sandra. Nothing like a bit of ice-cream on a hot day! Tony
Comment from Asem.inspirations
Hello Fawcus,
This is a very well written poem. I enjoyed this rhythm and flow beat that it has. This causes a moving feeling during the reading of it. It also makes the story of the poem very interesting. Thank you also for your usual education in you r Arthur notes and I am happy that you explained what "Mr. Whimpy" was. I now understand that last line. At first I thought you meant that the phone was ringing. (lol)
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2017
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Hello Fawcus,
This is a very well written poem. I enjoyed this rhythm and flow beat that it has. This causes a moving feeling during the reading of it. It also makes the story of the poem very interesting. Thank you also for your usual education in you r Arthur notes and I am happy that you explained what "Mr. Whimpy" was. I now understand that last line. At first I thought you meant that the phone was ringing. (lol)
Comment Written 30-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2017
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Thanks, Tier. I enjoyed reading your review. Tony
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I can identify with this poem Tony, we sometimes robotically go through life doing what we do and hide our true feelings when we see things that we dislike, we are civilised and quell our desire to express the truth, we are neutralised in a certain way, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2017
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I can identify with this poem Tony, we sometimes robotically go through life doing what we do and hide our true feelings when we see things that we dislike, we are civilised and quell our desire to express the truth, we are neutralised in a certain way, love Dolly x
Comment Written 30-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2017
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Thanks, Dolly. You are right - social conventions can become somewhat repressive at times. Tony
Comment from IndianaIrish
Wow, Tony! Ou alwys create such entertains and enjoyable poetry from complex forms. This is a delight to read, and I appreciate your notes to explain the format. As alwys your words create stunning imagery for the reader, and absolutely loved the final verse. Your talent is awesome.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2017
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Wow, Tony! Ou alwys create such entertains and enjoyable poetry from complex forms. This is a delight to read, and I appreciate your notes to explain the format. As alwys your words create stunning imagery for the reader, and absolutely loved the final verse. Your talent is awesome.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment Written 30-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2017
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A lovely review, Karyn, and thank you so much for these kind words and the six stars. Best wishes, Tony
