Repressed Emotions
A Cuarderna Via poem - see notes below35 total reviews
Comment from rosehill (Wendy)
I felt that I was riding the Dr. Doolittle Push-Me-Pull-You as I read through your societal and self-inflicted hesitations and regrets. It is a wonderful depiction of how we hold ourselves back. A wonderful display of our mental conflicts regardless of the form (which you seem to have done to perfection). A confessional of having lusted for a freer life, and a confession of failure all in one. Your opposites are heartbreaking, but the smile at the end as we scream for our ice cream truck coming is priceless. - Wendy
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2017
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I felt that I was riding the Dr. Doolittle Push-Me-Pull-You as I read through your societal and self-inflicted hesitations and regrets. It is a wonderful depiction of how we hold ourselves back. A wonderful display of our mental conflicts regardless of the form (which you seem to have done to perfection). A confessional of having lusted for a freer life, and a confession of failure all in one. Your opposites are heartbreaking, but the smile at the end as we scream for our ice cream truck coming is priceless. - Wendy
Comment Written 05-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2017
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Thanks, Wendy. I'm gradually working through a backlog of reviews. My wife had a shoulder reconstruction recently and so I am spending rather a lot of time doing up buttons, being domestic, battling the gardens and looking after the B&B at the moment, all at the expense of idling on FanStory!
I enjoyed your Dr Doolittle allusion. I used to live on the outskirts of Castle Combe ('the prettiest village in England', according to brochures!), where the book was filmed years ago.
Thanks, too, for your other interesting comments and the six stars. Much appreciated, as always. Best wishes, Tony.
Comment from w.j.debi
You create some great imagery in your verse. The excitement and fear of adventuring out and following your heart's desire come through, but faint never wins in the end.
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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You create some great imagery in your verse. The excitement and fear of adventuring out and following your heart's desire come through, but faint never wins in the end.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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Very many thanks for reviewing this, WJ. I appreciate your kind words! Tony
Comment from rspoet
Maybe, repressed emotions, but certainly not a repressed poem
It is interesting how forms bend across national lines
I enjoyed the fourteen syllables and the mono-rhyme
But even better are the last two lines.
I'll leave it at that.
Wish I had a six left for you
RS
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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Maybe, repressed emotions, but certainly not a repressed poem
It is interesting how forms bend across national lines
I enjoyed the fourteen syllables and the mono-rhyme
But even better are the last two lines.
I'll leave it at that.
Wish I had a six left for you
RS
Comment Written 01-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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Very many thanks for reviewing this, RS. I appreciate your kind words! Tony
Comment from Pantygynt
Hola, ole, por favor, vinho verdi and grassy arse make up the sum total of my Spanish. So I could manage one line in the near original language. You have done brilliantly with a form that would be difficult in the language for which it was designed. In English it is easy to see why the Spanish Inquisition was necessary in those days.
As for the content it is so clever as to be almost indecent, the last line of S1 is brilliant as is the concept of almost sinning. Typically RC that one.
I will take this as a birthday present. Thank you.
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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Hola, ole, por favor, vinho verdi and grassy arse make up the sum total of my Spanish. So I could manage one line in the near original language. You have done brilliantly with a form that would be difficult in the language for which it was designed. In English it is easy to see why the Spanish Inquisition was necessary in those days.
As for the content it is so clever as to be almost indecent, the last line of S1 is brilliant as is the concept of almost sinning. Typically RC that one.
I will take this as a birthday present. Thank you.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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Ha! Ha! I should be intrigued to read a poem from you incorporating all your Spanish vocabulary. Sounds like a picnic, with a good bottle of rotgut and a potentially willing senorita!
Yes, 'almost sinning' is very much in the news these days, with the cloud that hangs over Cardinal Pell.
Many thanks for the six stars. They are a gratifying reward! I hadn't expected the form to be that difficult, but then no-one expects the Spanish Inquisition!
Comment from Irish Rain
This is wonderful. Seems I remember Mr. Whippy. Love the picture of Mrs. Cleaver. I have had that for dinner many times, ha ha. Love the phrase...'I have, sometimes, almost sinned'....there is a wistfulness for wildness in that. Just over-all great!!! Blessings....
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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This is wonderful. Seems I remember Mr. Whippy. Love the picture of Mrs. Cleaver. I have had that for dinner many times, ha ha. Love the phrase...'I have, sometimes, almost sinned'....there is a wistfulness for wildness in that. Just over-all great!!! Blessings....
Comment Written 30-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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Many thanks for reviewing this, Judy. I appreciate your very kind words and the six stars! Tony
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You're most welcome!!
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
I enjoy the story attached to the poem, Tony, and learning about New forms you often come up with. I thought the poem wording was very clever and a reference back to the 60s when the housewives were housewives and couldn't talk about anything else other than children et cetera. Going back to work stirs up the embers of the brain I feel. Lovely poem and very interesting notes, Giddy
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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I enjoy the story attached to the poem, Tony, and learning about New forms you often come up with. I thought the poem wording was very clever and a reference back to the 60s when the housewives were housewives and couldn't talk about anything else other than children et cetera. Going back to work stirs up the embers of the brain I feel. Lovely poem and very interesting notes, Giddy
Comment Written 30-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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Very many thanks for reviewing this, Giddy. I appreciate your kind words! Tony
Comment from lalajovanoski
Hello my dear friend, I very much enjoyed reading this beautifully written piece. I think that the content is great and the message is very strong and full of emotion. The alliteration is great throughout a nice flow. Thank you very much for sharing this. God bless you with love la
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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Hello my dear friend, I very much enjoyed reading this beautifully written piece. I think that the content is great and the message is very strong and full of emotion. The alliteration is great throughout a nice flow. Thank you very much for sharing this. God bless you with love la
Comment Written 30-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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Very many thanks for reviewing this, Lala. I appreciate your kind words! Tony
Comment from Pullmanspb
Well, I learned a lot about Spanish poetry I never knew existed.
Reminds me of my wife: asked her if she ever got in trouble for acting out in school, and she hadn't.
What I liked about the poem was its subtlety. Is the person thinking of having an affair? Is he thinking of doing something totally outlandish?
Fun
Steven
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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Well, I learned a lot about Spanish poetry I never knew existed.
Reminds me of my wife: asked her if she ever got in trouble for acting out in school, and she hadn't.
What I liked about the poem was its subtlety. Is the person thinking of having an affair? Is he thinking of doing something totally outlandish?
Fun
Steven
Comment Written 30-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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Very many thanks for reviewing this, Steven. I enjoyed your intriguing questions! I suspect that most repressed people have the odd outlandish dream! Tony
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Once again, I enjoyed reading your poem. It flowed smoothly. I have often wondered if back in the day if most problems were hidden or if they ignored them, or do we have more problems today??/
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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Once again, I enjoyed reading your poem. It flowed smoothly. I have often wondered if back in the day if most problems were hidden or if they ignored them, or do we have more problems today??/
Comment Written 30-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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Very many thanks for reviewing this, Barbara. I appreciate your kind words and interesting comment. Perhaps life has become rather more complicated now that so many boundaries have been removed. Tony
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for introducing me to this Spanish form. I admired the regular, fourteen syllable-lines of hemistiches, in mono-rhymed quatrains. Your description of lifelong emotions is compelling and your "insect" simile is quite effective as well. Sighs- Joan
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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Thank you for introducing me to this Spanish form. I admired the regular, fourteen syllable-lines of hemistiches, in mono-rhymed quatrains. Your description of lifelong emotions is compelling and your "insect" simile is quite effective as well. Sighs- Joan
Comment Written 30-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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Very many thanks for reviewing this, Joan. I appreciate your kind words! Tony
