Comment from Rasmine

Excellent

Hehe!

Patty, good luck in the contest. I was going to enter that, maybe I will or won't. LOL! Right now, I'm trying to write a ghost story for a contest.

This is adorable. Do you have a cat, too?

:)

Patty, how did you get the Reaper on the side for being an active reviewer?

Take care,
Nome

 Comment Written 27-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 27-Jun-2017

Hi there; I'm so glad you enjoyed the conversation between my dogs. No, at the present time, I do not have a cat - not sure if Howie and Bernie would allow that.

I have the Reaper in my signature because I'm currently the #1 Reviewer - I have been since April or so. (Lots and lots of reading - why I have so many member dollars to promote my stuff to the top of the page.)

~patty~

Comment from apky

Excellent

"I'm afraid(,) dear Bernie(,) that our ideas of something fun are drastically different."

"But, Howie, you have those little teeth on the bottom that stick out in front of the others. I always wonder how you can even chew your food."

"Hey Howie! Looks like the Mistress is done on the screen thingy. Let's go ask for a treat. Will you do that thing where you wave your feet in the air? She likes that."

The above two paragraphs really set me off.

Thanks, Howie and Bernie - you two are a treat.

Aki :)

 Comment Written 27-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 27-Jun-2017

Hi Aki; thank you so much for reading this bit of fun. I went and made the edit - I struggled with that sentence.

I appreciate your kind words, and I passed along the compliment to Howie and Bernie,

~patty~

Comment from Tod Moran

Good

It meets the requirements and does tell a story but there are some problems.
"What's wrong wid the way I look?" wid Typo, computer error?
Not sure if hansum and wid are deliberate. If so, and an example of slurred speech, then there should be more in the dialogue, to avoid the question being raised in the reader's mind.
"But you were happy when I came to live with you? Right?" suggests he can talk clearly and correctly.
The timing at the start is confusing. They just woke up but an hour has passed?


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 Comment Written 27-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 27-Jun-2017

Hi Tod; thank you for reading. There are two dogs speaking to each other. One does talk clearly and correctly and the other uses slurred speech and contractions. I will go and look at the timing.

I do appreciate your time,

~patty~

Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear

Excellent

This speaks how intelligently, consciously Bernie and Howie plan for asking for a treat from their Mistress the writer at the right moment; they are aware of Mistress's moods; I liked.

 Comment Written 27-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 27-Jun-2017

thank you

Comment from humpwhistle

Excellent

Maybe it's just me, Patty, but I struggle with an all-dialogue
piece between dogs. I know we treat our pets like humans.
But do we really think they communicate in English? Using
current idioms?
Again, it's just me, but I put animals on a higher plane.

Best of luck.

Lee

 Comment Written 27-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 27-Jun-2017

I totally agree with you Lee, but I needed to have some fun with my writing this morning, and this was the idea I came up with. Bernie is quite insulted right now - he insists he uses better grammar.

~patty~

reply by humpwhistle on 27-Jun-2017

My sincere apologies, Bernie. Your grammar is impeccable! As is your grooming. Lee

reply by the author on 27-Jun-2017

LOL!!! Bernie feels much better now.

Comment from Thomas Bowling

Excellent

I see you progressed to not only talking TO your dogs, now, you're talking FOR your dogs. You really should see someone. Not a dog therapist. Good luck in the contest.

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 Comment Written 27-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 27-Jun-2017

I wanted to make Howie have a real sarcastic potty mouth. But, I was afraid I might offend some readers. I do see someone. His name is Ralph. He lives in a big dog house down the road. He is a dog therapist and I only have to give him some good soup bones for payment.

You don't expect me to see a human that I would have to pay with money, do you? (I don't think he would take member dollars.)

*smile*

~patty~