Comment from marybell1

Excellent

I enjoyed reading your cinquain "Down the Rabbit Hole". You kept to all the rules of this genre, though you told a sad story and I liked your picture which suggested spiring down.
Best of luck.
Marybell1.

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2017

Thank you so much for the lovely and thoughtful review,

~patty~

Comment from Waishali Deshmukh

Exceptional

This is simply great. The image of rabbit hole aptly conveys the unending thought process of mind. Its really interesting that most of the times we go on thinking and thinking and find nothing. You have captured the thought so beautifully.

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2017

thank you so much for this lovely and thoughtful review. Your six star rating means a great deal to me,

~patty~

Comment from Sankey

Excellent

Good one, mate. I can relate to this at times. We all have our bad days. I get a bit tired of all the "positive, positive" thinking when we all know there is so much negative around us, everday. Great picture as well.

 Comment Written 27-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2017

thank you for the lovely and thoughtful review. You are so right - the constant negativity in the world makes it a bit hard to be positive,

~patty~

Comment from cupa tea

Excellent

Really odd photo you picked to go along with your poem. I understand the idea...it just seems strange to me. Good luck in the contest if this is for one.

 Comment Written 27-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2017

thank you so much for the review. I appreciate your time to read,

~patty~

Comment from Ben Colder

Excellent

Interesting concept of poetry. Must try it one day. I find nothing wrong. Strong wording. Well done. Interesting picture as well.

 Comment Written 27-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2017

thank you so much for the kind and thoughtful review. I do hope you will try the cinquaine - it is a fun format to work with,

~patty~

Comment from Curly Girly

Excellent

This is an excellent little poem about despair.

Darkness

Surrounding me

Spiraling to the depths

Pulling me way down till there is

Nothing

The weird thing is that I see this poem falls under 'self-improvement poetry'. I could not find the hope I expected. Nothing--hopeless.

 Comment Written 27-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2017

Hi CG; thank you so much for your review; I always have a problem putting my work into a 'category.' I think I meant 'self-improvement' for me - because writing the poem helped to lift me out of the depression,

~patty~

Comment from krys123

Excellent

Patty;
-a very well and exceptionally constructed cinquain that includes a well-placed picture with the words in the picture develop a universal theme that is one of depression. Words like spiraling, down and nothing are all used in this depressive wording which helps formulate the theme.
-"If despair was part of our life it would have been made in every bloom."(krysyna)
-thanks for sharing and take care and have a good one especially with those that you love and care for dearly.
Alex

 Comment Written 27-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 27-Jun-2017

Hi Alex; thank you so much for reading and reviewing. I'm glad you got so much from this poem. It was one of those writes that came from a particularly bad day,

~patty~

reply by krys123 on 03-Jul-2017

You're very welcome, Patty, and take care and have a good one.
Alex

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

This pull can be out own undoing as we fall into the human quagmire of depression, where there seems to be no turning back, a dark and desperate write, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 27-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 27-Jun-2017

Hi Dolly; thank you so much for reading and reviewing this somewhat dark piece. I'm feeling much better now,

~patty~

Comment from Mrs Happy Poet

Excellent

This is well written my friend and it has a dark feel I think myself this I how a person feels when they are depressed falling so low they cannot escape the circumstances well done regards Jill

 Comment Written 27-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 27-Jun-2017

Hi Jill; thank you so much for the lovely review and thoughts on this poem. It was written while I was down, but I'm feeling much better now,

~patty~

Comment from ZainaSaif

Exceptional

This is a beautiful cinquain and deserves to be an all time best. I loved how you included the subject of your writing (the rabbit hole) but then only expressed it in your poem.
Great Job
Keep Writing,
-Zaina

 Comment Written 27-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 27-Jun-2017

Hi Zaina; thank you so much for the lovely review. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem. You are the only one that expressed how the title was merely reflected in the poem,

~patty~