Nevermore
Lost love11 total reviews
Comment from jaded831
I can understand why you won. Your poem has all the elements set forth for this contest. Your poem is truly outstanding. Great insight, graphic, and a great poem. You out did yourself with this one.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2017
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I can understand why you won. Your poem has all the elements set forth for this contest. Your poem is truly outstanding. Great insight, graphic, and a great poem. You out did yourself with this one.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2017
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Thank you so much for your kind words. Very much appreciated.
Comment from francesca7
I really love this poem. So insightful. Beautiful. I am new to the haiku style and I am always impressed by those who are able to translate their message with few words. Beautifully done. Best of luck! Francesca. Namaste
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2017
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I really love this poem. So insightful. Beautiful. I am new to the haiku style and I am always impressed by those who are able to translate their message with few words. Beautifully done. Best of luck! Francesca. Namaste
Comment Written 27-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2017
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Thank you so much. Your read and review is very much appreciated.
Comment from jusylee72
this is a descriptive and well-written haiku. I also like the use of alliteration. I love the disappearing footstep theme it is so real and ephemeral at the same time. Thank you.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2017
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this is a descriptive and well-written haiku. I also like the use of alliteration. I love the disappearing footstep theme it is so real and ephemeral at the same time. Thank you.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2017
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Thank you for your read and your review. Much appreciated.
Comment from Curly Girly
This verse sounds as if both of you passed away; when it is just your footprints that are over....
Waves curl upon shore
Washing away our footfalls
We are nevermore
Suggest:
Waves curl upon shore
Washing away our footfalls
THEY are never more
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2017
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This verse sounds as if both of you passed away; when it is just your footprints that are over....
Waves curl upon shore
Washing away our footfalls
We are nevermore
Suggest:
Waves curl upon shore
Washing away our footfalls
THEY are never more
Comment Written 26-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2017
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Actually, she walked out of my life. Thank you for your read and your review. Much appreciated. Like your suggestion, however.
Comment from Ricky1024
An ocean haiku contest entry.
The Theme was "Nevermore.'
The imagery was lost footprints in the sand.
Nevermore a breakup of love.
But Love can be reclaimed and those Footprints cast again.
Nice work here and good luck with this.
Ricky1024.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2017
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An ocean haiku contest entry.
The Theme was "Nevermore.'
The imagery was lost footprints in the sand.
Nevermore a breakup of love.
But Love can be reclaimed and those Footprints cast again.
Nice work here and good luck with this.
Ricky1024.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2017
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Thank you for your read and your review. Much appreciated. Yes, I agree, but it was new footprints with a different girl; and was careful not to walk too close to the ocean.
Comment from emptypage
Interesting take. Footprints... the poem with "it was then that I carried you"? That's what first occurred to me, but the two lovers' footprints obliterated is a much more palatable image. Nice.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2017
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Interesting take. Footprints... the poem with "it was then that I carried you"? That's what first occurred to me, but the two lovers' footprints obliterated is a much more palatable image. Nice.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2017
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Thank you for your read and your review. Much appreciated.
Comment from Beverly Botelho
I love this: the succinct, well-done poetry, the meaning, the photo itself. And the way it is an echo to "The Raven" is best of all. This is a strong poem which conveys so much in such a brief amount of words.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2017
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I love this: the succinct, well-done poetry, the meaning, the photo itself. And the way it is an echo to "The Raven" is best of all. This is a strong poem which conveys so much in such a brief amount of words.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2017
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Thank you for your read and your review. Much appreciated.
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Thank you for the read and your review. Much appreciated.
Comment from royowen
Ah footprints, one of my favourite pieces of artwork. I like your ocean haiku contest entry, when you leave writing behind, like the washed away footprints, your memory will be gone, but not the memory of them, well done, excellent satori, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2017
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Ah footprints, one of my favourite pieces of artwork. I like your ocean haiku contest entry, when you leave writing behind, like the washed away footprints, your memory will be gone, but not the memory of them, well done, excellent satori, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 26-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2017
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Thank you for your read and your review. Much appreciated.
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Welcome
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello my friend,
Nice haiku about lost love.
You have less than 17 syllables, two grammatically interconnected lines of concrete imagery, and a satori
Good job!
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2017
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Hello my friend,
Nice haiku about lost love.
You have less than 17 syllables, two grammatically interconnected lines of concrete imagery, and a satori
Good job!
Comment Written 26-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2017
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Hi Gypsy,
Thank you for the read. I must say, I checked the haiku on a syllable website. The site says it has 17 syllables. See https://www.howmanysyllables.com/syllable_counter/
Is not "We are nevermore" an insight or realization in other words, a satori?
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You are right. But in any case, less than 17 syllables is fine.
Comment from dmt1967
The ocean washing away the footprints and making out they never existed like a break up. I am not sure if this ia a heartbreak poem or a love poem. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.
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reply by the author on 26-Jun-2017
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The ocean washing away the footprints and making out they never existed like a break up. I am not sure if this ia a heartbreak poem or a love poem. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.
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Comment Written 26-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2017
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Thank you for the read. It is a breakup.
