Wonders in the grass
potlatch prose10 total reviews
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Love the description of the witch's dark eyes, 'like ebon portholes of Tartarus'. Very descriptive write Red, you really got into this story and had us running with Perra in the jungle, then boom, back to reality. Great answer to this challenge Red,
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2017
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Love the description of the witch's dark eyes, 'like ebon portholes of Tartarus'. Very descriptive write Red, you really got into this story and had us running with Perra in the jungle, then boom, back to reality. Great answer to this challenge Red,
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 28-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2017
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People not accustomed to using drugs really freak out when they are introduced to them, so I've heard, so I I subjected my favorite little deputy to distorted reality. I am very weak on the fantasy genre. Thanks very much for reading and reviewing.
Comment from michaelcahill
I think you ARE in your element here. You're a great story teller, this is just a LITTLE more made up than your usual fare. LOL
I enjoyed this quite a bit. You should try some more of this. Very entertaining and really engrossing. You got me caught up in it and smiling right away. Great work. mike
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2017
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I think you ARE in your element here. You're a great story teller, this is just a LITTLE more made up than your usual fare. LOL
I enjoyed this quite a bit. You should try some more of this. Very entertaining and really engrossing. You got me caught up in it and smiling right away. Great work. mike
Comment Written 27-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2017
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Chemically altered perspectives can be hilarious. The black bear who tore into the duffel bag of cocaine dropped from a light plane near here tore up several small trees before he died...thanks very much for reading and reviewing. I'm weak on the fantasy genre, I fear.
Comment from BOO ghost
Potlatch prose I see. Nice description: The witch's dark eyes, beautiful when calm and amiable, glittered like ebon portholes of Tartarus as she laughed and slammed the hatch of her magic chariot. Like it very much. You got an abundance of imagination and it shows. Unique word vocabulary. deities, nice word. Nice description: It was long, and serpentine, with a pale belt and ridges around its ruddy body. You could write a long novel with your unique language of words. Impressed and is entertaining to read. Liked the plot. Good luck with potlatch! BOO-fabulous!
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2017
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Potlatch prose I see. Nice description: The witch's dark eyes, beautiful when calm and amiable, glittered like ebon portholes of Tartarus as she laughed and slammed the hatch of her magic chariot. Like it very much. You got an abundance of imagination and it shows. Unique word vocabulary. deities, nice word. Nice description: It was long, and serpentine, with a pale belt and ridges around its ruddy body. You could write a long novel with your unique language of words. Impressed and is entertaining to read. Liked the plot. Good luck with potlatch! BOO-fabulous!
Comment Written 26-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2017
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I am weak on the fantasy genre, and did not expect the good reviews I have gotten on this. Thanks very much for readiing and reviewing.
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you got the right stuff bro, grammar is elementary, that is taught in elementary school but you can not teach talent and a gift. You remind me of me, sometimes. Keep pluggin!
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
This is very well done, my friend. Have you written fantasy before? Your story is like flash fantasy--an entire story in so few words. Thanks for joining the potlatch challenge this week, my friend~Debbie
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2017
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This is very well done, my friend. Have you written fantasy before? Your story is like flash fantasy--an entire story in so few words. Thanks for joining the potlatch challenge this week, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 26-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2017
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I have never written mythological fantasy, just some sci-fi with nonhuman aliens. I was out of my comfort zone until I made it more down to earth. Thanks very much for reading and reviewing.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written fantasy dream adventure story. A very unusual fantasy that seens to be powered by an unexpected dose of cocaine. A little battle with the insects and the planets.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2017
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A very well-written fantasy dream adventure story. A very unusual fantasy that seens to be powered by an unexpected dose of cocaine. A little battle with the insects and the planets.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2017
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Dope users often claim "expanded consciousness" so I guess Tommi saw the galaxies and the shrew as about the same size.
Thanks very much for reading and reviewing.
Comment from frierajac
I see the heroine thinks she is a tiny mammal, smaller than an earthworm and
that after her encounter with gang members,or pushers she is frightened by a huge creature with dread locks of moss and calling for an aging stout warrior who can
slap the powers that be. It is pleasantly spontaneous.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2017
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I see the heroine thinks she is a tiny mammal, smaller than an earthworm and
that after her encounter with gang members,or pushers she is frightened by a huge creature with dread locks of moss and calling for an aging stout warrior who can
slap the powers that be. It is pleasantly spontaneous.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2017
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It's part of a series. Longinus, or "Deputy Death" claims he is the Wandering Jew, the temple guard who slapped Jesus and must roam the Earth until Judgment Day, and Tommi is the petite part-time deputy who has various odd adventures, a kind of sexy female Barney Fife in Mountain Georgia. Thanks very much for reading and reviewing.
Comment from Mistydawn
Great story kept me on the edge of my seat start to finish. the ending wow, what a twist, had no idea that was coming. Great job, It's well written very descriptive I could feel Perra's horror. Great work.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2017
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Great story kept me on the edge of my seat start to finish. the ending wow, what a twist, had no idea that was coming. Great job, It's well written very descriptive I could feel Perra's horror. Great work.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2017
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My co-worker lit up a joint as we began the commute home. A few miles along, a car in front of us signalled a left, and my buddy came to a sliding stop...a hundred yards from the blinking car. Chemically altered perception. Thanks very much for reading and reviewing.
Comment from Realist101
Another most enjoyable story Red! I always love your descriptions and realistic dialogue. It's not contrived. And this ending, tho abrupt, is just right. Fits. Thanks for the fun read. :)
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2017
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Another most enjoyable story Red! I always love your descriptions and realistic dialogue. It's not contrived. And this ending, tho abrupt, is just right. Fits. Thanks for the fun read. :)
Comment Written 26-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2017
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The prompt was for a short work with a fantasy flavor. Remember the urban legend about the two potheads crossing the Golden Gate Bridge? Cop pulled 'em over and asked "How fast d'you think you were going?"
"Uh--seventy?" the driver guessed.
"Twelve." said the cop.
Chemically altered perceptions.
Thanks so much for reading and reviewing. And the six sure glows in the gloom.
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So welcome Red. I love that phrase, 'glows in the gloom'. ! Thank you too! Hang tough...
Comment from Gloria ....
So am I right in suggesting this is The Taming of the Shrew, meeting Splendour in the Grass whilst Fear and Loathing in Las Vegas. It's pretty trippy, but the read is well worth the trip.
Love that term, scare the hockey out of ... that is a multi-purpose line that also has many uses too.
The little shrew is an adorable creature and somebody's gotta eat the worms and bugs. Otherwise they'd take over.
Great job Ellijay.
Gloria
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2017
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So am I right in suggesting this is The Taming of the Shrew, meeting Splendour in the Grass whilst Fear and Loathing in Las Vegas. It's pretty trippy, but the read is well worth the trip.
Love that term, scare the hockey out of ... that is a multi-purpose line that also has many uses too.
The little shrew is an adorable creature and somebody's gotta eat the worms and bugs. Otherwise they'd take over.
Great job Ellijay.
Gloria
Comment Written 25-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2017
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Talk about fierce for his size--a shrew as big as a collie would be fodder for a horror movie. The only drug trip I was ever on was a general tranq from the Navy dispensary so the dentist could pull a tooth that would not deaden with novocaine. Wow. Visions and dreams. Thanks very much for reading and reviewing, Gloria.
Comment from emptypage
You wrote, "...and IV needles hurt was she tried to move it." AS?? Instead of WAS?
I have to say, I don't get this. The first half, not really. The second half, yes, but... How do they fit? I am totally lost.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017
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You wrote, "...and IV needles hurt was she tried to move it." AS?? Instead of WAS?
I have to say, I don't get this. The first half, not really. The second half, yes, but... How do they fit? I am totally lost.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017
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I edited that typo: thanks for noticing. Perra(bitch) was the deputy ODing on uncut cocaine, seeing signs and wonders, and a shrew dining on a nightcrawler in the roadside grass when she fell on her face. Fantasy ain't my bag, as my hippy generation would say...thanks for reading and reviewing.
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Ahhh... you as much as said so. I should be in bed. My brain is dying.
