Haiku Club Challenges, Book II
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Senryu (steps in the hallway)"an anthology of haiku written by fanstory poets
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Comment from Thomas Bowling
I just finished a story dealing with this subject. Sometimes it's mommy's little girl. Terrible as seems thousands of women molest their daughters. The comedian Paula Poundstone ruined her career when she was arrested for molesting her daughter.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2017
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I just finished a story dealing with this subject. Sometimes it's mommy's little girl. Terrible as seems thousands of women molest their daughters. The comedian Paula Poundstone ruined her career when she was arrested for molesting her daughter.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from l.raven
HI Gypsy, it is a horror poem...but I hate when any child...male or female is abused by anyone...the person doing it should be shot on sight...very well written sweet girl...but so sad...picture says it all...love ya Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017
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HI Gypsy, it is a horror poem...but I hate when any child...male or female is abused by anyone...the person doing it should be shot on sight...very well written sweet girl...but so sad...picture says it all...love ya Linda xxoo
Comment Written 25-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words sweetie pie. Luv hi
Gypsy
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soooooo and always welcome sweet angel...love xxoo
Comment from Dean Kuch
Oh ... poetry and stories about child abuse not only break my heart into tinier pieces than it's already been broken into, Gypsy, but they also make me so angry too (the subject matter, not the poet).
How ANYONE could willingly hurt, damage, or knowingly defile a child is beyond even my comprehension, and I can, and have, comprehended quite a few horrific scenarios in my day.
Good horror haiku--one that is not about zombies nor vampires or "things" that go bump in the night.
These types of monsters really exist!
~Dean
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017
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Oh ... poetry and stories about child abuse not only break my heart into tinier pieces than it's already been broken into, Gypsy, but they also make me so angry too (the subject matter, not the poet).
How ANYONE could willingly hurt, damage, or knowingly defile a child is beyond even my comprehension, and I can, and have, comprehended quite a few horrific scenarios in my day.
Good horror haiku--one that is not about zombies nor vampires or "things" that go bump in the night.
These types of monsters really exist!
~Dean
Comment Written 25-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017
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Thank you, darlin ;) I wanted to capture real horror. I'm glad you like it. Thank you for the six stars, sweetie pie.
Gypsy
Comment from crich
That is a terrifying haiku. I have mentored women who have been sexually abused by a father or a father figure and in those few words, I'm confident you captured their worst nightmare. Incredible. Incredibly well written.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017
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That is a terrifying haiku. I have mentored women who have been sexually abused by a father or a father figure and in those few words, I'm confident you captured their worst nightmare. Incredible. Incredibly well written.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words, my friend. Thank you for the six stars.
Gypsy
Comment from Chrissy710
Hi Gypsy So much said in so few words, I think a lot of abused girls will relate to this, her face says it all also Certainly horro of the worst kind. you have started this horror Haiku well. Cheers Christine
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017
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Hi Gypsy So much said in so few words, I think a lot of abused girls will relate to this, her face says it all also Certainly horro of the worst kind. you have started this horror Haiku well. Cheers Christine
Comment Written 25-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words sweetie pie.
Gypsy
Comment from tfawcus
Oh, how hard this one hits in that final line! There aren't many people around that can put so much meaning into so few words. There is remarkable intensity in this one. Kudos!
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017
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Oh, how hard this one hits in that final line! There aren't many people around that can put so much meaning into so few words. There is remarkable intensity in this one. Kudos!
Comment Written 25-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words, my friend.
Gypsy
Comment from Gert sherwood
Oh Gypsy
Your haiku of how the fearful footsteps a child fearing her dad's footstep nearing her room with the words you used, Yes put terror in me just reading of how the child felt
Gert
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017
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Oh Gypsy
Your haiku of how the fearful footsteps a child fearing her dad's footstep nearing her room with the words you used, Yes put terror in me just reading of how the child felt
Gert
Comment Written 25-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks a pathetic state of daddy's little girl who must have lost her way on stepping in the hallway and she must be now frightened being lost from the parents; I liked.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017
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This speaks a pathetic state of daddy's little girl who must have lost her way on stepping in the hallway and she must be now frightened being lost from the parents; I liked.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017
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Thank you
Comment from bmethner
Very powerful poem. It took my breath a little. Fear is such a force and we have all heard the footsteps in the hallway Again, very powerful message with so few words. Even the last line is subject to so many interpretations. I enjoyed reading it.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017
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Very powerful poem. It took my breath a little. Fear is such a force and we have all heard the footsteps in the hallway Again, very powerful message with so few words. Even the last line is subject to so many interpretations. I enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words. Thank you for the six stars.
Gypsy
Comment from royowen
Of course, child abuse is the worst, to me inconceivable, a life sentence, betrayal on the highest level, it's carried through a child's life, they're supposed to be safe and secure, well done Gypsy, I don't know if it will eradicated completely, but every bit of awareness helps, beautifully done, blessings, Roy
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reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017
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Of course, child abuse is the worst, to me inconceivable, a life sentence, betrayal on the highest level, it's carried through a child's life, they're supposed to be safe and secure, well done Gypsy, I don't know if it will eradicated completely, but every bit of awareness helps, beautifully done, blessings, Roy
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Comment Written 25-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words, Roy.
Gypsy
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Most welcome
