Scattered Like My Thoughts
My thoughts are scattered and they're cloudy.89 total reviews
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
Scattered Like My Thoughts" is an extremely well-written and thought-provoking piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read review. You KEEP WRITING and I'll keep reading.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2017
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Scattered Like My Thoughts" is an extremely well-written and thought-provoking piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read review. You KEEP WRITING and I'll keep reading.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2017
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Thank you, duchessofdrumborg, for your review. I am glad you found my poem a pleasurable read. I will keep writing.
Sis Cat, you're more than welcome.
Take care.
Best wishes, the Duchess
Comment from Ben Colder
You have been looking in my mind. LOL. Glad to see the storms leave our area now comes the heat wave. Hope you the best in the contest.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2017
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You have been looking in my mind. LOL. Glad to see the storms leave our area now comes the heat wave. Hope you the best in the contest.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2017
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Thank you, Ben, for your review and wishing me the best in the contest. The scattered clouds missed dropping rain on my tongue.
Comment from bhogg
Well, we are competitors in this contest. Sure wish I could say that your post sucks! Can't do it though. I like this, but almost wasted on a simple 5-7-5. A beautiful haiku. Good luck. Bill
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017
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Well, we are competitors in this contest. Sure wish I could say that your post sucks! Can't do it though. I like this, but almost wasted on a simple 5-7-5. A beautiful haiku. Good luck. Bill
Comment Written 25-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017
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Oh, thank you, Bill, for your review. To me, my toughest competitor is myself. I want to challenge myself, outdo myself, push myself. The contest is secondary. I wish you success in it.
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Hi Sis. Your way with words are amazing. I love the train of thought too. I can not help but look at your profile and the words "I am an oral storyteller..." because every write does indeed tell a story! Plus that last line, well I can see and feel the waiting for raindrops moment. Good luck in your contest. This is good stuff. xoxo Kiwi
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2017
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Hi Sis. Your way with words are amazing. I love the train of thought too. I can not help but look at your profile and the words "I am an oral storyteller..." because every write does indeed tell a story! Plus that last line, well I can see and feel the waiting for raindrops moment. Good luck in your contest. This is good stuff. xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 25-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2017
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Yes, Kiwigirl, whenever I see an inspiring idea, I ask myself, "Where is the story?" And then I ask, "Where is the conflict or tension?" My poems are miniature stories. Thank you for your review and for wishing me success in the contest.
Comment from flylikeaneagle
Sis Cat: if your tongue is dry, try some bottled water or
run under a sprinkler. Some might say to have a beer.
Nice photo of clouds and message in your 5-7-5 poem.
It is scattered and comes together nicely for the first page.
flylikeaneagle
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2017
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Sis Cat: if your tongue is dry, try some bottled water or
run under a sprinkler. Some might say to have a beer.
Nice photo of clouds and message in your 5-7-5 poem.
It is scattered and comes together nicely for the first page.
flylikeaneagle
Comment Written 25-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2017
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Oh, thank you, flylikeaneagle, for your generous, six star review. When I stepped outside my door during a heatwave and saw these promising clouds, I took a picture and composed my poem while I walked my dog. By the time we arrived home, I completed the poem, but no rain fell on us that day. I have to drink water from a bottle instead. Thanks.
Comment from Susan Chetcuti
I really liked this because in such very few lines, you have written what we all wish for on those really hot days. I loved the line, clouds invade summer heatwave. Well thought up and deserving of a six.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2017
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I really liked this because in such very few lines, you have written what we all wish for on those really hot days. I loved the line, clouds invade summer heatwave. Well thought up and deserving of a six.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2017
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Thank you, Susan, for your generous, six star review. When I stepped outside my door during a heatwave and saw these promising clouds, I took this picture and composed my poem while I walked my dog. By the time we arrived home, I completed the poem, but no rain fell on us that day. I did catch this poem on my tongue. Thanks.
Comment from Chrissy710
A clever 5-7-5 Andre, sometimes our thoughts need some water to replenish and keep them in check I like the analogy to the elements although I doubt if your mind is ever cloudy seems pretty clear to me.Good luck in the contest Cheers Christine
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2017
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A clever 5-7-5 Andre, sometimes our thoughts need some water to replenish and keep them in check I like the analogy to the elements although I doubt if your mind is ever cloudy seems pretty clear to me.Good luck in the contest Cheers Christine
Comment Written 25-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2017
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Yes, Christine, my mind was pretty clear to capture the inspiration for this poem from the clouds. Thank you for your review and for wishing me the best in the contest.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Andre, this is a lovely 5-7-5 with a great imagery. Yes it's dry and hot and you are yearning for a drop of water to fall on your dried out tongue. You're weary in the heat, making your mind feeble. I liked it a lot. Good luck. All the best. Ulla:))
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2017
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Hi Andre, this is a lovely 5-7-5 with a great imagery. Yes it's dry and hot and you are yearning for a drop of water to fall on your dried out tongue. You're weary in the heat, making your mind feeble. I liked it a lot. Good luck. All the best. Ulla:))
Comment Written 25-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2017
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Thank you, Ulla, for your generous, six star review. When I stepped outside my door during a heatwave and saw these promising clouds, I took this picture and composed my poem while I walked my dog. By the time we arrived home, I completed the poem, but no rain fell on us that day. I did catch this poem on my tongue. Thanks.
Comment from Asem.inspirations
Good afternoon Sis Cat,
What can I say? I love the whole lay out. The idea of the clouds used to represent scattered thoughts, yet the clouds are scattered...Splendid
It is all so poetically stated. "Clouds invade" and "tongue awaits raindrop" Very Nice...It gives the imagination a view of the heat and the person awaiting the relief from the (even) one raindrop that may fall soon from the scattered clouds.
I am loving the whole idea...You will do well in the contest, I'm sure...
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2017
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Good afternoon Sis Cat,
What can I say? I love the whole lay out. The idea of the clouds used to represent scattered thoughts, yet the clouds are scattered...Splendid
It is all so poetically stated. "Clouds invade" and "tongue awaits raindrop" Very Nice...It gives the imagination a view of the heat and the person awaiting the relief from the (even) one raindrop that may fall soon from the scattered clouds.
I am loving the whole idea...You will do well in the contest, I'm sure...
Comment Written 25-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2017
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Oh, thank you, Tier, for your generous review and for wishing me well in the contest. When I stepped outside my door during a heatwave and saw these promising clouds, I took this picture and composed my poem while I walked my dog. By the time we arrived home, I completed the poem, but no rain fell on us that day. I did catch this poem on my tongue. Thanks.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I have a feeling you won't have to wait too long for that raindrop to reach your tongue! But then again if you are in San Francisco, you might. A summer heatwave sounds like a change from the rainy days in England, A delightful write filled with summer promise, I wish you luck with the contest, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2017
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I have a feeling you won't have to wait too long for that raindrop to reach your tongue! But then again if you are in San Francisco, you might. A summer heatwave sounds like a change from the rainy days in England, A delightful write filled with summer promise, I wish you luck with the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 25-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2017
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Oh, thank you, Dolly, for your generous review and for wishing me well in the contest. When I stepped outside my door during a heatwave and saw these promising clouds, I took this picture and composed my poem while I walked my dog. By the time we arrived home, I completed the poem, but no rain fell on us that day. I did catch this poem on my tongue. Thanks.
