Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

I always admire Renate-Berodi's work and this piece is no exception with its anguished and chained figure. Your "mortar/foundation" metaphor is very compelling. Best wishes in another contest with your 5-7-5 senryu- Joan

 Comment Written 26-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 26-Jun-2017

Thanks, joan.

Comment from Lindagail Hall

Excellent

What a great example of this poetic form,that within a few words can tell a story. Love you word choice that last line really stands out. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 25-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 26-Jun-2017

Thanks for the kind review.

Comment from Beverly Botelho

Excellent

This speaks to a society in which people of all groups and classes have become so solidified in their beliefs that they refuse to see opposing points of view. I like the visual imagery, in which you use the concept of a structure made of such a solid and firm 'material' harms itself by refusing to bend. Excellent.

 Comment Written 24-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017

Thank you for the great review.

Comment from Mustang Patty

Excellent

thank you for sharing this thoughtful poem about the mortar of the foundations we stand on. It is only with the proper ingredients of value, truth, and courage that we will see something of value.

~patty~

 Comment Written 24-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017

Thank you for the kind review.