The Many Wonders of Thee
My thoughts on Jay.27 total reviews
Comment from Walu Feral
G'day again, mate. You have been very busy and writing very fast as well by the look of the timing.
Some pain never goes away and I hope penning your feelings has been good for you.
Well done.
Cheers Fez
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017
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G'day again, mate. You have been very busy and writing very fast as well by the look of the timing.
Some pain never goes away and I hope penning your feelings has been good for you.
Well done.
Cheers Fez
Comment Written 25-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017
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Thanks Feral and an honor for your review.
Ricky1024
Comment from emptypage
Oh, Ricky, my heart aches over these. The slam poetry I tried to read as slam--I think I did okay--was really powerful. Did anything happen to Brian Cole?
The second part was excellent, as well. I wonder...do you really think Jay died because he ran out of grace?
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017
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Oh, Ricky, my heart aches over these. The slam poetry I tried to read as slam--I think I did okay--was really powerful. Did anything happen to Brian Cole?
The second part was excellent, as well. I wonder...do you really think Jay died because he ran out of grace?
Comment Written 24-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017
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First Page, thanks for your time and thoughts. I'm glad My 'Jays' are appreciated.
As for Mr. Cole?
Kim {his mother} lost her Father, Mother and husband that horrorable 2003.
She moved but I think Brian is still around. In 2004 in court he didn't apologize..
Never got a ticket or Man slaughter Sentence because it was purposeful.
And loss of license for only Eight Months
He would be 31 today, a year younger then Jason but...
"i wrote a piece about a year ago called...
"Frozen at Eighteen!"
Ricky....
Comment from JDRBAR
First line...conception should come before birth.
"Rage and deception that sad oh, so saddened of DAY!" (eliminate "of")?
There are a few other punctuation omissions or errors that I didn't mark.
I'm afraid I find the format of this piece a little difficult to follow.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2017
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First line...conception should come before birth.
"Rage and deception that sad oh, so saddened of DAY!" (eliminate "of")?
There are a few other punctuation omissions or errors that I didn't mark.
I'm afraid I find the format of this piece a little difficult to follow.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2017
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No Errors or punctual problems here JD because...
That's just me! and unique as I are...
"You must now respect a child who gave His Organs to four and lives in Heaven on a Star!
Thanks for re-reviewing with a nice, big, fat, SIXER!
And be sure to catch my just released...
"So Beautiful That You Are!"
{Talking in 'The Heaven Phone!}
Ricky 1024.
Comment from sunao
I am really sorry about what happened to your son. I hope that you are feeling better if not, learning to live with the grief. Please keep your spirits high, hang in there, keep on doing writing poems and expressing yourself and have a fantastic day!
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2017
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I am really sorry about what happened to your son. I hope that you are feeling better if not, learning to live with the grief. Please keep your spirits high, hang in there, keep on doing writing poems and expressing yourself and have a fantastic day!
Comment Written 24-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2017
"Grief" the Greater Frontier...
after my Son's Passing in 2003, it rained almost every day for three months!
So much tear from the Angels above!
Happy that their Brother Angel
Finally, came back home were He belonged...
My deck turned green from the mold!
I had 2use a gallon of bleach to clear it
up!
Today?
My son is my inspiration,
I write so much for and about him that...
I need to remember ...
Not to get to repetitious...
With the same material...
Thanks and I'm doing much better...
Ricky1024
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Your so welcome!
Comment from Caressa_08
I have a set of twin sons that were born also on a September 30th though a different year...And they will be 40 on that day this year...They are both alive though both are distant now from me in so many ways..One is an Afghan vet and it affected him severely, and is totally disabled by the VA and my other son, his brother... I think his wife molded him to what she wants him to be...In other words, I hardly see him, maybe 2-3 times a year, even though he lives in driving distance, and also that goes for my two granddaughters, 15 & 4, hardly see them...Though always hopeful that will change.
Jay gave you so many happy memories, which I know you treasure to this day. He was a good boy and think your only son. And believe that he loves you still, like you do him.
Thanks for sharing your personal story in poetry...Caressa_08
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2017
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I have a set of twin sons that were born also on a September 30th though a different year...And they will be 40 on that day this year...They are both alive though both are distant now from me in so many ways..One is an Afghan vet and it affected him severely, and is totally disabled by the VA and my other son, his brother... I think his wife molded him to what she wants him to be...In other words, I hardly see him, maybe 2-3 times a year, even though he lives in driving distance, and also that goes for my two granddaughters, 15 & 4, hardly see them...Though always hopeful that will change.
Jay gave you so many happy memories, which I know you treasure to this day. He was a good boy and think your only son. And believe that he loves you still, like you do him.
Thanks for sharing your personal story in poetry...Caressa_08
Comment Written 23-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2017
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Dana Alyse came after jay on September 30th, 1985.
She was born with the cord wrapped around her neck which I figured just in time.
I have three other daughters but his one I'm the closest..
Try to break through "The Wall of Silence" Your children need you.
Ricky...
Comment from Teri7
This is a very interesting poem you have penned about your Jay's life before and after. You used very good descriptive wording and very good imagery with the picture. Sounds like he was a great young man. Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2017
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This is a very interesting poem you have penned about your Jay's life before and after. You used very good descriptive wording and very good imagery with the picture. Sounds like he was a great young man. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 23-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2017
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Truer words never said but...
How do you get all those...
'Spider Webs' out of your Head?
Ricky1024.
Comment from smbau
Interesting and wonderful choice of words, content and flow of poem. Within the poem tells of a son who dies in a car accident. The poet narration implies that the poet is a mother of a departed beloved son, third born of 5 siblings. Great job.
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2017
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Interesting and wonderful choice of words, content and flow of poem. Within the poem tells of a son who dies in a car accident. The poet narration implies that the poet is a mother of a departed beloved son, third born of 5 siblings. Great job.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2017
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Thanks but the mom was an unforgiving mom {My Wife}
And, she had a hard time taking that to the grave...
Ricky1024.
Comment from Rasmine
I am so sorry, again, about the loss of your son. I can't fathom what a parent goes through.
I really like this part:
"In a Huggie or Pamper...
"This world would never pamper...
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2017
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I am so sorry, again, about the loss of your son. I can't fathom what a parent goes through.
I really like this part:
"In a Huggie or Pamper...
"This world would never pamper...
Comment Written 23-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2017
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Thanks my friend as Jason is always here...
Ricky and Jay...
Comment from l.raven
HI Ricky, how are you doing my friend???...just remember...Jason is always with you...he will always be in your heart...he sounds like he was an amazing boy...you take care of yourself...love your poem...and your picture is priceless...always...very well written...Love Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2017
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HI Ricky, how are you doing my friend???...just remember...Jason is always with you...he will always be in your heart...he sounds like he was an amazing boy...you take care of yourself...love your poem...and your picture is priceless...always...very well written...Love Linda xxoo
Comment Written 23-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2017
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Ahhh, miss Poe what do you know?
Raising ravens must be tidiest but you respect me and Jay so...
Here's a bag of seed!!!
LOL!
Thanks Ever More!
Ricky...
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you are soooo welcome Ricky...always....Ravens are actually a very beautiful bird...love xxoo
Comment from WriterKathy
Your pain is evident here, and I'm sorry. I can tell you hurt deeply over the loss of your son. I hope it is healing for you to write your deepest heart felt emotions. Thank you for sharing them.
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reply by the author on 23-Jun-2017
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Your pain is evident here, and I'm sorry. I can tell you hurt deeply over the loss of your son. I hope it is healing for you to write your deepest heart felt emotions. Thank you for sharing them.
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Comment Written 23-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2017
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Only four for my beautiful Dedicated Poem.
That's okay your first review I see being new.. I can help you with that...
Thanks,
Ricky1024
