Comment from schatzling

Excellent

Wow what a riveting (not sure if that is the English word I am looking for) piece of writing. I am truly honored that you have selected my artwork to accompany it. It goes so well with what you have written. I thank you very much.

 Comment Written 25-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017

Thank you for providing it.

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

Keeping sane in this world of ours is quite an ask today and many fall by the wayside. Your words are clever and convey the message that some of us don't quite make it! Love Dolly x

 Comment Written 24-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 25-Jun-2017

Thanks for the kind review.

Comment from lalajovanoski

Excellent

Hello friend I really enjoyed reading this poem I thought that it was excellently written in the flow is very smooth I also like the alliteration a lot what a great picture thank you so much for sharing this and God bless you

 Comment Written 22-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 23-Jun-2017

Thank you for reviewing.

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

Wow--the artwork you selected really establishes the mood for this haibun--"a bothered mind indeed! Your descriptions of despair are so vivid, and "life's swollen indifference" is memorable. Big sighs- Joan

 Comment Written 22-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 23-Jun-2017

Thanks, Joan, have a great weekend

Comment from crich

Excellent

"...I dangle in the tangles of disconnected pathways..." That sentence is a thing of beauty in a dark poem. Again, you have masterfully gone to that dark place to speak the words we all feel at our most wounded moments. Well done.

 Comment Written 22-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 23-Jun-2017

Thank you fo rthe kind review.

Comment from AnnieDawn

Excellent

You have taken one through the sad, twisted chaos of what a mental patient goes through or what I have witnessed a drug addict going through coming off of acid. It must be terrible to actually have your mind uncontrolled. Well put. (By the way I work in nursing.)

 Comment Written 22-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 23-Jun-2017

Thank you for the kind review. Then you certainly have an understanding.

Comment from terry drake

Good

You created an interesting visual of a lost soul apparently in a asylum of some sort. The prose is well written and describes the obvious depression of being.

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 Comment Written 22-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 23-Jun-2017

Thank yo for reviewing.

Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)

Excellent

I love the 'scat' sort of scheme you have employed here it works to great effect. Marvelous and most enjoyed. I think the words came together beautifully to create a delightful chaos! Kindest regards Meia x

 Comment Written 22-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 23-Jun-2017

Thanks for the kind review.

Comment from Ricky1024

Excellent

Nicely cast in Blackened Technocolor...
"Poeien style...
Deep as Specters creep...
Adjective Content was superb in descriptive measures.
"A lot of nice expression, themes, and Imagery.
Flowed well but the PIC?
No grammar issues.
Objective content complete.
Thanks,
Ricky1024

 Comment Written 22-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 23-Jun-2017

Thanks for the great in depth review.

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written haibun. Our thoughts is our biggest enemy and can take us deep down to the darkest places. We pray to be saved but we still cherish our dark thoughts for some reason.

 Comment Written 22-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 23-Jun-2017

Thanks for the kind review.