Unleashed Chaos
Viewing comments for Chapter 12 "The New Arrivals"A Novel of the Breedline Series
6 total reviews
Comment from ngage
First, I love the photo you chose for your chapter. Perfect! I have to say, this is one of your best chapters. The story flowed with ease and the emotions felt genuine. It seems like the Breedline have some new members to the Covenant. The question is, will they be allies or enemies? Great chapter!
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2017
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First, I love the photo you chose for your chapter. Perfect! I have to say, this is one of your best chapters. The story flowed with ease and the emotions felt genuine. It seems like the Breedline have some new members to the Covenant. The question is, will they be allies or enemies? Great chapter!
Comment Written 21-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2017
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Thank you, ngage! I appreciate your positive feedback and dedication to my story. Stay tuned... you'll find the answers to your question. Thanks again my friend! Shana :)
Comment from apky
I love the amount of emotions and feelings you inject into your writing, my friend. It's so incredible that it's tangible, almost. Although I still get confused by all the many characters and their relationship to each other, I nevertheless thoroughly enjoy this story each time around.
Mia smiled and looked away, staring at the examination door, praying her sister and the twins would be safe in God's hands.("- delete, I don't think you need it here, do you?)
Hugs,
Aki
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2017
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I love the amount of emotions and feelings you inject into your writing, my friend. It's so incredible that it's tangible, almost. Although I still get confused by all the many characters and their relationship to each other, I nevertheless thoroughly enjoy this story each time around.
Mia smiled and looked away, staring at the examination door, praying her sister and the twins would be safe in God's hands.("- delete, I don't think you need it here, do you?)
Hugs,
Aki
Comment Written 20-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2017
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Thank you so much! :) Your review really touched my heart. It is very rewarding to receive such positive words, especially coming from a talented writer. Thanks for taking the time to read my chapter and for your advice. Your fan, Shana :)
Comment from Charmisa Parker
It's really amazing what stories can emerge just by having a creative mind and imagination. After I read this, I looked at the picture and thought of the saying, "Evil takes on many forms," which is in reference to the seemingly innocent babies inheriting the demons genes, though they are far from that. Very detailed! I loved the story! Deserves more than 5 stars.
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2017
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It's really amazing what stories can emerge just by having a creative mind and imagination. After I read this, I looked at the picture and thought of the saying, "Evil takes on many forms," which is in reference to the seemingly innocent babies inheriting the demons genes, though they are far from that. Very detailed! I loved the story! Deserves more than 5 stars.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2017
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Thank you, Charmisa! :) Your kind words definitely inspired my day. I think you'll enjoy knowing the babies were healed from evil by Raphael, the angel of healing. I'm a sucker for good winning over the dark side. Thanks again, Shana ;)
Comment from Ricky1024
Preciously written with all your heart.
Theme flowed well with imagery.
Adjective Content painted this with vivid color. Objective content was superior. Thanks, ricky1024
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2017
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Preciously written with all your heart.
Theme flowed well with imagery.
Adjective Content painted this with vivid color. Objective content was superior. Thanks, ricky1024
Comment Written 19-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2017
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Thank you, Ricky! :) So glad to hear from you again. Yes, I love to write heartfelt stories. I"m a sucker for happy endings. I appreciate your inspiring review. Shana:)
Comment from rwilliam
Oh...that photo is just too adorable! I had to tear myself away from staring at it to read your story. :-) Great pick.
I am NEVER disappointed when I read your work! OH...so good! Intriguing and exciting and heart warming, and scary and intense. LOVE, love, love it!
Wonderful chapter.
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2017
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Oh...that photo is just too adorable! I had to tear myself away from staring at it to read your story. :-) Great pick.
I am NEVER disappointed when I read your work! OH...so good! Intriguing and exciting and heart warming, and scary and intense. LOVE, love, love it!
Wonderful chapter.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2017
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Thank you so much! :) Wow! Im excited you enjoyed the chapter. Just letting you know, the two darling twins have been blessed by the angel of haeling, Raphael. They will be fun to read about as the story moves on. Arius will help out the Breedline in more to come. Thanks again, Shana:)
Comment from royowen
Jem and Mia are shocked to find that the twins may have inherited the demon's genes, but hopefully they won't turn out to be like their father, Sbastion, and meanwhile, Saebastion is still trying to adjust to the fact his twin, Thomas, is actually alive. Eve, after having given birth is haemorrhaging and Helen needs to do do an emergency hysterectomy. I wonder...? Excellent descriptive episode Shana, the conveyed emotive is palpable, and very well done, great story, great episode, well done, talented friend, blessings, Roy.
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2017
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Jem and Mia are shocked to find that the twins may have inherited the demon's genes, but hopefully they won't turn out to be like their father, Sbastion, and meanwhile, Saebastion is still trying to adjust to the fact his twin, Thomas, is actually alive. Eve, after having given birth is haemorrhaging and Helen needs to do do an emergency hysterectomy. I wonder...? Excellent descriptive episode Shana, the conveyed emotive is palpable, and very well done, great story, great episode, well done, talented friend, blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2017
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Thank you, my dear friend! :)
I loved the picture that I found for this chapter. I see Eve's twins as two adorable, beautiful angels. Even though Arius carries the gene of the Chiang-shih demon and his eyes change.... he is good. Raphael, the angel of healing, visited Eve one night and healed the baby. He took all evil from his little soul and saved him. He also saved Eve. Thank you for all your generous support and devotion to my chapters. Even though my books are about the light vs the dark forces.... good always wins.
Always your fan & friend,
Shana :)
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That's a marvellous insight dear Shana, that eluded me. That's good news about the little ones, well done dear friend, Roy
