Silent
The silence that overwhelms at the passing of a loved one11 total reviews
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written 2-4-2 poem. There is a silence when someone close to.us suddenly dies. It is like the world stop turning for a few seconds at that exact moments.
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2017
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A very well-written 2-4-2 poem. There is a silence when someone close to.us suddenly dies. It is like the world stop turning for a few seconds at that exact moments.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2017
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Thank you so much. Soon I hope I will have myself back to a point that I can regularly participate. HUGS@
Comment from Lulube
That says it all and it's so sad, but not for the one passing but for the surviving. They are the ones that carry on with emotions, for their loved one. I hope you are supported with family and friends, daily, to keep you going forward. You sound very determined and strong and with a bit of time the pain will lessen but not forgotten.
Bless you
lulube
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2017
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That says it all and it's so sad, but not for the one passing but for the surviving. They are the ones that carry on with emotions, for their loved one. I hope you are supported with family and friends, daily, to keep you going forward. You sound very determined and strong and with a bit of time the pain will lessen but not forgotten.
Bless you
lulube
Comment Written 14-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2017
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You have always had just the right words. Thank you!
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welcome and thank you
lulube
Comment from marybell1
I enjoyed reading your 2-4-2 poem "Silent" You had all your liness correct for this genre, though you chose a sad subject.
Best of luck.
Marybell1.
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2017
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I enjoyed reading your 2-4-2 poem "Silent" You had all your liness correct for this genre, though you chose a sad subject.
Best of luck.
Marybell1.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2017
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Strength comes from so many places, many times the most unexpected. Thank you
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You are most welcome.
Marybell1.
Comment from Irish Rain
And there's really nothing more to say. Just memories to pull out now and then. A lovely entry in this 2-4-2 contest, good luck, blessings...
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2017
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And there's really nothing more to say. Just memories to pull out now and then. A lovely entry in this 2-4-2 contest, good luck, blessings...
Comment Written 13-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2017
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Indeed
Comment from donforclearn
This poem is well written. The passing of a loved one is sad for those left behind but joyous for those going forward. I wish you the best and let the sunshine even just a little bit. Good Luck in the contest. Thank you for sharing your work.
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2017
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This poem is well written. The passing of a loved one is sad for those left behind but joyous for those going forward. I wish you the best and let the sunshine even just a little bit. Good Luck in the contest. Thank you for sharing your work.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2017
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Thank you so much
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks out the words that state the very last environment or state of affairs in which the beloved person breathed his last breath in silence and the inevitable death came; I liked.
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2017
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This speaks out the words that state the very last environment or state of affairs in which the beloved person breathed his last breath in silence and the inevitable death came; I liked.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2017
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Thank you. Describing and sharing that intimate moment is both a blessing and very difficult.
Comment from Nikki-Nicole
You've written a good poem.
Short but says a lot.
It consists of three lines with a syllable count: 2-4-2
'Silent' meets the requirements of the contest and makes a good entry.
--I'm very sorry to hear about your husband.
The font color goes well with the background selected.
Best of luck to you in the contest.
Thanks for sharing your poetry.
Good luck with your future writing.
-Nicole-
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2017
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You've written a good poem.
Short but says a lot.
It consists of three lines with a syllable count: 2-4-2
'Silent' meets the requirements of the contest and makes a good entry.
--I'm very sorry to hear about your husband.
The font color goes well with the background selected.
Best of luck to you in the contest.
Thanks for sharing your poetry.
Good luck with your future writing.
-Nicole-
Comment Written 13-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2017
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Thank you so much. Soon I hope I will have myself back to a point that I can regularly participate. HUGS!
Comment from writerjen
Your poem no doubt shares your own experience with the death of a loved one. Sorry for your loss...hope Fanstory is providing some solace as you create and find healing. Simple poem, to the point. Good job. Might have added a picture? Not sure...
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2017
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Your poem no doubt shares your own experience with the death of a loved one. Sorry for your loss...hope Fanstory is providing some solace as you create and find healing. Simple poem, to the point. Good job. Might have added a picture? Not sure...
Comment Written 13-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2017
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Thank you so much. Soon I hope I will have myself back to a point that I can regularly participate. HUGS!
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
I offer you my condolences you expressed the feeling of grief well it must have been hard for you my friend to lose a soul mate good luck in the contest regards Jill
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2017
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I offer you my condolences you expressed the feeling of grief well it must have been hard for you my friend to lose a soul mate good luck in the contest regards Jill
Comment Written 13-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2017
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Jill,
You have always had such an amazing gift in knowing just what to say and share. Thank you.
Teresa
Comment from rosehill (Wendy)
While I am not sold on these teensy syllable driven forms, your poem touched me very much. I would love to see where you might continue it from its current form into a full expression in a lengthier piece; if you can find the strength. It is an anniversary I know you never wanted and hope that, with time, it becomes a day to celebrate his life - and yours together without the acute pain. Way to much to ask so soon. - Wendy
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reply by the author on 13-Jun-2017
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While I am not sold on these teensy syllable driven forms, your poem touched me very much. I would love to see where you might continue it from its current form into a full expression in a lengthier piece; if you can find the strength. It is an anniversary I know you never wanted and hope that, with time, it becomes a day to celebrate his life - and yours together without the acute pain. Way to much to ask so soon. - Wendy
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Comment Written 13-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2017
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Wendy,
Thank you for the amazing encouragement. Writing has always been the most healing tool I have been given. Although it has been difficult to write and share at times, I do plan to write much more.
Hugs,
Teresa
