The Fugitive
An Ode30 total reviews
Comment from Mitchell Brontė
Some of the things these people have to go through to escape the terrifying life they live is unbelievable, many don't make it, those that do are often subject to hostility in countries that don't always offer open arms.
A breath taking, emotional, heartfelt write Tony, very well done.
Mitchell
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2017
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Some of the things these people have to go through to escape the terrifying life they live is unbelievable, many don't make it, those that do are often subject to hostility in countries that don't always offer open arms.
A breath taking, emotional, heartfelt write Tony, very well done.
Mitchell
Comment Written 06-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2017
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Many thanks for your very kind review, Mitch, and for the six stars, together with your empathy. Much appreciated! Tony
Comment from Nika2016
Ten thousand children from Syria...greeted with open arms in Europe disappeared into the arms of possible human slaveholders. No one knows where they are. What type of parents would send their children to such an uncertain life? What type of hosts would be so careless with babes?...It is the kids who suffer...
A compassionate poem...
The other side of the issue is now...Will they turn to ISIS in anger? And will they rise against the hosts who gave them shelter? For the attacks upon Europe are from those who were welcomed...2nd generation...The issues are not simple, but complex...
Your compassion, your words are beautiful...
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2017
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Ten thousand children from Syria...greeted with open arms in Europe disappeared into the arms of possible human slaveholders. No one knows where they are. What type of parents would send their children to such an uncertain life? What type of hosts would be so careless with babes?...It is the kids who suffer...
A compassionate poem...
The other side of the issue is now...Will they turn to ISIS in anger? And will they rise against the hosts who gave them shelter? For the attacks upon Europe are from those who were welcomed...2nd generation...The issues are not simple, but complex...
Your compassion, your words are beautiful...
Comment Written 05-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2017
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Thank you so much for your detailed response to this one, Nika. Very much appreciated. There are, of course, two sides to this. However, when fear overcomes love, we are are beginning to drown. All the best, Tony
Comment from Treischel
WoW! the breadth and scope of this Ode about the struggle faced by those seeking refuge from war-torn strife as refugees was stunning. It rippled with imagery and alliteration. I was messmerized. Held spellbound in the grip of your iambic pentameter within ababcdcd rhymed octaves. A touching and well rendered treatise.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2017
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WoW! the breadth and scope of this Ode about the struggle faced by those seeking refuge from war-torn strife as refugees was stunning. It rippled with imagery and alliteration. I was messmerized. Held spellbound in the grip of your iambic pentameter within ababcdcd rhymed octaves. A touching and well rendered treatise.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2017
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Thank you so much for your response to this one, Tom. Very much appreciated. All the best, Tony
Comment from lyenochka
It is just unfathomable to think how much trauma these children of the refugees who lost parents while traveling the sea to escape - how much they have suffered. Yet some will be able to overcome and others devastated depending on the strength of their spirits. I like your imagery in "tattered garment of your mind" and others but the giant squid simile was hard to relate to.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2017
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It is just unfathomable to think how much trauma these children of the refugees who lost parents while traveling the sea to escape - how much they have suffered. Yet some will be able to overcome and others devastated depending on the strength of their spirits. I like your imagery in "tattered garment of your mind" and others but the giant squid simile was hard to relate to.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2017
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Thank you so much for your response to this one, Helen. Very much appreciated. i was uncertain about that particular metaphor, especially coming so hard on the heels of the snail! I shall be reviewing this poem and re-writing parts to tighten it. Your input confirms my suspicion that a wrong note was struck in this part! All the best, Tony
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Dramatic, powerful, emotional and a story of the plight of the true refugee is well told Tony in this ode.
Will trust forever be displaced by doubt? unfortunately in our world today I think that's probably a yes from both sides of the question. Great read, well done.
cheers.
valda
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2017
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Dramatic, powerful, emotional and a story of the plight of the true refugee is well told Tony in this ode.
Will trust forever be displaced by doubt? unfortunately in our world today I think that's probably a yes from both sides of the question. Great read, well done.
cheers.
valda
Comment Written 05-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2017
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Thank you so much for your response to this one, Valda. Very much appreciated. All the best, Tony
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
This is very well written my friend very good strong word choices used o describe the plight of this child refugee well done I enjoyed regards Jill
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2017
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This is very well written my friend very good strong word choices used o describe the plight of this child refugee well done I enjoyed regards Jill
Comment Written 05-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2017
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Thank you so much for your response to this one, Jill. Very much appreciated. All the best, Tony
Comment from estory
This poem really captures the refugee's plight, the sense of being cut off from home, of losing all your memories, of being in an uncertain place, in an uncertain time. very vivid imagery and heavy meter relate the feelings well. Maybe it could use an edit, tighten it up a bit, condense it and pack the intensity a little more estory
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2017
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This poem really captures the refugee's plight, the sense of being cut off from home, of losing all your memories, of being in an uncertain place, in an uncertain time. very vivid imagery and heavy meter relate the feelings well. Maybe it could use an edit, tighten it up a bit, condense it and pack the intensity a little more estory
Comment Written 05-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2017
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Many thanks for your kind review, estory, together with your suggestions. Much appreciated! I agree that this could do with some tightening and intend to go back and revise parts of it soon - particularly the rather odd metaphor of the giant squid and the overlong repetition at the end. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Curly Girly
To me, this well-scribed ode reads more like an intellectual lament. A liberal and ostentatious sprinkling of potent adjectives makes this poem stand apart in a traditional way. It presents a case that nobody can argue with, declaring a state of hopeless sorrow before questioning its readers for impossible solutions.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2017
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To me, this well-scribed ode reads more like an intellectual lament. A liberal and ostentatious sprinkling of potent adjectives makes this poem stand apart in a traditional way. It presents a case that nobody can argue with, declaring a state of hopeless sorrow before questioning its readers for impossible solutions.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2017
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Many thanks for your kind review, Nicole, together with your absolutely delightful phrase, "A liberal and ostentatious sprinkling of potent adjectives"! Much appreciated! Tony
Comment from c_lucas
The is a very thought provoking story within a poem and it held this reader's attention. It is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2017
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The is a very thought provoking story within a poem and it held this reader's attention. It is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2017
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Many thanks for your very kind review, Charlie, and for the six stars. Much appreciated! Tony
Comment from Pantygynt
Strange how I had never come across trepid before (neither had the spell checker) only its opposite. This is beautiful. The iambic pentameters roll off the tongue like that fellow Shakespeare's, there was so much I found beautiful in this hideous tale, the alliterative susurrus of the second stanza and the lone trochaic line in the sixth that alerts us to a change of fortune.
A truly exceptional piece of work.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2017
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Strange how I had never come across trepid before (neither had the spell checker) only its opposite. This is beautiful. The iambic pentameters roll off the tongue like that fellow Shakespeare's, there was so much I found beautiful in this hideous tale, the alliterative susurrus of the second stanza and the lone trochaic line in the sixth that alerts us to a change of fortune.
A truly exceptional piece of work.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2017
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Many thanks for your very kind review, Jim, and for the six stars. Much appreciated as always! Tony
