Comment from Kerry Foley Robinson

Excellent

This is a wonderful Move Otte poem Patty on family.I always liked the rhyme scheme of the Move. Good work my friend. - Kerry

 Comment Written 05-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 05-Jun-2017

Hi Kerry; thank you so much for stopping by to read and review. I appreciate your encouraging words,
~patty~

reply by Kerry Foley Robinson on 05-Jun-2017

Your very welcome.

Comment from Margaret Snowdon

Excellent

aacbbcddc - that's not an easy rhyme scheme to follow - but
you've mastered it well and the words flow smoothly.

Family should come first - but when they are scattered about, it's
sometimes difficult to do so.

Blessings,

Margaret

 Comment Written 05-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 05-Jun-2017

Hi Margaret; thank you so much for the encouraging review. I had fun with this poetic form - it was one of those challenges I just wanted to do! Your encouraging words are appreciated,
~patty~

Comment from dovemarie

Exceptional

Dear Patty, Your poem is excellent, and it reminds me of my mother - I always had to pay a fee for her love - out of my limited welfare check decades ago, or in hurt feelings. Could you tell me more about rhyme scheme? I'm not sure what it is yet, even though I've seen it talked about in many poems, I'm just not sure how to use it. If any of my poems have a rhyme scheme, they just come out that way - I don't do it intentionally. Dove

 Comment Written 05-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 05-Jun-2017

Hi Dove; thank you so much for the lovely review and six stars - they are greatly appreciated.

Rhyme scheme is simply referring to the rhyming pattern. In this poem, the poetic form called for aacbbcddc. So the first two lines rhymed, and the third, sixth, and ninth line rhymed. Lines four and five rhymed and lines seven and eight rhymed. I hope this answered your question.

Thanks for reading,
~patty~

Comment from honeytree

Excellent

Wonderful art work in everyway
Family should come first always
Love within a home is very special
Some don't receive much love
I think of those who don't receive love.

Great poem.

Honey tree

I have no six left

 Comment Written 05-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 05-Jun-2017

Hi there; thank you so much for stopping by to read and review. I appreciate your kind words and thoughts. (I will take a virtual six anytime.)
~patty~

Comment from Rasmine

Excellent

Good poem. I like the beat and the rhyme.

Good rhyming--this is my favorite line, Patty,
rivalry rears its ugly head;
someone wishes the other dead

 Comment Written 05-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 05-Jun-2017

Hi; I'm glad you enjoyed this poem. This poetic form was fun to work with - the subject matter was completely based on the 'family' I'm writing the fictional story about.
~patty~

Comment from Bucketlist

Exceptional

Great Nove Otto poem. How truly you write about family! What happened to unconditional love, patty? " Mother's love always has a fee". I'm shocked LOL
Nothing needs to be changed, thanks for sharing
HAppy Monday
Hugs Trisha

 Comment Written 05-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 05-Jun-2017

Hi Trisha; I'm so glad you enjoyed this poem. The poetic form worked well for the 'family' I've been thinking about as I write my latest series of stories. I enjoyed the six stars - they made my day,
~patty~

reply by Bucketlist on 05-Jun-2017

Unconditional is almost impossible in life, you're welcome as always

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

I can identify with this poem Patty, someof your lines hit a chord with me, families are not always as loving as they should be, ravalry can be the cause of great upset sometimes, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 05-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 05-Jun-2017

Hi Dolly; thank you so much for the kind and encouraging review. This poem came from my thoughts about the family in my new series of fiction. Families and the many relationships have been on my mind,
~patty~

Comment from PoemsOfDD

Excellent

Patty, this is a very good Nove Otto poem and rhymed well. A mother's love is always a good one to write on. I thought the ending had a nice cheeky ending - mothers always have to have something up their sleeve as leverage :-)

Just a small comment, if I may. Each line must have 8 syllables per line, however, this following line has 9 syllables.

"siblings as far as the eye can see,"

Just thought I'd mention it. Thank you for sharing. ~DD

 Comment Written 05-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 05-Jun-2017

Hi DD; thank you so much for reading. I appreciate you pointing out the wrong syllable count in that line - I went back and fixed it. Your comments are greatly appreciated - yes, mothers can be quite manipulative,
~patty~

reply by PoemsOfDD on 05-Jun-2017

Glad I could help Patty. ~DD

Comment from Emily George

Excellent

Great poem with lovely warm orange art work that makes you think of family and the holding hands. Then that line in your poem,"someone wishes the others dead' so family.
You did so well to stick with all the requirements of the Nove Otto and still write a well worded, humourous poem. Loved it

 Comment Written 05-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 05-Jun-2017

Hi there; thank you so much for stopping by to read and review my poem. Your encouraging comments are greatly appreciated - this was a fun poetic form to work with,
~patty~

Comment from tfawcus

Excellent

It sounds as if mother has a firm bottom line here, dished out even-handedly to keep the peace. This Nove Otto is in perfect form except for "siblings as far as the eye can see," that has nine syllables. There is a great sense of family unity and love suggested by your words.

 Comment Written 05-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 05-Jun-2017

Hi Tony; thank you for the thoughtful review - I did go back and fix that line - it now has only eight syllables. I appreciate your encouraging words,
~patty~