This Time - That Time 2
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Veronica Meets Daveth"Veronica is sent back again
36 total reviews
Comment from Treischel
A new and marvelous twist on your story, bring a turn to a new and curious adventure. Strong story telling with excellent imagery, good descriptive setting, and startling transitions. Well told. Certainly keeps me curious, and wanting more.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2017
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A new and marvelous twist on your story, bring a turn to a new and curious adventure. Strong story telling with excellent imagery, good descriptive setting, and startling transitions. Well told. Certainly keeps me curious, and wanting more.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2017
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What a lovely review, Tom. Thank you so very much for the 6 lovely stars, I'm more than pleased you are reading my story, you've just made my day! Thank you. :) Sandra xx
Comment from alexisleech
Another exciting chapter, Sandra, and one that has us guessing with regard to what will be happening next. Poor Veronica. One minute she's in the comfort of the cottage with her lovely husband and children, then she's whisked off to the austerity on the 1,800s.
I can't wait to find out what 'the powers that be' have lined up for her next!
Alexis xxx
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2017
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Another exciting chapter, Sandra, and one that has us guessing with regard to what will be happening next. Poor Veronica. One minute she's in the comfort of the cottage with her lovely husband and children, then she's whisked off to the austerity on the 1,800s.
I can't wait to find out what 'the powers that be' have lined up for her next!
Alexis xxx
Comment Written 06-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2017
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Thank you so much for the lovely review and the shiny 6 stars, my friend. You are a diamond!! :) Sandra xx
Comment from Margaret Ford
Hi, Sandra. This is another intriguing installment of Veronica's story; I enjoyed it very much, just like last time. You asked about errors: I didn't see any, but I'm certainly no expert on UK English or slang. Thanks for a great read. Margaret
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2017
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Hi, Sandra. This is another intriguing installment of Veronica's story; I enjoyed it very much, just like last time. You asked about errors: I didn't see any, but I'm certainly no expert on UK English or slang. Thanks for a great read. Margaret
Comment Written 06-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2017
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Thank you so much, Margaret. I'm so pleased you enjoyed it. :) Sandra xxx
Comment from MelB
Hi Sandra, this is an excellent chapter. I wonder why she did travel so far back in time? I'm sure you have a perfectly good reason for it. I look forward to finding out what it is.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2017
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Hi Sandra, this is an excellent chapter. I wonder why she did travel so far back in time? I'm sure you have a perfectly good reason for it. I look forward to finding out what it is.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2017
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We will soon find out, Melissa, but there is more to it than even Veronica will know for a while. Thank you for reading and for the lovely review, my friend, :) Sandra xx
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You're most welcome. Look forward to finding out!
Comment from aryr
This was so enjoyable Sandra, it was a bit of a nail biter. It is a shame that Veronica travelled so far back in time to 1846. It sort of leaves her hanging on by her fingertips. And she is only visible to Daveth. Heaven knows what she has gotten herself into. Great job, thanks.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2017
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This was so enjoyable Sandra, it was a bit of a nail biter. It is a shame that Veronica travelled so far back in time to 1846. It sort of leaves her hanging on by her fingertips. And she is only visible to Daveth. Heaven knows what she has gotten herself into. Great job, thanks.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2017
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Aw, thank you again, Alie for another lovely review! Those are Veronica's thoughts too, what on earth is she doing there? LOL, I'll end her torment next time. Big hugs, my friend. :) Sandra xxx
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You are most welcome Sandra, I shall eagerly await the continued excitement, hugs in return, Alie
Comment from apky
Well this chapter was excellent and intriguing. With the lst paragraph, you left the story at the very edge of the cliff, with the protagonist as much at a loss as the reader.
>>Mildred hasn't even been born yet, or Lady Ann! Why on earth have I been sent this far back in time? What am I expected to do when I have nothing to work on? It's not fair! Whoever is doing this, it's got to stop ... or at least let me know, so I can prepare myself...<<
Eager for the next chapter,
Apky
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2017
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Well this chapter was excellent and intriguing. With the lst paragraph, you left the story at the very edge of the cliff, with the protagonist as much at a loss as the reader.
>>Mildred hasn't even been born yet, or Lady Ann! Why on earth have I been sent this far back in time? What am I expected to do when I have nothing to work on? It's not fair! Whoever is doing this, it's got to stop ... or at least let me know, so I can prepare myself...<<
Eager for the next chapter,
Apky
Comment Written 05-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2017
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Thank you so much, Apky, for reading part three. I'm delighted you enjoyed it. :) Sandra xx
Comment from Jay Squires
I'm lovin' it, Sandra. You have an excellent series running here--definitely publishable.
I wondered where everyone was, surely they can't be too far away? [A couple of things: first it's a run-on (comma-splice) sentence. You need something besides a comma after "was." Secondly, if the second sentence is her thought process, perhaps you should italicize it. If it's not her thoughts, then you should change "can't" to "couldn't."]
had two wooden armchairs facing each other on either side. [Excuse me for interfering, but I think you can easily get along without "each other," since that's what "facing" means.]
Dang, this is getting exciting. I love the way your write time-bending books.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2017
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I'm lovin' it, Sandra. You have an excellent series running here--definitely publishable.
I wondered where everyone was, surely they can't be too far away? [A couple of things: first it's a run-on (comma-splice) sentence. You need something besides a comma after "was." Secondly, if the second sentence is her thought process, perhaps you should italicize it. If it's not her thoughts, then you should change "can't" to "couldn't."]
had two wooden armchairs facing each other on either side. [Excuse me for interfering, but I think you can easily get along without "each other," since that's what "facing" means.]
Dang, this is getting exciting. I love the way your write time-bending books.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2017
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Thank you so much, my friend. I have changed my nasty run-on sentence. I've put a full-stop after, 'was' and turned the second part into her thoughts. I've also changed the sentence below....
My eyes trailed the room to the empty fireplace, which had a wooden armchair on either side....
Thank you so much, Jay, you really deserve the reviewer of the month award. I'm so pleased you are reading my sequel. Big hugs, my friend. :) Sandra xx
How is your script coming along? Are you sending it out to agents/publishers? Let me know, as I want to go to the opening night in London!! :) xxx
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I need a little of your optimism, Sandra. I would consider myself grateful, indeed to win the producer's $500 bucks and an invitation to attend the preproduction workshop, to offer my input as author. That's how it works, according to my understanding. The $500 is to defray room and food during the preproduction. Apparently, the offers come in if the actual production is successful. If it makes it to London ... I'll probably be contacting Mr. & Mrs. Mitchell to house me overnight, LOL.
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I will have your room ready, Jay. I know it will happen. Wouldn't it be lovely, it was a wonderful script, and for me to put the author up would be my idea of heaven. Keep believing, my friend, I believe in you. :) xx
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THANK YOU, THANK YOU, THANK YOU!
Comment from Curly Girly
This was a fun chapter to read; most enjoyable, indeed. Imagine being sent back in time. The little boy, Daveth, can see her but not his mother. This impresses him. I was surprised that he was cocky enough to try to touch her. His reaction was funny but believable.
Nicole
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2017
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This was a fun chapter to read; most enjoyable, indeed. Imagine being sent back in time. The little boy, Daveth, can see her but not his mother. This impresses him. I was surprised that he was cocky enough to try to touch her. His reaction was funny but believable.
Nicole
Comment Written 04-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2017
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Daveth is going to be a really good character to work with. Being brought up with 5 boys gives me lots to draw on. Thank you, Nicole, I'm so pleased you enjoyed this part. :) Sandra xxx
Comment from smerryman3
Very good read. Your descriptions, dialogue, and stage settings are spot on. I need to go back andcread part 1 and 2. You piqued my interest. The only thing that gave me a pause was one word. I am not sure but I think "over cautious" should be "overly cautious."
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2017
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Very good read. Your descriptions, dialogue, and stage settings are spot on. I need to go back andcread part 1 and 2. You piqued my interest. The only thing that gave me a pause was one word. I am not sure but I think "over cautious" should be "overly cautious."
Comment Written 04-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2017
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Thank you so much for reading part three, I'm delighted you enjoyed it enough to want to read the first two parts.Also, thank you for picking up that error, I've put it right now. I really appreciate your review. :) Sandra xx
Comment from Thomas Bowling
Another interesting chapter. I don't know how you write so much without spags. My writing ould be unreadable if it wasn't the corrections from reviewers.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2017
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Another interesting chapter. I don't know how you write so much without spags. My writing ould be unreadable if it wasn't the corrections from reviewers.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2017
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That's a lovely compliment, Tom, thank you so much. I really appreciate those comments. :) Sandra xx
