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Turning in Silence

My thoughts on Jay in a song.

37 total reviews 
Comment from Cindy Warren
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Jason sounds like a wonderful person who would want you to have a great life. I believe you'll see him again when the time is right. For now I'm sure he wants you to be happy.

 Comment Written 30-May-2017


reply by the author on 30-May-2017
    Thanks Cindy.
    Jason's come around once in a lifetime.
    Appreciate yours.
    Ricky
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Comment from Sandra du Plessis
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A very well-written song/poem to let your son know you miss him and wish to meet him soon. But he let you know here is still work on earth you need to do.

One typo picked up.
"But dad, there's still to(too) much work that must be done."

 Comment Written 30-May-2017


reply by the author on 30-May-2017
    Thank you.
    Jason's come around once in a lifetime.
    Love yours.
    Ricky
    1024
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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A meloncholy write and I am so sorry for your loss, I can't imagine what you are going through, your write is a tribute to someone who thought about donating his organs before he died, although your words are very sad I'm glad you shared them with us, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 30-May-2017


reply by the author on 30-May-2017
    Hi Dolly and thanks for helping this with your review.
    Jason was only eighteen and eighteen year olsds dont think of death and donating.
    That sometimes falls on family.
    Thank God we had the ciurage and like the name of Jasons band He had started "Three Ways To Save"Three out odf four got a second chance at life.
    Ricky
    1024.
Comment from Poetic Friend
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Wow, these song lyrics gave me the chills while reading it, especially knowing the inspiration behind the write.

The repetition of the I's lend itself to impact and intensity.

I would love to hear these lyrics to music.

My condolence on the loss of your son. He seemed to be a loving and giving person.

 Comment Written 30-May-2017


reply by the author on 30-May-2017
    Thanks Poetic Friend.
    Sometimes we write something that is special....
    Flows well and is touchibg.
    Ricky
    1024 .
Comment from Teri7
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This is a very sweet, sad and well written poem about the death of your precious Jay. You used very good wording and his sweet little picture. Bless you my friend. Teri

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 Comment Written 29-May-2017


reply by the author on 29-May-2017
    Thanks Teri its already listed as a six and Im pumping it.
    Ricky...
Comment from johnwilson
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Quite simply, this is awe inspiring. Hackles are on my arms after reading it. Such a simple piece, yet so profoundly sad and filled with hope at the same time. I love the way the poem is set out on the page.

 Comment Written 29-May-2017


reply by the author on 29-May-2017
    Thanks for your support.
    Im teying to oumo it up for more reviews
    Ricky
    1024
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
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This is lyrically lovely and haunting in its content. Your pain and loss shine through from beginning to end. Thank you so much for sharing it.

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 Comment Written 29-May-2017


reply by the author on 29-May-2017
    Rhis I could sing in a group with bo orovlem just just a backup band.
    Rixkt
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