Nancy
...a different kind of story54 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
Well done, Patty. It's a hard story but a real one that happens all over, addiction with a silent cry for help that no one heard until too late.
Also, Congrats on the sale of the pet stories!!
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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Well done, Patty. It's a hard story but a real one that happens all over, addiction with a silent cry for help that no one heard until too late.
Also, Congrats on the sale of the pet stories!!
Comment Written 24-May-2017
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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Hi; thank you for the Congrats. I'm still reeling, (and still editing!) I'm glad you enjoyed this story - it was a bit of a break from pet stories for me,
~patty~
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Yes, interesting Patty, and I'm feeling a bit guilty because I'm on my second glass of wine tonight! It's a sad story, and you can give everything to a relationship, but sometimes you just have to think of yourself! I liked your diversity and I look forward to more writes like this, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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Yes, interesting Patty, and I'm feeling a bit guilty because I'm on my second glass of wine tonight! It's a sad story, and you can give everything to a relationship, but sometimes you just have to think of yourself! I liked your diversity and I look forward to more writes like this, love Dolly x
Comment Written 24-May-2017
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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Hi Dolly; I seriously think you have nothing to fear unless you're drinking wine from a cup and hiding it from everyone! This character came from a documentary I saw on more and more women turning to alcohol to sooth their souls,
~patty~
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
It was all his fault!! What a horrid husband, I hope his wife's face stays with him always! Goodness that was a sad one, Patty, and true for many lonely wives. You accomplished your task and proved you could still write a dark story, can we can the pussycats back now? Please! LOL. Well done, my friend. :) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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It was all his fault!! What a horrid husband, I hope his wife's face stays with him always! Goodness that was a sad one, Patty, and true for many lonely wives. You accomplished your task and proved you could still write a dark story, can we can the pussycats back now? Please! LOL. Well done, my friend. :) Sandra xx
Comment Written 24-May-2017
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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Hi Sandra; it might be awhile before the next pussycat story. I'm kind of burnt out as I sit here doing some edits. But, we will get back to them soon. In the meantime...
~patty~
Comment from Marykelly
The emotional stress that Nancy experiences is described well through her actions and thoughts so the climax of the story is not surprising even though it is very sad. The circumstances of loneliness, sadness, isolation, dependency are evident in the character development of this story and make Nancy a sympathetic person.
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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The emotional stress that Nancy experiences is described well through her actions and thoughts so the climax of the story is not surprising even though it is very sad. The circumstances of loneliness, sadness, isolation, dependency are evident in the character development of this story and make Nancy a sympathetic person.
Comment Written 24-May-2017
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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thank you so much for your thoughtful and concise review. I'm glad you saw Nancy for who she was - a woman killed by her circumstances.
~patty~
Comment from Leena
Wow! Having read a couple of your posts, I must say you are an absolutely versatile writer. Kudos! I loved the story so much..the love, loneliness and the array of events which progress so naturally till the end. Touched.
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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Wow! Having read a couple of your posts, I must say you are an absolutely versatile writer. Kudos! I loved the story so much..the love, loneliness and the array of events which progress so naturally till the end. Touched.
Comment Written 24-May-2017
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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Thank you so much for this wonderful compliment! I appreciate your kind words, and I'm glad you enjoyed the story,
~patty~
Comment from Rasmine
Wow! You did good writing dark and depressing, although I like the cat stories instead. You really proved yourself, though.
My favorite part:
His little face was lovely with his perfect features. I remember the hand-crocheted outfit he wore. It was so horrible to find him that morning. He was so still...and cold.
And the saddest part.
TC
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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Wow! You did good writing dark and depressing, although I like the cat stories instead. You really proved yourself, though.
My favorite part:
His little face was lovely with his perfect features. I remember the hand-crocheted outfit he wore. It was so horrible to find him that morning. He was so still...and cold.
And the saddest part.
TC
Comment Written 24-May-2017
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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Hi TC: thank you for stopping by to read and review this story. I was challenged to write something different from the puppy and cat tales. So, this was the result. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
~patty~
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Well you certainly can Patty! This one was filled with loneliness, heart break and despair. It is a believable
story too. I didn't see any spags. Well done dear. Nancy
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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Well you certainly can Patty! This one was filled with loneliness, heart break and despair. It is a believable
story too. I didn't see any spags. Well done dear. Nancy
Comment Written 24-May-2017
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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Hi Nancy; thank you so much for the thoughtful and kind review. Yes, I can be dark when I need to. Nancy's story was the culmination of some stories I've read and my view of alcoholism. I'm glad you enjoyed it,
~patty~
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
She finally gets her act together and he doesn't come home. She chooses suicide over the miserable life she's had. Always the "wrong" ending, but that's just because I like happy endings. In reality, you ended it the way it was more likely to happen. I like fiction because you can MAKE your own happy endings. Doesn't mean I didn't appreciate the good writing -- just my personal preference. :)
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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She finally gets her act together and he doesn't come home. She chooses suicide over the miserable life she's had. Always the "wrong" ending, but that's just because I like happy endings. In reality, you ended it the way it was more likely to happen. I like fiction because you can MAKE your own happy endings. Doesn't mean I didn't appreciate the good writing -- just my personal preference. :)
Comment Written 24-May-2017
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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Hi Phyllis; I couldn't see her ending up any other way. She didn't have any other life, but the one he built for her. It turned out to be a prison with no real locks, but she felt them trapping her.
Sorry it was so dark, but I was challenged to leave the puppies and kittens behind,
~patty~
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I understand. I'd been teasing Dean about his all-horror stories/poems, and one day I said they're easy to write. To prove it, I wrote one. The first scene had some guy's head exploding... brains and blood and gore all over the kitchen. That story won Story of the Month. So, I proved I coudl do it, but never wanted to do it again. I'll stick with happy endings. :)
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
OH my lady, this is dark and yet so very real. It had happened so often that it is a problem but nothing too serious to do anything about or say it is a problem. You have captured all of it and made it part of our lives. Very, very well done
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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OH my lady, this is dark and yet so very real. It had happened so often that it is a problem but nothing too serious to do anything about or say it is a problem. You have captured all of it and made it part of our lives. Very, very well done
Comment Written 24-May-2017
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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Hi Barb; thank you SO much for the lovely review. I'm glad you enjoyed the story and I'm humbled and honored by your rating,
~patty~
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This whole piece was not your usual but it was absolutely magnificient
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
How could he do this? I tried...I tried so hard.
John finally came home, and found her body swinging from the light fixture. Her face was grotesque and bloated. The medical examiner would say she had been dead for almost a week.
Twinkling in the sunlight as it poured through the window, the bottle stood proudly. Holding down a simple note, it sat on the butcher block in the middle of the kitchen.'
You blew me away with this. Not because I read horror. Not because of that. Because every turn of phrase was perfect. Your clear, smooth writers voice sings, the character seems remarkably real, every description is painted like a stunning picture...you are some writer, this I knew but work like this, the perfect easy flow and characterisation...seemingly simple turns of phrases like this: 'She could have been a gourmet cook. She often found herself making elaborate meals and throwing most of them out, but she had to do something with her time.'I am glad you are FINALLY getting some pay for your work, it is superlative! Please write some more work like this, it is so phenomenal I hope you know how good this is xx All my love Meia
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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How could he do this? I tried...I tried so hard.
John finally came home, and found her body swinging from the light fixture. Her face was grotesque and bloated. The medical examiner would say she had been dead for almost a week.
Twinkling in the sunlight as it poured through the window, the bottle stood proudly. Holding down a simple note, it sat on the butcher block in the middle of the kitchen.'
You blew me away with this. Not because I read horror. Not because of that. Because every turn of phrase was perfect. Your clear, smooth writers voice sings, the character seems remarkably real, every description is painted like a stunning picture...you are some writer, this I knew but work like this, the perfect easy flow and characterisation...seemingly simple turns of phrases like this: 'She could have been a gourmet cook. She often found herself making elaborate meals and throwing most of them out, but she had to do something with her time.'I am glad you are FINALLY getting some pay for your work, it is superlative! Please write some more work like this, it is so phenomenal I hope you know how good this is xx All my love Meia
Comment Written 24-May-2017
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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Hi Meia; thank you SO much for the lovely review. Both you and Dean Kuch have inspired me to write from my darker side. (I'm even entering the horror contest!)
I SO appreciate the lovely shining six stars! Thank you my friend - this made my day,
~patty~
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You should because you do it so well.I did not see the end coming and was entranced with the story. amazing. And I really mean that,love Meia x
