haiku (nations meet to save)
countries unite to stop the killing42 total reviews
Comment from Oatmeal
You did a wonderful job with the challenge that was presented to you. Very nicely created impressions that are very vivid and understandable. Well written work. Perfectly arranged.
There was no SPAG. No room for improvement.
The words you chose worked well. I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
reply by the author on 25-May-2017
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You did a wonderful job with the challenge that was presented to you. Very nicely created impressions that are very vivid and understandable. Well written work. Perfectly arranged.
There was no SPAG. No room for improvement.
The words you chose worked well. I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
Comment Written 24-May-2017
reply by the author on 25-May-2017
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Thank you for your great review and comments for my haiku, Oatmeal. I appreciate your time to write your kind response.
Comment from tfawcus
What a very fine satori line! A result to be striven for, indeed. Getting nations to address this problem with a united front seems to be heart-breakingly difficult. I should like to see this poem on the notepads of each delegate at these forums!
reply by the author on 25-May-2017
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What a very fine satori line! A result to be striven for, indeed. Getting nations to address this problem with a united front seems to be heart-breakingly difficult. I should like to see this poem on the notepads of each delegate at these forums!
Comment Written 24-May-2017
reply by the author on 25-May-2017
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Thank you for your great review and comments for my haiku, Tony. I appreciate your time to write your kind response. I think I'd like to look into about getting this haiku on those notepads!
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job with the haiku style. The syllables are correct. Your message is strong.
I know what you are saying, but I am a bit confused. It seems to me the 'poacher extinction' satori could mean they are trying to save the poachers, too which I know isn't what you meant.
Best wishes in the contest. Jan
reply by the author on 25-May-2017
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You did a great job with the haiku style. The syllables are correct. Your message is strong.
I know what you are saying, but I am a bit confused. It seems to me the 'poacher extinction' satori could mean they are trying to save the poachers, too which I know isn't what you meant.
Best wishes in the contest. Jan
Comment Written 24-May-2017
reply by the author on 25-May-2017
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Thank you for your great review and comments for my haiku, Jan. I appreciate your time to write your kind response. No one else has mentioned any confusion regarding the satori, but I'll consider changing the wording if they do.
Comment from Bill Schott
This haiku, Nations Strive to Save, has a nice build up of what we want to keep from being hunted to extinction, and a nice satori of who must go. Nice.
reply by the author on 25-May-2017
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This haiku, Nations Strive to Save, has a nice build up of what we want to keep from being hunted to extinction, and a nice satori of who must go. Nice.
Comment Written 24-May-2017
reply by the author on 25-May-2017
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Thank you for your great review and comments for my haiku, Bill. I appreciate your time to write your kind response, and thamk you for mentioning the satori.
Comment from Hitcher
Nations try and hope to save but corruption in those same governments is where the real problem lies. Greed has no bounds and definitely no conscience but still we live in hope! A nice thought provoking nature haiku friend. Good luck!
reply by the author on 25-May-2017
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Nations try and hope to save but corruption in those same governments is where the real problem lies. Greed has no bounds and definitely no conscience but still we live in hope! A nice thought provoking nature haiku friend. Good luck!
Comment Written 24-May-2017
reply by the author on 25-May-2017
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Thank you for your great review and comments for my haiku, Hitcher. I appreciate your time to write your kind response, and thanks for your good luck.
Comment from Thal1959
Charming Haiku of an existential situation, something everyone can relate to and understand. Very effective Satori. Good luck on the contest.
reply by the author on 25-May-2017
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Charming Haiku of an existential situation, something everyone can relate to and understand. Very effective Satori. Good luck on the contest.
Comment Written 24-May-2017
reply by the author on 25-May-2017
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Thank you for your great review and comments for my haiku, Thal. I appreciate your time to write your kind response, your good luck wish, and for mentioning the satori.
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You are welcome - it was my pleasure.
Comment from Janet Foor
Good to hear that some countries do unite to stop the killing of these beautiful animals. poacher extinction is a perfect satori line.
Well done
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 25-May-2017
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Good to hear that some countries do unite to stop the killing of these beautiful animals. poacher extinction is a perfect satori line.
Well done
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 24-May-2017
reply by the author on 25-May-2017
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Thank you for your great review and comments for my haiku, Janet. I appreciate your time to write your kind response, and thanks for mentioning you liked the satori.
Comment from alvina224224
Very good entry for this contest, author. Haiku have a specific requirement, that often turns an author away, but I believe in the discipline. Your 'take' on the theme of Nature is very good, and emotive. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 25-May-2017
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Very good entry for this contest, author. Haiku have a specific requirement, that often turns an author away, but I believe in the discipline. Your 'take' on the theme of Nature is very good, and emotive. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 24-May-2017
reply by the author on 25-May-2017
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Thank you for your great review and comments for my haiku, Alvina. I appreciate your time to write your kind response and good luck wish for the contest.
Comment from Thomas Bowling
Poaching is Africa's equivalent of the drug trade. It won't stop until greedy collectors stop buying their illegal goods. They are the ones who should be punished.
reply by the author on 25-May-2017
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Poaching is Africa's equivalent of the drug trade. It won't stop until greedy collectors stop buying their illegal goods. They are the ones who should be punished.
Comment Written 24-May-2017
reply by the author on 25-May-2017
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Thank you for your great review and comments for my haiku, Thomas. I appreciate your time to write your kind response. I agree if the industries using the products from the animals were punished, it would help to stop the poachers.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written haiku about the struggle to save the elephants, rhinos and tigers from extinction by fighting poachers that slaughter these animals for traditional myths.
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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A very well-written haiku about the struggle to save the elephants, rhinos and tigers from extinction by fighting poachers that slaughter these animals for traditional myths.
Comment Written 24-May-2017
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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Thank you for your wonderful and encouraging review for this haiku, Sandra. Thanks for your kind response to the poem.
