A Walk in his Shoes
Free verse20 total reviews
Comment from fluffnstuff
I certainly have to agree with whoever gave the first or second rating of exceptional to you...this is a very touching story you have told...and the picture goes right along with it. Yes there are some very dishonest people who are really just users of humanity...but definitely there are ones like you portrait in this free verse...it could be any of us in the blink of an eye...i lost my house and came close, i know. wish you the best in the contest. Fluff
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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I certainly have to agree with whoever gave the first or second rating of exceptional to you...this is a very touching story you have told...and the picture goes right along with it. Yes there are some very dishonest people who are really just users of humanity...but definitely there are ones like you portrait in this free verse...it could be any of us in the blink of an eye...i lost my house and came close, i know. wish you the best in the contest. Fluff
Comment Written 11-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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Thanks so much for the coveted green star. I am so pleased you thought this worthy. JoAnn
Comment from Nikki-Nicole
After reading, I find this to be a great poem.
Very interesting. Heartfelt.
The image shown supports the poem. The background selected goes well with the photo and color of font chosen.
I can clearly see that this poem meets the requirements of the contest. Therefore, I think 'A Walk in His Shoes' makes a good entry.
--No one really knows or understands what another person is going through until they've been there themselves.
Best of luck to you in the contest.
Thanks for sharing your Free Verse of Length.
Good luck with your future writing.
-Nicole-
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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After reading, I find this to be a great poem.
Very interesting. Heartfelt.
The image shown supports the poem. The background selected goes well with the photo and color of font chosen.
I can clearly see that this poem meets the requirements of the contest. Therefore, I think 'A Walk in His Shoes' makes a good entry.
--No one really knows or understands what another person is going through until they've been there themselves.
Best of luck to you in the contest.
Thanks for sharing your Free Verse of Length.
Good luck with your future writing.
-Nicole-
Comment Written 11-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2017
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Thanks so much.
Comment from Mitchell Brontė
This free verse poem was a heartfelt and compassionate write. It flowed very nicely. Comprehensible and very professionally written. The emotional reflections are insightful and impressive. Well chosen words throughout.
The descriptive words created impressions that will stay with me.
Good luck in the contest
Mitchell
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2017
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This free verse poem was a heartfelt and compassionate write. It flowed very nicely. Comprehensible and very professionally written. The emotional reflections are insightful and impressive. Well chosen words throughout.
The descriptive words created impressions that will stay with me.
Good luck in the contest
Mitchell
Comment Written 09-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2017
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Thanks so much for your kind observations and a great compliment that it will stay with you.
Comment from Mai Mai
This is a very interesting piece. It reminds us of the plight of some of our brethren and their struggle to survive. Very well done. Good job and good luck.
Mai Mai
reply by the author on 25-May-2017
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This is a very interesting piece. It reminds us of the plight of some of our brethren and their struggle to survive. Very well done. Good job and good luck.
Mai Mai
Comment Written 25-May-2017
reply by the author on 25-May-2017
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Thanks so much for reading and the thoughtful review.
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
A little girl comes up to him shyly
She thrusts her small hands out unafraid
A bag of food in them, she smiles a smile so sweet and pure
Her mother says, "She wanted you to have it, she bought it with her own money."
Dammit, what's wrong with him, he weeps for the second time today. '
Wonderful free verse with a touching ending, Good luck in the comp this is fantastic. Love Meia x
reply by the author on 25-May-2017
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A little girl comes up to him shyly
She thrusts her small hands out unafraid
A bag of food in them, she smiles a smile so sweet and pure
Her mother says, "She wanted you to have it, she bought it with her own money."
Dammit, what's wrong with him, he weeps for the second time today. '
Wonderful free verse with a touching ending, Good luck in the comp this is fantastic. Love Meia x
Comment Written 25-May-2017
reply by the author on 25-May-2017
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Thanks so much for saying so.
Comment from Mustang Patty
thank you for sharing your entry in the free verse contest. Within the lines, you've given us a glimpse into the every day life of one of the homeless. It seems that he has lost all of his hope; maybe the generosity of the little girl will be the light he needs,
~patty~
good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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thank you for sharing your entry in the free verse contest. Within the lines, you've given us a glimpse into the every day life of one of the homeless. It seems that he has lost all of his hope; maybe the generosity of the little girl will be the light he needs,
~patty~
good luck in the contest
Comment Written 24-May-2017
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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Thanks so much.
Comment from LaRosa
and I am reading through my tears...
You have expressed the heart of the homeless problem.
I've had a loved one who lived on the street. I can never look away and not see again.
I can barely remember the luxury of looking the other way and feeling...nothing.
Regardless of what led to alcohol or drugs, the pain and loss that takes them there is tragic.
Thank you for your voice.
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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and I am reading through my tears...
You have expressed the heart of the homeless problem.
I've had a loved one who lived on the street. I can never look away and not see again.
I can barely remember the luxury of looking the other way and feeling...nothing.
Regardless of what led to alcohol or drugs, the pain and loss that takes them there is tragic.
Thank you for your voice.
Comment Written 24-May-2017
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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I too, have someone. It does make it so hard to see. I know there are lots of people who take advantage but others are trying their best. Thanks so much for your thoughtful review and though I am sorry to make u cry, I guess poems are to evoke emotion so.... Thanks again.
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don't be sorry. tears cleanse. others need to be informed. and...you DID it! a great poem!
Comment from Margaret Ford
This is expressed perfectly, without clumsiness or corniness that so many (less sincere?) poems fall into. I was quickly drawn into the poem, and remained there all the way through. A fine reading experience, even though sad. Thank you -- Margaret
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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This is expressed perfectly, without clumsiness or corniness that so many (less sincere?) poems fall into. I was quickly drawn into the poem, and remained there all the way through. A fine reading experience, even though sad. Thank you -- Margaret
Comment Written 24-May-2017
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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Thanks so much for these very kind comments.
Comment from Dean Kuch
And I dare say I have little to no sympathy or compassion whatsoever for a homeless person who has put themselves in the position they find themselves in by indulging in the use of illegal drugs and narcotics, JoAnn.
Sorry, but people should be much smarter than that.
However, I DO have much compassion for a single mother on the lam from an abusive husband with her daughter in tow.
Or a man who, because of illness, can no longer perform the job he once did, and has no family to assist him.
Or even the military vet who gave an arm and a leg--literally!--while defending his country and cannot find employment because of his disabilities.
Those situations, and I'm sure there are many more scenarios, I understand.
Best wishes to you in the contest.
~Dean
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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And I dare say I have little to no sympathy or compassion whatsoever for a homeless person who has put themselves in the position they find themselves in by indulging in the use of illegal drugs and narcotics, JoAnn.
Sorry, but people should be much smarter than that.
However, I DO have much compassion for a single mother on the lam from an abusive husband with her daughter in tow.
Or a man who, because of illness, can no longer perform the job he once did, and has no family to assist him.
Or even the military vet who gave an arm and a leg--literally!--while defending his country and cannot find employment because of his disabilities.
Those situations, and I'm sure there are many more scenarios, I understand.
Best wishes to you in the contest.
~Dean
Comment Written 24-May-2017
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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Thanks much. Addiction is a disease but hard to understand for many. I work with many of these people,some of whom were once productive, some who have drug themselves out of the situation, and some who don't want.
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You're welcome. :)
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A raw and honest write about the plight of the homeless on our streets. Full of imagery and sadness as once someone becomes homeless, it's very hard to reverse the situation. Your poem had great heart and sympathy too, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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A raw and honest write about the plight of the homeless on our streets. Full of imagery and sadness as once someone becomes homeless, it's very hard to reverse the situation. Your poem had great heart and sympathy too, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 23-May-2017
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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Thanks so much for your thoughtful comments and for the 5 stars.
