To Do, Or Not To Do
A Naani Contest Entry4 total reviews
Comment from mvbrooks
Fun poem and the image suggests the narrator is talking to someone he/she loves.
just a thought -- the last two lines:
It won't matter, whatever they do,
As long as I do it with you
The quick move from "whatever they do" (3rd person) to "as long as I do it with you" Suggestion: change "they" to "we" as in, It won't matter, whatever we do....
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2017
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Fun poem and the image suggests the narrator is talking to someone he/she loves.
just a thought -- the last two lines:
It won't matter, whatever they do,
As long as I do it with you
The quick move from "whatever they do" (3rd person) to "as long as I do it with you" Suggestion: change "they" to "we" as in, It won't matter, whatever we do....
Comment Written 23-May-2017
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2017
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A belated Thank you for your compliment, comments and advice.
Don
Comment from Nikki-Nicole
After reading this, I find it to be a good poem.
It consists of four lines with a syllable count: 4-4-9-8
Total syllable count: 25
I can clearly see that this poem meets the requirements of the contest. Therefore, I think 'To Do, Or Not To Do' would make a good entry.
Nice artwork: The image shown supports the poem. The background color goes well with the portrait and the color of font chosen.
Best of luck to you in the contest.
Thanks for sharing your Naani Poem.
Good luck with your future writing.
-Nicole-
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2017
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After reading this, I find it to be a good poem.
It consists of four lines with a syllable count: 4-4-9-8
Total syllable count: 25
I can clearly see that this poem meets the requirements of the contest. Therefore, I think 'To Do, Or Not To Do' would make a good entry.
Nice artwork: The image shown supports the poem. The background color goes well with the portrait and the color of font chosen.
Best of luck to you in the contest.
Thanks for sharing your Naani Poem.
Good luck with your future writing.
-Nicole-
Comment Written 23-May-2017
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2017
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Another belated Thank you for your complimentary comments, Nikki.
Don
Comment from KyColonel Randal
Thank you for sharing. This naani poem has four lines, rhyming couplets of different lengths. I see you have entered this poem as a "Naani Poem" writing prompt entry. Good luck with your contest entry!
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Thank you for sharing. This naani poem has four lines, rhyming couplets of different lengths. I see you have entered this poem as a "Naani Poem" writing prompt entry. Good luck with your contest entry!
Comment Written 22-May-2017
Comment from SoundsofShane
Lovely poem. These short types of poems are hard to really paint a picture but I think you did a great job of getting the objective across By utilizing the amount of wording you had.
reply by the author on 22-May-2017
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Lovely poem. These short types of poems are hard to really paint a picture but I think you did a great job of getting the objective across By utilizing the amount of wording you had.
Comment Written 22-May-2017
reply by the author on 22-May-2017
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Thanks for your compliments, SoundsofShane. Much appreciated.
