Emotions in Motion
Sickness, Moving, Diet, but quiet10 total reviews
Comment from BeasPeas
Your poem describes a life that was rather unstable and moving around quite a bit. Even though your childhood was rocky, it seems you have turned out alright. Marilyn
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Your poem describes a life that was rather unstable and moving around quite a bit. Even though your childhood was rocky, it seems you have turned out alright. Marilyn
Comment Written 26-May-2017
Comment from Elijah Davis
Good job friend! Majority of the content was very mind grabbing, but as a friend there was a little bit that wasn't as strong. Your rhyme scheme was decent as well, but again I promise this only one friends opinion and advice. Keep it up! Good luck in contest!
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Good job friend! Majority of the content was very mind grabbing, but as a friend there was a little bit that wasn't as strong. Your rhyme scheme was decent as well, but again I promise this only one friends opinion and advice. Keep it up! Good luck in contest!
Comment Written 24-May-2017
Comment from pbomar1115
The is very nice. You put your creative efforts to a challenge you met. Starting life sickly but you bounce back. Love your mom and dad you probably wished they stayed together if it was left up to you but it was not. Your mother found another. You sought help. Your life was enriched when you was exposed to the arts.
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The is very nice. You put your creative efforts to a challenge you met. Starting life sickly but you bounce back. Love your mom and dad you probably wished they stayed together if it was left up to you but it was not. Your mother found another. You sought help. Your life was enriched when you was exposed to the arts.
Comment Written 24-May-2017
Comment from KyColonel Randal
Thank you for sharing. This appears to be a poem about childhood in rhyming couplets. It would be even better if the meter was evened out. This should be a good poem for the contest. Good luck with your contest entry!
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Thank you for sharing. This appears to be a poem about childhood in rhyming couplets. It would be even better if the meter was evened out. This should be a good poem for the contest. Good luck with your contest entry!
Comment Written 24-May-2017
Comment from zlp22
Good poem on life that many have at this time, the old way of living when the parents stayed together is rare now. People move and never set down roots, good poem on a childhood.
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Good poem on life that many have at this time, the old way of living when the parents stayed together is rare now. People move and never set down roots, good poem on a childhood.
Comment Written 22-May-2017
Comment from rosehill (Wendy)
I must say I had to smile at the Pop Tart followed by a life culturally rich, but I suppose the lowly Pop Tart is emblematic of, dare I say, American Pop culture? I think the trials and tribulations of childhood make us much stronger and often better people than those who ate Captain Crunch with a silver spoon. More creative too, so use what you have gone through, I always say. I appreciated all you exposed and hinted at in the poem. - Wendy
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I must say I had to smile at the Pop Tart followed by a life culturally rich, but I suppose the lowly Pop Tart is emblematic of, dare I say, American Pop culture? I think the trials and tribulations of childhood make us much stronger and often better people than those who ate Captain Crunch with a silver spoon. More creative too, so use what you have gone through, I always say. I appreciated all you exposed and hinted at in the poem. - Wendy
Comment Written 22-May-2017
Comment from Mustang Patty
You've painted a picture of a dismal childhood. I felt the pang of echoes as I read about the pop-tarts. (I lived on junk food for years - whatever was left in the cupboards while my mom was out with her boyfriends.)
Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest,
~patty~
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You've painted a picture of a dismal childhood. I felt the pang of echoes as I read about the pop-tarts. (I lived on junk food for years - whatever was left in the cupboards while my mom was out with her boyfriends.)
Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest,
~patty~
Comment Written 22-May-2017
Comment from oliver818
I really enjoyed this poem, it's like a series of memories all sewn together in confusion making a very interesting read. Thanks for sharing and have a really great day
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I really enjoyed this poem, it's like a series of memories all sewn together in confusion making a very interesting read. Thanks for sharing and have a really great day
Comment Written 22-May-2017
Comment from mike1817
It reads as stressful and a hard childhood. You describe it very believably and honestly. It's the simplicity of the words that let me drift. I looked for more poetry, more creative use of words. However it rang true to the topic. sophisticated words don't resonate with childhood. Mike1817
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It reads as stressful and a hard childhood. You describe it very believably and honestly. It's the simplicity of the words that let me drift. I looked for more poetry, more creative use of words. However it rang true to the topic. sophisticated words don't resonate with childhood. Mike1817
Comment Written 21-May-2017
Comment from w.j.debi
You describe a life with sadness and joy in it. It sounds like you had a rough entry into the world and life was not easy, not all dreams came to be, but you had other benefits and are grateful what you did receive.
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You describe a life with sadness and joy in it. It sounds like you had a rough entry into the world and life was not easy, not all dreams came to be, but you had other benefits and are grateful what you did receive.
Comment Written 21-May-2017
