Comment from valmay

Excellent

What a great thought provoking piece with the twist in the last line. Our beleaguered bees are so important to the world. The illustration was perfect. Good luck.

 Comment Written 23-May-2017

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reply by the author on 27-May-2017

Thanks for reading and critique zanya

Comment from mvbrooks

Excellent

I'm not familiar with "ouverture" and wondered if you had meant "overture"? The energy of summer arriving is paralleled well with the "beleaguered bees." Provides a very positive sense of anticipation

 Comment Written 23-May-2017

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reply by the author on 27-May-2017

Thanks for reading zanya

Comment from Cmelton

Excellent

I think you have a great little poem here. I like your perfect description and your wonderful picture. You have done a great job of using the limitations you have to produce a fine poem. Great job.

 Comment Written 21-May-2017

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reply by the author on 27-May-2017

Thanks for reading & critique zanya

Comment from Nikki-Nicole

Excellent

You've written a nice poem.
Great artwork: The image shown supports the poem. The background goes well with the art and color of font chosen.
Best of luck to you in the contest.
Thanks for sharing your Naani.
Good luck with your future writing.
-Nicole-

 Comment Written 21-May-2017

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reply by the author on 27-May-2017

Thanks for reading & critique zanya