More Than Dancing
Prose Potlatch Challenge-Drabble13 total reviews
Comment from Gloria ....
Drabble fiction, eh? I know I've read a couple but haven't really delved into the form or even considered giving one a try. This is a lovely vignette with a imaginative tone.
Laughing at the sun is always a innocent and young way to greet the day.
Ange
reply by the author on 28-May-2017
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Drabble fiction, eh? I know I've read a couple but haven't really delved into the form or even considered giving one a try. This is a lovely vignette with a imaginative tone.
Laughing at the sun is always a innocent and young way to greet the day.
Ange
Comment Written 27-May-2017
reply by the author on 28-May-2017
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The key is they are only 100 words. Much less painful for the reviewer, yes?
Laughing at the sun beats the alternative for sure. You always manage to be so kind. Much appreciated.
Mav
Comment from Mustang Patty
thank you for sharing this interesting look at love and shadows. Your inspired piece and use of the 'shadow' gives a great insight to the way your mind works. Well done,
~patty~
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thank you for sharing this interesting look at love and shadows. Your inspired piece and use of the 'shadow' gives a great insight to the way your mind works. Well done,
~patty~
Comment Written 24-May-2017
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Quite a unique way of writing about shadows mikey, well done, very creative, the shadows of your own love making watching and spurring you both on. Very different, great write.
cheers,
valda
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Quite a unique way of writing about shadows mikey, well done, very creative, the shadows of your own love making watching and spurring you both on. Very different, great write.
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 23-May-2017
Comment from Dean Kuch
Once when I told a "bed mate" that she was very seductive, she corrected me and told me quite unequivocally; "Things are ... seductive. People are sensual"
She was straddling me while in the throes of passion.
Who was I to argue?
Nice drabble, Mike. Very sensua...uh, e-r-r-rrrr, heh-heh, seductive.
Have a nice Monday
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Once when I told a "bed mate" that she was very seductive, she corrected me and told me quite unequivocally; "Things are ... seductive. People are sensual"
She was straddling me while in the throes of passion.
Who was I to argue?
Nice drabble, Mike. Very sensua...uh, e-r-r-rrrr, heh-heh, seductive.
Have a nice Monday
Comment Written 22-May-2017
Comment from Sankey
Nice work wondering about the shadows? Is there some sort of erotic image in there or something? NO spags well done. I added some more to the Neighbours chapter of my biography which was a split off the Let Go and let God chapter near the end. Pictures changed in Let Go Chapter and added to Neighbours. Still gotta add a Foreword, then finished.
Sorry my mistake fixed now.
reply by the author on 22-May-2017
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Nice work wondering about the shadows? Is there some sort of erotic image in there or something? NO spags well done. I added some more to the Neighbours chapter of my biography which was a split off the Let Go and let God chapter near the end. Pictures changed in Let Go Chapter and added to Neighbours. Still gotta add a Foreword, then finished.
Sorry my mistake fixed now.
Comment Written 22-May-2017
reply by the author on 22-May-2017
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I added a comment to one I'd already reviewed. I wonder if you received a notice. I've been watching.
No, this isn't really all that erotic. More like forgetting what we look like on the outside and concentrating on the inside. :))
You know you gave me a four? Did I use "gotten" LOL You actually have me to the point where I never use that word. It IS a terrible word. :))
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written drabble fiction. Our shadows can be fun to look at when we do something out of the ordinary. Somethings are just better in complete darkness. Lol.
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A very well-written drabble fiction. Our shadows can be fun to look at when we do something out of the ordinary. Somethings are just better in complete darkness. Lol.
Comment Written 22-May-2017
Comment from frierajac
I like the story of shadows on the wall in candlelight. It has an inexorable charm.
You have clarified the dread and the delight of the experience. Even if it is a drabble,
it could be included in a longer work.
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I like the story of shadows on the wall in candlelight. It has an inexorable charm.
You have clarified the dread and the delight of the experience. Even if it is a drabble,
it could be included in a longer work.
Comment Written 21-May-2017
Comment from nordicgirl
Damn..you can sure write some steamy stuff without using any even slightly naughty words. Not sure how you manage, but it makes for flushed cheks. NG xx
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Damn..you can sure write some steamy stuff without using any even slightly naughty words. Not sure how you manage, but it makes for flushed cheks. NG xx
Comment Written 21-May-2017
Comment from WalkerMan
You are right about shadows. Most people do not think about them from this particular viewpoint, though they may observe shadows of others from a distance. You are also right about mutual desire, as one-way lust generally cannot sustain a relationship. Yes, waking up together after such a night is joyous, and often becomes a continuation of the fun. Well done.
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You are right about shadows. Most people do not think about them from this particular viewpoint, though they may observe shadows of others from a distance. You are also right about mutual desire, as one-way lust generally cannot sustain a relationship. Yes, waking up together after such a night is joyous, and often becomes a continuation of the fun. Well done.
Comment Written 21-May-2017
Comment from DR DIP
You know Michael I really like this write. Your descriptive images are very erotic and work well in your piece
I blew out the candle and somehow we survived the truth of our desires and confirmed our devotion to each other.
Love this line.
dip
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You know Michael I really like this write. Your descriptive images are very erotic and work well in your piece
I blew out the candle and somehow we survived the truth of our desires and confirmed our devotion to each other.
Love this line.
dip
Comment Written 21-May-2017
