Travesty of Justice
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Bittersweet Victory"Two people accused of a crime they didn't commit.
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Comment from Ric Myworld
You must know something about pain and unfortunate situations. Otherwise, you wouldn't be able to create such desperation. Or on the other hand, be a book and movie junkie like me. Thanks for sharing another fine chapter. :-)
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reply by the author on 19-Jun-2017
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You must know something about pain and unfortunate situations. Otherwise, you wouldn't be able to create such desperation. Or on the other hand, be a book and movie junkie like me. Thanks for sharing another fine chapter. :-)
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Comment Written 18-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2017
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Thank you for all of your support, and for all of your help. I didn't understand what you meant by the mark throughs so I left it alone.
Thank you so much for helping me learn, take care.
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Meant by the mark through? Are you talking about this chapter? :-)
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chapter 3 has the marks throughs.
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Wow, that's crazy. I didn't knowingly put those mark-through lines on there. Now, I'm wondering how they got there. I do see where I added the (my) in a sentence and things like that, but I never intentionally put lines through those sentences. I'm so sorry. Had you not told me, I would have never known. I'm still looking into it. I'll let you know when I figure out what happened. Sorry again. :-)
Comment from Poetic Friend
Oh my, Mistydawn, I did not expect the story to become violent so early in the book. In this chapter, we get a horrific glimpse into the domestic violence that Julia experienced. As difficult as it was to read, you descriptively told the story of the violence, blow by blow.
Again, you made the story so interesting and riveting that the reader is anxious to read the next chapter.
I am fanning you so I can follow the story.
reply by the author on 20-May-2017
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Oh my, Mistydawn, I did not expect the story to become violent so early in the book. In this chapter, we get a horrific glimpse into the domestic violence that Julia experienced. As difficult as it was to read, you descriptively told the story of the violence, blow by blow.
Again, you made the story so interesting and riveting that the reader is anxious to read the next chapter.
I am fanning you so I can follow the story.
Comment Written 20-May-2017
reply by the author on 20-May-2017
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Thank you so much for your wonderful review, I'm so glad you liked it despite its violence. I'm so glad that you decided to be online today and was able to catch the next chapter.
Julia is my second protagonist/ narrator who also faces a travesty of justices. I wanted to show the readers why she did what she did, so they'd better understand her story. After reading your review, I'm thinking that maybe I should tone down the description a little, what do you think?
I hope you'll be able to catch the next chapter where I'll trade the dark violent tone for hot passionate love.
Thank you again for your fantastic review, take care.
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No, I think the description was well-written. Please do not make changes based upon my review. It is just me, I am squeamish about violence. I reviewed your story from a literary viewpoint, not based on my view of violence.
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No, I think the description was well-written. Please do not make changes based upon my review. It is just me, I am squeamish about violence. I reviewed your story from a literary viewpoint, not based on my view of violence.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Rightly, it is a bittersweet victory, but at last, after dire struggles, theme is realistic with balanced plot development with a climax and happy, satisfactory but curious ending, it is attitude (of winning) not the aptitude (logical action) always brings out fruition; I liked.
reply by the author on 20-May-2017
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Rightly, it is a bittersweet victory, but at last, after dire struggles, theme is realistic with balanced plot development with a climax and happy, satisfactory but curious ending, it is attitude (of winning) not the aptitude (logical action) always brings out fruition; I liked.
Comment Written 20-May-2017
reply by the author on 20-May-2017
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Thank you for such a nice review and for reading the second chapter of my story. I am so glad that you liked it. Poor Julia fought so hard to survive only to find herself on the verge of death. Will she miraculous survive or will this be her final battle?
The next chapter switches back to Larry, the hot passionate lover. The chapter after that will be Julia again. I hope you'll stick around and read both.
Thank you again for such a grand review, take care.
