New Hope
a naani15 total reviews
Comment from marybell1
I enjoyed reading you poem "New Day". You kept to the rule of 20 to 25 syllables and chose a lovely appropriate photo.
Best of luck,
Marybell1.
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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I enjoyed reading you poem "New Day". You kept to the rule of 20 to 25 syllables and chose a lovely appropriate photo.
Best of luck,
Marybell1.
Comment Written 24-May-2017
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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Thank you for your encouraging comments!
Comment from Dean Kuch
For a moment there I thought you might be the 45th president of these great United States of America, what with the "twittering" and all.
That is at least until I read your author's notes.
Nice Naani, well written.
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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For a moment there I thought you might be the 45th president of these great United States of America, what with the "twittering" and all.
That is at least until I read your author's notes.
Nice Naani, well written.
Comment Written 24-May-2017
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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Thanks! No, I prefer twittering of the non electronic kind. Appreciate the encouraging review!
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Me too!
You're very welcome. :)
Comment from Caressa_08
You must live in a country setting, and when I go to my nature home out in the woods , the same choir of birds like your poem reveals, ring out to my ears and anyone else who is sensitive to that, and well, Occasionally go visit there Though, in the city their tweets are very little, at the break of dawn
Really like the term, God's choir, and, too the last line of your poem, and wonderful picture.
Thanks' for sharing & Best Wishes for your entry...Caressa_08
reply by the author on 23-May-2017
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You must live in a country setting, and when I go to my nature home out in the woods , the same choir of birds like your poem reveals, ring out to my ears and anyone else who is sensitive to that, and well, Occasionally go visit there Though, in the city their tweets are very little, at the break of dawn
Really like the term, God's choir, and, too the last line of your poem, and wonderful picture.
Thanks' for sharing & Best Wishes for your entry...Caressa_08
Comment Written 23-May-2017
reply by the author on 23-May-2017
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Appreciate very much your positive feedback!
Comment from valmay
A beautiful image of a hopeful dawn. A lifting of the morning mist and the song of the birds, small things that express a lot.
Well done and good luck.
reply by the author on 23-May-2017
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A beautiful image of a hopeful dawn. A lifting of the morning mist and the song of the birds, small things that express a lot.
Well done and good luck.
Comment Written 23-May-2017
reply by the author on 23-May-2017
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Thank you for stopping by to read and review!
Comment from kathleenspalding
Very nice Naani poem delivers an understandable and uplifting message using very few words. I don't see anything that needs to be corrected. Good job!
reply by the author on 23-May-2017
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Very nice Naani poem delivers an understandable and uplifting message using very few words. I don't see anything that needs to be corrected. Good job!
Comment Written 23-May-2017
reply by the author on 23-May-2017
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Thanks so much for reading and reviewing!
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You're welcome
Comment from Nikki-Nicole
After reading this, I find it to be a good poem.
It consists of four lines that contain a syllable count: 5-6-5-8
Total syllable count: 24
I can clearly see that this poem meets the requirements of the contest. Therefore, I think 'New Day' would make a good entry.
Beautiful artwork: The image shown supports the poem. The background color goes well with the art and the color of font chosen.
Best of luck to you in the contest.
Thanks for sharing your Naani Poem.
Good luck with your future writing.
-Nicole-
reply by the author on 23-May-2017
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After reading this, I find it to be a good poem.
It consists of four lines that contain a syllable count: 5-6-5-8
Total syllable count: 24
I can clearly see that this poem meets the requirements of the contest. Therefore, I think 'New Day' would make a good entry.
Beautiful artwork: The image shown supports the poem. The background color goes well with the art and the color of font chosen.
Best of luck to you in the contest.
Thanks for sharing your Naani Poem.
Good luck with your future writing.
-Nicole-
Comment Written 23-May-2017
reply by the author on 23-May-2017
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Appreciate very much your thoughts and positive feedback!
Comment from mvbrooks
Lovely poem that sets a mood of comfort and hope. It was great to see a reference to "twittering" that had nothing to do with technology. The image is an ideal match and supports the positive mood of the poem.
reply by the author on 23-May-2017
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Lovely poem that sets a mood of comfort and hope. It was great to see a reference to "twittering" that had nothing to do with technology. The image is an ideal match and supports the positive mood of the poem.
Comment Written 23-May-2017
reply by the author on 23-May-2017
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review. And I'm old school - twitter should refer only to those of the natural kind!
Comment from BeasPeas
This is a lovely poem and well illustrated and I agree with you. The sound of birds in the morning is joyful. Suggest altering the second line to: "God's choir blend(s) their (its) voices (voice).
"Choir" is a singular noun although it has many in it. Marilyn
reply by the author on 23-May-2017
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This is a lovely poem and well illustrated and I agree with you. The sound of birds in the morning is joyful. Suggest altering the second line to: "God's choir blend(s) their (its) voices (voice).
"Choir" is a singular noun although it has many in it. Marilyn
Comment Written 23-May-2017
reply by the author on 23-May-2017
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Thank you for your helpful suggestions!
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You are welcome. Collective nouns, such as choir, can be confusing.
Comment from PoemsOfDD
June, this is a nicely written Naani poem written well within the syllable count. The poem leaves the reader able to hear the early morning chatter of lively birds and feel the blessings of nature and a new day. Great picture attached which also enhances the mood of this poem. Well done. ~DD
reply by the author on 22-May-2017
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June, this is a nicely written Naani poem written well within the syllable count. The poem leaves the reader able to hear the early morning chatter of lively birds and feel the blessings of nature and a new day. Great picture attached which also enhances the mood of this poem. Well done. ~DD
Comment Written 22-May-2017
reply by the author on 22-May-2017
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Thank you for your insightful review!
Comment from Bill Schott
This naani, New Day, uses twenty-four syllables to bring the three meanings of faith to this poem. Those are wonder of a powerful being, the joy that He loves us, and the hope that we can live through a peaceful eternity.
reply by the author on 21-May-2017
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This naani, New Day, uses twenty-four syllables to bring the three meanings of faith to this poem. Those are wonder of a powerful being, the joy that He loves us, and the hope that we can live through a peaceful eternity.
Comment Written 21-May-2017
reply by the author on 21-May-2017
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Thank you for your insightful review!
