From out of the Grayness
Viewing comments for Chapter 49 "Through this valley"Reaching from the gray areas to understand life
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Comment from Caressa_08
This even gets me colder than what I feeling as the temps drop to a chilly numbers over night where I reside, even if it is Spring, weather here in the Midwest USA...it has been somewhat extreme, and unpredictable...And do think what a great poem letting us know about no more skiing alone.
Thanks for sharing & hope to read more of your works...Caressa_08
reply by the author on 25-May-2017
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This even gets me colder than what I feeling as the temps drop to a chilly numbers over night where I reside, even if it is Spring, weather here in the Midwest USA...it has been somewhat extreme, and unpredictable...And do think what a great poem letting us know about no more skiing alone.
Thanks for sharing & hope to read more of your works...Caressa_08
Comment Written 21-May-2017
reply by the author on 25-May-2017
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Thanks Caressa, for you kind review and stars, they are sincerely appreciated! HIS GRAYNESS: Vance
Comment from RGstar
Vance, this is not a tit for tat, six stars my friend, for those know me well only come deserved.
This is a beautiful prayer, or ask.
These can be so cliched, and emotion not seemed real...not this.
As soon as I read the first lines, I was hoping you carried it all the way through, and you did not disappoint.
The only thing I might look at is the last line ''with one last kiss''
I thought that may be too nice, too detract from the sincerity of all before. Its romantic and should be emotional, but not original, and I am sure if you dig deep, there may be a better alternative, for it is a fine write indeed, and has my seal. Just felt the last line, which should be the strongest, and it may look a little convenient or too nice.
Having said that, it does not detract from the beautiful flow as well sincere in its passage to the reader.
Bravo.
My best wishes.
Good write.
RG
reply by the author on 25-May-2017
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Vance, this is not a tit for tat, six stars my friend, for those know me well only come deserved.
This is a beautiful prayer, or ask.
These can be so cliched, and emotion not seemed real...not this.
As soon as I read the first lines, I was hoping you carried it all the way through, and you did not disappoint.
The only thing I might look at is the last line ''with one last kiss''
I thought that may be too nice, too detract from the sincerity of all before. Its romantic and should be emotional, but not original, and I am sure if you dig deep, there may be a better alternative, for it is a fine write indeed, and has my seal. Just felt the last line, which should be the strongest, and it may look a little convenient or too nice.
Having said that, it does not detract from the beautiful flow as well sincere in its passage to the reader.
Bravo.
My best wishes.
Good write.
RG
Comment Written 20-May-2017
reply by the author on 25-May-2017
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Wow! Thanks so much RG, for this great review and generous stars! I'm humbled and appreciate you excellent feedback. All the best always! Vance
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I can feel the fear in ths poem as it is a very real experience and poetry like this is rare and like gold dust. Your experience inspired you to put pen to paper. I have been alone in the snowy mountains and it can be austere and frightening with total silence all around, I can identify with your words here. Love Dolly x
reply by the author on 25-May-2017
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I can feel the fear in ths poem as it is a very real experience and poetry like this is rare and like gold dust. Your experience inspired you to put pen to paper. I have been alone in the snowy mountains and it can be austere and frightening with total silence all around, I can identify with your words here. Love Dolly x
Comment Written 20-May-2017
reply by the author on 25-May-2017
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Thanks so much Dolly, for your lovely review and stars. It is much appreciated and I'm delighted that you enjoyed this! HIS GRAYNESS; Vance
Comment from marybell1
I enjoyed reading your poem "Through This Valley". You rhymed it well. If that is what happened I would take it as a warning and never try it again.
Best of luck.
Marybell1.
reply by the author on 25-May-2017
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I enjoyed reading your poem "Through This Valley". You rhymed it well. If that is what happened I would take it as a warning and never try it again.
Best of luck.
Marybell1.
Comment Written 20-May-2017
reply by the author on 25-May-2017
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Thank you Marybell, for this lovely review and be sure...I won't be trying this again and hope it will give others out there a second thought before they attempt it! Blessings! HIS GRAYNESS Vance
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Sorry for the laterally..Been off on a cruise.
Marybell1.
Comment from tfawcus
Ha! I know that feeling. I, too, have been frozen in the mountains, both by the elements and by fear! This skiing anecdote of course transfers rather well to the human condition where, no matter how hard the going, one always has God at one's side. I imagine that may have been in the back of your mind, as well.
reply by the author on 25-May-2017
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Ha! I know that feeling. I, too, have been frozen in the mountains, both by the elements and by fear! This skiing anecdote of course transfers rather well to the human condition where, no matter how hard the going, one always has God at one's side. I imagine that may have been in the back of your mind, as well.
Comment Written 20-May-2017
reply by the author on 25-May-2017
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Thanks so much Tony for this great review and stars! I learned a big lesson here that I hope will give others a second thought before doing such a dumb thing! Blessings always! Vance
Comment from Spitfire
Sounds as if you had a close brush with death. Bitter weather images:
winds howl harsh
My knees are raw
From ice and stone
You definitely want that kiss to be warm.
Quite an experience.
Glad God ignored your request for one last kiss. You can live now to get warm kisses while alive. Mine included.
Fondly,
Shari
reply by the author on 25-May-2017
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Sounds as if you had a close brush with death. Bitter weather images:
winds howl harsh
My knees are raw
From ice and stone
You definitely want that kiss to be warm.
Quite an experience.
Glad God ignored your request for one last kiss. You can live now to get warm kisses while alive. Mine included.
Fondly,
Shari
Comment Written 19-May-2017
reply by the author on 25-May-2017
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Thank you Shari for this great review and stars! I'm hopeful this will keep others from any similarly DUMB Thoughts! BLESSINGS ALWAYS: Vance
Comment from BeasPeas
This is a wonderful poem, Vance. I see that it is in response to sports, but it is very spiritual and appropriate for any genre. Sorry I don't have a sixer for you. I hope you are doing well. Marilyn
reply by the author on 25-May-2017
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This is a wonderful poem, Vance. I see that it is in response to sports, but it is very spiritual and appropriate for any genre. Sorry I don't have a sixer for you. I hope you are doing well. Marilyn
Comment Written 19-May-2017
reply by the author on 25-May-2017
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Thanks for the virtual six, dear one, and I appreciate it greatly. Hearing from you is always a treat! Blessings always! Vance
Comment from Dean Kuch
Oh mercy, Vance. Did you get yourself involved in a precarious and deadly situation skiing alone recently? based on what you've stated in your author's notes coupled with the context of your poem, that's precisely what it sounded like to me.
However, this poem could pertain to many different types of less-than-favorable circumstances.
A heavy drinker at the bottom of the bottle or a heroin addict at the end of their rope...quite literally!
Great writing, my friend.
reply by the author on 23-May-2017
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Oh mercy, Vance. Did you get yourself involved in a precarious and deadly situation skiing alone recently? based on what you've stated in your author's notes coupled with the context of your poem, that's precisely what it sounded like to me.
However, this poem could pertain to many different types of less-than-favorable circumstances.
A heavy drinker at the bottom of the bottle or a heroin addict at the end of their rope...quite literally!
Great writing, my friend.
Comment Written 19-May-2017
reply by the author on 23-May-2017
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Thanks Dean, for this great review and this happened a long time ago when I was a bit more foolhardy and reckless. I don't ski anymore and never plan to do any hiking in the great wilderness! My challenges are all now focused on writing and so far, I've not found that quite as dangerous. All the best, dear friend! Vance
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Writing may even be a bot more dangerous, Vance, lol.
You're more than welcome, my friend.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Vance
Just to know you skied alone puts fear in me.
Vance the way how you wrote your poem is so impressing of how you have faith in God when you said
From prayers alone
If I should perish
Here this night
I pray dear God
To find your light
Gert
reply by the author on 23-May-2017
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Hello Vance
Just to know you skied alone puts fear in me.
Vance the way how you wrote your poem is so impressing of how you have faith in God when you said
From prayers alone
If I should perish
Here this night
I pray dear God
To find your light
Gert
Comment Written 19-May-2017
reply by the author on 23-May-2017
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Hi Gert: this happened a long time ago when I thought I could do anything and "thinking" was apparently NOT one of those things that I had mastered with great skill. Glad that praying was! It's Always a delight hear from you. Blessings and Hugs Vance
Comment from Kingsrookviii
Wow, Vance. This is an incredible poem and very touching as a prayer/poem. It is also very interesting to me that your refer to this as your last ski trip through this valley, alone; man alive, I haven't snow skied since 1979! I'm not dead yet, but in sad shape compared to the bad boy I was way back when. Still, I may do it again on a blue slope - no black or cross-country for this Gramps. Great, great , great poem. Well don, my friend. Bruce.
reply by the author on 23-May-2017
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Wow, Vance. This is an incredible poem and very touching as a prayer/poem. It is also very interesting to me that your refer to this as your last ski trip through this valley, alone; man alive, I haven't snow skied since 1979! I'm not dead yet, but in sad shape compared to the bad boy I was way back when. Still, I may do it again on a blue slope - no black or cross-country for this Gramps. Great, great , great poem. Well don, my friend. Bruce.
Comment Written 19-May-2017
reply by the author on 23-May-2017
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Thanks so much Bruce for this wonderful review and generous stars! I thought that sharing this experience could offer some perspective to those out there in "desperate" situations and I hope it does the job. I know it did for me as it was a true blessing to walk out of there alive...a bit frozen, but actually smiling! Blessings, dear friend and thanks again! Vance
