Comment from F. Wehr3

Excellent

I thought this was a good entry for the contest. Funny line at the end. Best of luck in the contest. I found a few things for your consideration.

Footsteps from behind startled me and I turned to find a man standing looking at me. --Recommend a comma before and.

He walked closer,--Suggest a period instead of a comma.

Grabbing me hungrily he placed his soft, full lips on mine and I melted with the heat.--Suggest a comma after hungrily and after mine.

As he pulled away I smiled and whispered softly "Kissing is an extra 20, honey!"--Suggest a comma after away and after softly.

Take care,
Russell

 Comment Written 20-May-2017

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reply by the author on 20-May-2017

Thank you so much for your encouraging and detailed review. I will certainly look at the suggestions, thank you for pointing them out : )

Comment from Mustang Patty

Excellent

thank you for sharing your entry in the 100 Word Dash contest. Your piece did present a kiss between two strangers, and it was well told. Good luck in the contest,
~patty~

 Comment Written 19-May-2017

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reply by the author on 19-May-2017

Thank you so much for taking the time to review : )

Comment from Phyllis Stewart

Excellent

Clever story. You put a surprise at the end, which is preferred in flash fiction. In this case, we learn that she's a prostitute. I had no idea. :)

 Comment Written 19-May-2017

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reply by the author on 19-May-2017

Many thanks for your kind review. Yes, thought I'd mix it up a bit : )

Comment from Cmelton

Excellent

Great job on the ending. I never saw it coming. I think you really did a great ob on the story, because with a story so short, you barely have time to get a message across, so you have to leave your mark. You accomplished that with how you ended the story. It was great for an easy laugh. Good luck in the contest.

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 Comment Written 19-May-2017

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reply by the author on 19-May-2017

Thank you for your encouraging review, very much appreciated : )

Comment from rspoet

Excellent

An excellent entry for the flash kiss contest
with the surprise ending
Kisses aren't cheap these days
Excellent descriptive writing that sets the scene up very well
I hope the stranger is loaded, money wise
Unusual art work to match
Well done
Good luck in the contest
RS





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 Comment Written 18-May-2017

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reply by the author on 19-May-2017

Thanks for your kind and encouraging words. I appreciate your time : )