Night Walk
a poem inspired by a Vincent Van Gogh painting33 total reviews
Comment from Thomas Bowling
This is an excellent contest entry. I understand the reasoning, but I don't care for the highlights. I find them distracting and they take away from the reading experience.
reply by the author on 19-May-2017
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This is an excellent contest entry. I understand the reasoning, but I don't care for the highlights. I find them distracting and they take away from the reading experience.
Comment Written 19-May-2017
reply by the author on 19-May-2017
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Thank you for sharing my poem, Thomas, and your comments. I agree the highlighting is disconcerting, but many readers won't take the time to look for the required words if they are not pointed out. Rod
Comment from Bill O'Bier
A great poem about fathers and sons. A father is a man who expects his son to be as good a man as he meant to be. My father didn't tell me how to live; he lived, and let me watch him do it. Thanks for an inspiring write.
Wishing you the best...
Bill~
reply by the author on 19-May-2017
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A great poem about fathers and sons. A father is a man who expects his son to be as good a man as he meant to be. My father didn't tell me how to live; he lived, and let me watch him do it. Thanks for an inspiring write.
Wishing you the best...
Bill~
Comment Written 19-May-2017
reply by the author on 19-May-2017
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I am delighted you found my interpretation of Van Gogh's painting "inspiring." Thanks so much for sharing. Rod
Comment from bertranclan
I enjoyed your poem based upon the Vincent Van Gogh painting. You painted great images and I wished the poem would go on to tell us what the girl and young lad did. Well done.
reply by the author on 19-May-2017
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I enjoyed your poem based upon the Vincent Van Gogh painting. You painted great images and I wished the poem would go on to tell us what the girl and young lad did. Well done.
Comment Written 18-May-2017
reply by the author on 19-May-2017
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I am delighted you enjoyed my irrational of the Van Gogh painting. Thank you for your very kind praise.
Comment from Irish Rain
This is quite a lovely entry in this contest, using all the words, and goes wonderfully with the painting. Good luck to you, blessings...
reply by the author on 18-May-2017
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This is quite a lovely entry in this contest, using all the words, and goes wonderfully with the painting. Good luck to you, blessings...
Comment Written 18-May-2017
reply by the author on 18-May-2017
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Thank you so much, Irish Rain, for your kind comments. It was fun to interpret Van Gogh's painting poetically.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is an unusual and clever write about a Van Gough painting which I may have seen in the gallery! I love your interpretation of if, down to earth and sane. You used all the words for the contest and I wish you luck, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 18-May-2017
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This is an unusual and clever write about a Van Gough painting which I may have seen in the gallery! I love your interpretation of if, down to earth and sane. You used all the words for the contest and I wish you luck, love Dolly x
Comment Written 18-May-2017
reply by the author on 18-May-2017
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Thank you so much, Dolly, for your kind praise. I am delighted you enjoyed my interpretation of Van Gogh's painting.
Comment from Mitchell Brontė
How clever, using a painting by Vincent Van Gogh to include the writing prompt words.
A lovely flow throughout with some wonderful lines.
Have a lovely evening
Mitchell
reply by the author on 18-May-2017
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How clever, using a painting by Vincent Van Gogh to include the writing prompt words.
A lovely flow throughout with some wonderful lines.
Have a lovely evening
Mitchell
Comment Written 18-May-2017
reply by the author on 18-May-2017
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Thank you so much, Mitchell, for your kind praise of "Night Walk." I am delighted you enjoyed my interpretation of Van Gogh's painting.
Comment from damommy
This is lovely. I know it's hard to use certain assigned words, but you managed to do well with it.
Your poem flows so smoothly, just flows along. Very enjoyable.
Good luck in the contest. 8-)
reply by the author on 18-May-2017
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This is lovely. I know it's hard to use certain assigned words, but you managed to do well with it.
Your poem flows so smoothly, just flows along. Very enjoyable.
Good luck in the contest. 8-)
Comment Written 18-May-2017
reply by the author on 18-May-2017
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I am very pleased you enjoyed my poem.
Comment from rama devi
Outstanding entry for the contest..elqouent and wonderfully ekphrastic! I would give it a six if I had one left. Excelent rhymes, flow and phonetics. Nice narrative voicing.
Favorite lines:
past fields we've plowed 'neath spacious skies.
Our work is done, time's flexible.
Love the slant rhymes here and the imagery tone and message:
That cypress tree and old blue fir
were present there before my birth.
The lilac bush by barn's red door
is now in bloom, perfumes the air.
*spacing typo:
I'm hearing hooves and seeing dust,
*suggestion:
I'll walk alone now(,) if I must.
Well done.
Good luck!
Van Gogh is my favorite artist.
Warmly, rd
reply by the author on 18-May-2017
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Outstanding entry for the contest..elqouent and wonderfully ekphrastic! I would give it a six if I had one left. Excelent rhymes, flow and phonetics. Nice narrative voicing.
Favorite lines:
past fields we've plowed 'neath spacious skies.
Our work is done, time's flexible.
Love the slant rhymes here and the imagery tone and message:
That cypress tree and old blue fir
were present there before my birth.
The lilac bush by barn's red door
is now in bloom, perfumes the air.
*spacing typo:
I'm hearing hooves and seeing dust,
*suggestion:
I'll walk alone now(,) if I must.
Well done.
Good luck!
Van Gogh is my favorite artist.
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 18-May-2017
reply by the author on 18-May-2017
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Thank you so much, rama, for this thoughtful review and your kind praise. I am delighted you enjoyed my interpretation of this painting by your favorite artist.
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Comment from Pantygynt
I really like this little poem. You maintain your chosen meter, iambic tetrameter perfectly and with the first and last lines in each stanza carrying the rhyme (slant in the case of S2) the rhyme does not intrude, neither do your compulsory words force their way in thanks particular to the way you use "flexible" that one is the killer but allying it with time was an excellent idea.
The really brilliant idea is the final stanza that moves the whole poem on breaking the idyllic moment that has taken two stanzas to establish. This was a very clever way to develop this poem.
reply by the author on 18-May-2017
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I really like this little poem. You maintain your chosen meter, iambic tetrameter perfectly and with the first and last lines in each stanza carrying the rhyme (slant in the case of S2) the rhyme does not intrude, neither do your compulsory words force their way in thanks particular to the way you use "flexible" that one is the killer but allying it with time was an excellent idea.
The really brilliant idea is the final stanza that moves the whole poem on breaking the idyllic moment that has taken two stanzas to establish. This was a very clever way to develop this poem.
Comment Written 18-May-2017
reply by the author on 18-May-2017
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Thank you so much,Pantygynt, for your kind praise. I truly enjoyed interpreting this painting by Van Gogh and am delighted you like what I've done.
Comment from c_lucas
I enjoy reading poetry based on Van Gogh's work. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very stirring read. There is very good imagery.
reply by the author on 18-May-2017
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I enjoy reading poetry based on Van Gogh's work. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very stirring read. There is very good imagery.
Comment Written 18-May-2017
reply by the author on 18-May-2017
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I am delighted you enjoyed my interpretation of this VanGogh painting. It was fun to step in the father's shoes.
