The Sight of Love
5-7-5 Love Poem10 total reviews
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello,
The syllable count is correct. I had a hard time seeing the font but it may be because I am reading on my kindle. One loses sight, not eyes. :) I like the presentation.
Good job
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Hello,
The syllable count is correct. I had a hard time seeing the font but it may be because I am reading on my kindle. One loses sight, not eyes. :) I like the presentation.
Good job
Comment Written 17-May-2017
Comment from BeasPeas
This is a very nicely composed 5-7-5. There is always a chance to meet someone new who can fulfill what another couldn't. I like the artwork, too. Marilyn
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This is a very nicely composed 5-7-5. There is always a chance to meet someone new who can fulfill what another couldn't. I like the artwork, too. Marilyn
Comment Written 17-May-2017
Comment from Vijay Kumar V
Haha, beautiful. A perfect entry to the contest. I love the fine imagery you have portrayed in such few syllables. Good luck. Thanks for sharing. Have a great day. Namaste.
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Haha, beautiful. A perfect entry to the contest. I love the fine imagery you have portrayed in such few syllables. Good luck. Thanks for sharing. Have a great day. Namaste.
Comment Written 17-May-2017
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
A very good entry into this competition. Probably the best one I've read so far. nice to see something different and the whole makes perfect sense.
All the very best
GMG
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Hi there,
A very good entry into this competition. Probably the best one I've read so far. nice to see something different and the whole makes perfect sense.
All the very best
GMG
Comment Written 17-May-2017
Comment from nordicgirl
I must say, this is really touching, Michael. So much said in these few words. An actual story of someone who had been besten by love and then finding it out of the blue. Amazing how that works. You have captured it to a tee. I think this may win! NG
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I must say, this is really touching, Michael. So much said in these few words. An actual story of someone who had been besten by love and then finding it out of the blue. Amazing how that works. You have captured it to a tee. I think this may win! NG
Comment Written 16-May-2017
Comment from Dean Kuch
Some say that love itself is blind, Michael.
But you're saying the complete opposite--that once you've finally fallen in love, your eyes are opened.
I can see both sides of the coin.
Good presentation and syllable count.
Best of luck.~Dean
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Some say that love itself is blind, Michael.
But you're saying the complete opposite--that once you've finally fallen in love, your eyes are opened.
I can see both sides of the coin.
Good presentation and syllable count.
Best of luck.~Dean
Comment Written 16-May-2017
Comment from loismddavis
a unique way to present your poem that fulfills the requirements of the prompt. You have written a perfect Haiku with a good satori. with so few words it is difficult to comment on flow or rhythm.
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a unique way to present your poem that fulfills the requirements of the prompt. You have written a perfect Haiku with a good satori. with so few words it is difficult to comment on flow or rhythm.
Comment Written 16-May-2017
Comment from Pam (respa)
-I like your image and presentation.
-Syllable count is good.
-I like your poem with the
comparison of losing sight
because of one person,
but gaining it back
because of the new one.
-A good entry.
-Good luck in the contest.
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-I like your image and presentation.
-Syllable count is good.
-I like your poem with the
comparison of losing sight
because of one person,
but gaining it back
because of the new one.
-A good entry.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 16-May-2017
Comment from Mustang Patty
This is a lovely 5-7-5 love poem. Your presentation is lovely and a wonderful compliment to the words of the piece. Good luck in the contest,
~patty~
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This is a lovely 5-7-5 love poem. Your presentation is lovely and a wonderful compliment to the words of the piece. Good luck in the contest,
~patty~
Comment Written 16-May-2017
Comment from KyColonel Randal
Thank you for sharing. It appears this senryu has the appropriate syllable count of 5-7-5 and follows the appropriate theme of "love." This should be a good poem for the contest you have entered. Good luck with your contest entry!
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Thank you for sharing. It appears this senryu has the appropriate syllable count of 5-7-5 and follows the appropriate theme of "love." This should be a good poem for the contest you have entered. Good luck with your contest entry!
Comment Written 16-May-2017
