Unleashed Chaos
Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "The Chosen Son/Part Two"A Novel of the Breedline Series
5 total reviews
Comment from Natali Holden
You used good descriptions. I'm so glad that Jem came to reason with Eve's babies. Your characters are so well made, they feel real. I felt bad for Mia when Jem refused and became angry. I'm glad Tim could talk some sense into him. I wouldn't change a thing about your chapter. Awesome work!
Natali ;)
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2017
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You used good descriptions. I'm so glad that Jem came to reason with Eve's babies. Your characters are so well made, they feel real. I felt bad for Mia when Jem refused and became angry. I'm glad Tim could talk some sense into him. I wouldn't change a thing about your chapter. Awesome work!
Natali ;)
Comment Written 22-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2017
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You're awesome Natali! :)
So glad you enjoyed this chapter. Jem is one of my favorite characters. He's usually very calm and patient. It's out of his character to become angry. I think when it came down to it, he would do anything for Mia.
Thanks again my friend,
Shana :)
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
So well written, my friend - not a typo in sight.
Helen's found a suitable surgeon. They'll go with him first, because they fear things could go wrong if Jem attempts the healing.
Great interaction between Jem and Mia
Margaret
reply by the author on 14-May-2017
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So well written, my friend - not a typo in sight.
Helen's found a suitable surgeon. They'll go with him first, because they fear things could go wrong if Jem attempts the healing.
Great interaction between Jem and Mia
Margaret
Comment Written 14-May-2017
reply by the author on 14-May-2017
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Thank you, Margaret :)
You're such a inspiration to my writing. It is so nice to hear your encouraging words. The relationship and bond between characters, Jem and Mia are so heartfelt to me. They truly love one another, and nothing will separate what they have, not even the past. I think you'll enjoy next weeks post. It will show how much the couple means to one another. I do enjoy writing about the two.
Thanks again,
Shana :)
Comment from ngage
Great writing, my friend! So now that Celina is aware of Jem's powers, she has decided to wait until the surgeon Helen has chosen for her before she takes up the offer to have Jem use his powers to heal her. Looking forward to how that turns out. Interesting.
You did a superb job with the interaction with Mia and Jem. The connection between them is tight. It was if I was right there in their conversation. The imagery you played was excellent! Can't wait until the next installment!
reply by the author on 14-May-2017
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Great writing, my friend! So now that Celina is aware of Jem's powers, she has decided to wait until the surgeon Helen has chosen for her before she takes up the offer to have Jem use his powers to heal her. Looking forward to how that turns out. Interesting.
You did a superb job with the interaction with Mia and Jem. The connection between them is tight. It was if I was right there in their conversation. The imagery you played was excellent! Can't wait until the next installment!
Comment Written 14-May-2017
reply by the author on 14-May-2017
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Thank you, ngage! :)
I do love to hear your feedback. It's always encouraging. You seem so tuned in to the characters. That is worth all the hard work in putting together my story.
Thank you!
Shana :)
Comment from royowen
Fantastic episode Shana, It looks like Tim has talked Jem around, despite the fact that he was really upset when Mia told about adopting Eve's twins, although he and Jace had rescuing adoptive parents. Meanwhile Helen tells Celina she's found a suitable surgeon, and then Chester says Jem has the power to heal, but also the power to destroy if it goes wrong, they go with the surgeon first, then... Like I said well done, Shana excellent, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 14-May-2017
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Fantastic episode Shana, It looks like Tim has talked Jem around, despite the fact that he was really upset when Mia told about adopting Eve's twins, although he and Jace had rescuing adoptive parents. Meanwhile Helen tells Celina she's found a suitable surgeon, and then Chester says Jem has the power to heal, but also the power to destroy if it goes wrong, they go with the surgeon first, then... Like I said well done, Shana excellent, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 14-May-2017
reply by the author on 14-May-2017
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Thank you, Roy :)
I was hoping you would enjoy this post. The relationship between Mia and Jem is very strong, and nothing will tear them apart, even adopting Eve's twins after what she has done to their Covenant.
Now, hopefully Celina's surgeon will be able to help her so she doesn't have to take the risk of dying over Jem's powers getting out of control. Can you imagine having the power to actually heal someone? But also with a heavy price. That would be a hard decision to make.
Thanks for your never ending support, my friend.
Always your fan,
Shana :)
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Great story Shana, I love the closeness, that's how,love should be. Well done, Roy
Comment from Nikki-Nicole
Well-written chapter.
The format looks good.
After reading this, I can honestly say that I think the book, 'Unleashed Chaos', is going to be a great read.
Nice artwork: The portrait shown supports the story.
The author's notes are helpful. Thank you.
I look forward to reading more.
Thanks for sharing.
Good luck with your future writing.
reply by the author on 14-May-2017
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Well-written chapter.
The format looks good.
After reading this, I can honestly say that I think the book, 'Unleashed Chaos', is going to be a great read.
Nice artwork: The portrait shown supports the story.
The author's notes are helpful. Thank you.
I look forward to reading more.
Thanks for sharing.
Good luck with your future writing.
Comment Written 13-May-2017
reply by the author on 14-May-2017
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Thank you! :)
Your support really inspires my writing. This gives me confidence when I feel like my story doesn't interest the reader. The Novels of the Breedline have been such an important part of my life, I can't imagine giving it up. Your kind words of encouragement help me believe.
I'm so glad you mentioned the photo. The model is from Florida, and he has become my inspiration for my characters, identical twins Jem and Jace. He was nice enough to do some photo shoots for me. When I found him on facebook, I knew he was going to be perfect for my characters.
Thanks again my friend,
Shana :)
