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Viewing comments for Chapter 30 "When Rain Obscures the Light"poems from Picture This Challenge
41 total reviews
Comment from Treischel
A very good poetic image of a heartbroken man as inspired by the picture. That is a well written Heroic Sonnet. Flows nicely. presents a melancholy mood if sorrow, loss, and searching.
reply by the author on 16-May-2017
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A very good poetic image of a heartbroken man as inspired by the picture. That is a well written Heroic Sonnet. Flows nicely. presents a melancholy mood if sorrow, loss, and searching.
Comment Written 16-May-2017
reply by the author on 16-May-2017
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You are the first person to give my poem a form. I've always called them heptameters, solely because they are written with fourteen-syllable lines. I like the name 'Heroic Sonnet' and I'm really pleased you liked it, Tom. I couldn't ask for a better review on this one. Thank you so much, my friend. :) Sandra xx
Comment from humpwhistle
Ah, we're all late sometime.
I almost envy you shadow man. He has something, somebody
to search for, to seek out. He hasn't given up.
I suspect that's better than the alternative.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 14-May-2017
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Ah, we're all late sometime.
I almost envy you shadow man. He has something, somebody
to search for, to seek out. He hasn't given up.
I suspect that's better than the alternative.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 14-May-2017
reply by the author on 14-May-2017
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Thank you, Lee. That sounds sadder than my poem! Are you alright? Now I'm worried, really worried about you. Talk to me. You know I've been in a big downer lately. I hate to think of you like this. Big hugs, wish I could come and give it in person. :) Sandra xxxx
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Fret not, dear Sandra. I'm all right. Maybe a touch of the drearies, but nothing I can't handle. You've got enough to stew on.
Maybe I'll write something crazy. Give us both a lift!
Lee
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That sounds a good idea. I could do with a laugh! We all get those drearies, is it an age thing? I'm older than you. :( xx (not by much!)
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I don't think it's an age thing, per se. I'm just unenthused. Lacking energy.
I probably just need more sex. Yeah, that's the ticket!
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LOL!! It would probably kill you! LOL
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True. But I'd still like to give it a try.
Wouldn't it be wonderful if sex cures what ails me? Prescribe me a double dose, Doc. And screw that 'apple a day' crap!
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LOL!!! Perhaps it should be classified as a medical condition, and prescribed twice a day after meals!
Possible repercussions on the blood pressure though!
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After meals? What're you, new? Meal, nap, then sex! You get to be my age, there's always a nap in the middle. My Oreos come with a nap in the middle. I nap while I pee. I nap in the middle of a nap. I nap in the midd . . .
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LOL! Lee, you're so funny, mad, but funny!! My type of guy! I suggest you take a nap now, you've been using those that solo typing finger for far too long without your nap! LOL!! xxx
Comment from Ulla
Hi Sandra, I know I'm late giving you this review, but I still want to comment on this wonderful poem. Not only is it a joy to read, there's a wonderful rhythm to it, but it's quite the story you have composed within the poem. The imagery is just great. Very well written.
My excuse for being late is cherry picking and that I wanted to write a new chapter in my book. Ulla xxxx
reply by the author on 14-May-2017
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Hi Sandra, I know I'm late giving you this review, but I still want to comment on this wonderful poem. Not only is it a joy to read, there's a wonderful rhythm to it, but it's quite the story you have composed within the poem. The imagery is just great. Very well written.
My excuse for being late is cherry picking and that I wanted to write a new chapter in my book. Ulla xxxx
Comment Written 14-May-2017
reply by the author on 14-May-2017
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Thank you so very much, Ulla, for this lovely review and all those stars!! You are a love! I haven't read yours yet, off to do it now. Big hugs!! Sandra. xxx
Comment from marybell1
A really beautiful poem "When Rain Obscures The Light". It flowed and rhymed well. You also chose an appropriate picture.
Best of luck.
Marybell1.
reply by the author on 14-May-2017
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A really beautiful poem "When Rain Obscures The Light". It flowed and rhymed well. You also chose an appropriate picture.
Best of luck.
Marybell1.
Comment Written 14-May-2017
reply by the author on 14-May-2017
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Thank you so much, Marybell, for your lovely review of my poem. I'm so pleased you enjoyed it. :) Sandra xx
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You are most welcome.
Marybell1.
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You are most welcome.
Marybell1.
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You are most welcome.
Marybell1.
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You are most welcome.
Marybell1.
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You are most welcome.
Marybell1.
Comment from flylikeaneagle
Sandra: I don't care if this is late. WoW! I like the stealing a kiss
and he goes looking for her. The rain brings tears and hope for
sunny days. We don't know why and what is in a heart. Great rhymes!
I've been helping two ladies in their own rainy day blues. Trying to
shine some light and love into their lives. God bless.
Have a blessed MOM's DAY! flylikeaneagle
reply by the author on 14-May-2017
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Sandra: I don't care if this is late. WoW! I like the stealing a kiss
and he goes looking for her. The rain brings tears and hope for
sunny days. We don't know why and what is in a heart. Great rhymes!
I've been helping two ladies in their own rainy day blues. Trying to
shine some light and love into their lives. God bless.
Have a blessed MOM's DAY! flylikeaneagle
Comment Written 13-May-2017
reply by the author on 14-May-2017
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Thank you so very much for the lovely 6 stars and wonderful review, my friend! What a lovely person you are to help those ladies. There is too much sadness in the world today and a little help to brighten someone else's life is just so nice.
You have a wonderful Mom's day too, my friend! :) Sandra xxx
Comment from Nikki-Nicole
Nice poem.
I especially like the ending: He wanders through the city streets when rain
obscures the light.
A broken shell of who he was, he disappears from
sight.'- Two thumbs up!
My favorite part: 'His heart was taken long ago; she stole it with a kiss.'
Great artwork: The image shown supports the poem. The background color goes well with the art. The picture looks spooky to me.
Best of luck to you in the challenge.
Thanks for sharing your Picture This.
Good luck with your future writing.
-Nicole-
reply by the author on 13-May-2017
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Nice poem.
I especially like the ending: He wanders through the city streets when rain
obscures the light.
A broken shell of who he was, he disappears from
sight.'- Two thumbs up!
My favorite part: 'His heart was taken long ago; she stole it with a kiss.'
Great artwork: The image shown supports the poem. The background color goes well with the art. The picture looks spooky to me.
Best of luck to you in the challenge.
Thanks for sharing your Picture This.
Good luck with your future writing.
-Nicole-
Comment Written 13-May-2017
reply by the author on 13-May-2017
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Thank you so very much, Nicole, for this really lovely review. I'm delighted with the 'two thumbs up' lol! Thank you! :) Sandra xxx
Comment from rama devi
This is a fantastic response to the photo dear. Drew me right in. Good story telling narrative style with well rhymed and well-timed lines. The pacing and flow are fluid and musical. I love the medley of S sounds and the rhyme pair if unaware and there plus the medley fo W sounds in the first stanza. Love your use of longer words too--like enigmatic.
Couple of suggestions to consider:
His heart was taken long ago,(;) she stole it with a kiss,(.)
He wanders through the city streets when rain obscures the light;(.)
A broken shell of who he was, he disappears from sight.
Potent closing image and tone.
Awesome entry. Good luck!
Love,
rd
reply by the author on 13-May-2017
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This is a fantastic response to the photo dear. Drew me right in. Good story telling narrative style with well rhymed and well-timed lines. The pacing and flow are fluid and musical. I love the medley of S sounds and the rhyme pair if unaware and there plus the medley fo W sounds in the first stanza. Love your use of longer words too--like enigmatic.
Couple of suggestions to consider:
His heart was taken long ago,(;) she stole it with a kiss,(.)
He wanders through the city streets when rain obscures the light;(.)
A broken shell of who he was, he disappears from sight.
Potent closing image and tone.
Awesome entry. Good luck!
Love,
rd
Comment Written 13-May-2017
reply by the author on 13-May-2017
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What a lovely review, Rama, thank you so much. I have made the corrections thank you for that as well. You are always such a love, and I really do appreciate the time you take with my work. Big hugs, my friend. :) Sandra xxx
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AW, thanks for your gracious response, dear. Big hugs, rd xxoo
Comment from Mitchell Brontė
What a wonderful job you have done in putting these excellent words to the picture.
A journey of lost love and the never ending search to rekindle an old flame penned with such skill.
Have a lovely evening Sandra
Mitchell
reply by the author on 13-May-2017
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What a wonderful job you have done in putting these excellent words to the picture.
A journey of lost love and the never ending search to rekindle an old flame penned with such skill.
Have a lovely evening Sandra
Mitchell
Comment Written 13-May-2017
reply by the author on 13-May-2017
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Thank you so much for this lovely review, my friend! I'm so pleased you enjoyed it. :) Sandra xxx
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
He wanders through the city streets when rain obscures the light;
A broken shell of who he was, he disappears from sight.
a cherished love that's lost - your poem is so most impressive,
Sandra, albeit melancholy - he sounds like Brady in my book
who is searching for his lost love.
great presentation - words, rhythm and rhyme flowing perfectly.
Margaret
reply by the author on 13-May-2017
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He wanders through the city streets when rain obscures the light;
A broken shell of who he was, he disappears from sight.
a cherished love that's lost - your poem is so most impressive,
Sandra, albeit melancholy - he sounds like Brady in my book
who is searching for his lost love.
great presentation - words, rhythm and rhyme flowing perfectly.
Margaret
Comment Written 13-May-2017
reply by the author on 13-May-2017
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He does, doesn't he? LOL, perhaps I was thinking of him when I wrote it. I just loved your last part and can't wait for the next one. Thank you, Margaret, for reading my poem, and for the lovely comments, I really appreciate them. :) Sandra xx
Comment from alexisleech
Wonderful! You had my eyes glued to every word, Sandra, and your interpretation of the picture was perfect. So many people suffer like this in silence, so the sentiment was spot on.
Well done!
Alexis xxx
reply by the author on 13-May-2017
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Wonderful! You had my eyes glued to every word, Sandra, and your interpretation of the picture was perfect. So many people suffer like this in silence, so the sentiment was spot on.
Well done!
Alexis xxx
Comment Written 13-May-2017
reply by the author on 13-May-2017
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Thank you so much, my lovely friend!! Big hugs for the 6 stars. :) xxxx
