O Come Away
I need a longer vacation!72 total reviews
Comment from bookishfabler
I hope you enjoyed your trip. I have been to Mexico and it is lovely, though not in Puerto Vallarta. I was in Playa Del Carmen. I see it has inspired you. Great poem. Welcome back.
hugs Heidi
reply by the author on 08-May-2017
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I hope you enjoyed your trip. I have been to Mexico and it is lovely, though not in Puerto Vallarta. I was in Playa Del Carmen. I see it has inspired you. Great poem. Welcome back.
hugs Heidi
Comment Written 08-May-2017
reply by the author on 08-May-2017
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Thank you, Heidi, for your review of my vacation sonnet and for welcoming me back home. I appreciate it.
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
A day before the plane departs, you cry
and crowd the pier to watch the sun descend
into the ocean's blue beneath the sky.
The time arrives when rest achieves an end.
Each heart attaches hope and binds a dream
to places lovers hold in high esteem.; and what a follow up it is! Quite marvellous, I think it is very accomplished. Kindest regards Meia :)
reply by the author on 08-May-2017
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A day before the plane departs, you cry
and crowd the pier to watch the sun descend
into the ocean's blue beneath the sky.
The time arrives when rest achieves an end.
Each heart attaches hope and binds a dream
to places lovers hold in high esteem.; and what a follow up it is! Quite marvellous, I think it is very accomplished. Kindest regards Meia :)
Comment Written 08-May-2017
reply by the author on 08-May-2017
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Yes, Meia, what a followup. In my first sonnet last month, I had problems with meter on every line. Now I only had problems with one line I corrected. I am getting better at sonnets. Thank you for your review. Now I am thinking of another followup!
Comment from frierajac
This could be the airport in San Diego. I know you aren't there. It is an interesting poem in the longing for escape that it expresses. I think it has a good affect on the readers imagination, not a simple ad for a vacation, Something of enduring vocation.
reply by the author on 08-May-2017
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This could be the airport in San Diego. I know you aren't there. It is an interesting poem in the longing for escape that it expresses. I think it has a good affect on the readers imagination, not a simple ad for a vacation, Something of enduring vocation.
Comment Written 08-May-2017
reply by the author on 08-May-2017
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Thank you, frierajac, for your generous review of my enduring sonnet. I appreciate it.
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"O Come Away" is an extremely well-written and heart-warming piece. Each line of this talented poet's work is woven with the golden threads of truth. It was a pleasure to read and review a work of this caliber. This is a definite six.
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"O Come Away" is an extremely well-written and heart-warming piece. Each line of this talented poet's work is woven with the golden threads of truth. It was a pleasure to read and review a work of this caliber. This is a definite six.
Comment Written 08-May-2017
reply by the author on 08-May-2017
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Oh, thank you, duchessofdrumborg, for your generous, six star review. Your words of praise for my poem and craft cheer me.
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SisCat, as always you're more than welcome.
Kindest wishes,
the Duchess
Comment from Hitcher
It is always hard to get on that bloody plane at the end of a great vacation, the better the vacation the harder it is to leave. I'm guessing you had a wonderful time away. You are definitely getting a feel for the sonnet form friend, great meter, cool rhyme, nice flow of emotion and my favorite... your last two lines.
Each heart attaches hope and binds a dream
to places lovers hold in high esteem. - Beautiful and oh so true : ) Nice!!
reply by the author on 08-May-2017
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It is always hard to get on that bloody plane at the end of a great vacation, the better the vacation the harder it is to leave. I'm guessing you had a wonderful time away. You are definitely getting a feel for the sonnet form friend, great meter, cool rhyme, nice flow of emotion and my favorite... your last two lines.
Each heart attaches hope and binds a dream
to places lovers hold in high esteem. - Beautiful and oh so true : ) Nice!!
Comment Written 08-May-2017
reply by the author on 08-May-2017
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Yes, Hitcher, I am getting the feel for the sonnet. This is my second one and it took me two weeks to write because I only had the opening stanza. Once I settled upon a direction, the poem came together quickly. Thank you for your review.
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I have a a slightly different process, I cant start to write until I have a direction once I have that I scribble like mad to get it finished. Ten I go back and tear it apart, fine tune and finally polish. so two weeks sounds about right, ha ha. Keep at it my friend, you kicking ass as far as learning quickly goes : ) But that is because you are already a refined writer mate : )
Comment from Nikki-Nicole
This is a great poem.
My favorite part: 'Each heart attaches hope and binds a dream
to places lovers hold in high self esteem.'-
I especially like, 'O come away, O come away today.
O never stay, O never stay away.'
Nice artwork: The image shown supports the poem. The background color matches the art.
Best of luck to you in the competition.
Thanks for sharing your Sonnet.
Good luck with your future writing.
-Nicole-
reply by the author on 08-May-2017
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This is a great poem.
My favorite part: 'Each heart attaches hope and binds a dream
to places lovers hold in high self esteem.'-
I especially like, 'O come away, O come away today.
O never stay, O never stay away.'
Nice artwork: The image shown supports the poem. The background color matches the art.
Best of luck to you in the competition.
Thanks for sharing your Sonnet.
Good luck with your future writing.
-Nicole-
Comment Written 08-May-2017
reply by the author on 08-May-2017
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Oh, thank you, Nicole, for your review and for pointing out the lines that resonated with you. Thank you also for wishing me success in the contest and in my future writing. I appreciate it.
Comment from Mitchell Brontė
The love you have for this place is evident, this wonderful Sonnet had a feel of an old sea shanty song which flows effortlessly.
A wonderful read that was absolutely enjoyable.
Have a great day
Mitchell
reply by the author on 08-May-2017
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The love you have for this place is evident, this wonderful Sonnet had a feel of an old sea shanty song which flows effortlessly.
A wonderful read that was absolutely enjoyable.
Have a great day
Mitchell
Comment Written 08-May-2017
reply by the author on 08-May-2017
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Oh, thank you, Mitchell, I am glad you found my sonnet to be an enjoyable read.
Comment from lyenochka
I enjoy the flow and rhymes of this poem. It feels like a song. There's mention of traveling by sea and by plane. And in the end, it's the love of the place that draws us.
reply by the author on 08-May-2017
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I enjoy the flow and rhymes of this poem. It feels like a song. There's mention of traveling by sea and by plane. And in the end, it's the love of the place that draws us.
Comment Written 08-May-2017
reply by the author on 08-May-2017
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Yes, lyenochka, you are the second reviewer to say that my sonnet feels like a song. In a way, it is my love song for travel. Thank you for your review.
Comment from JJInfinity805
This poem was breathtaking and absolutely beautiful. The imagery was powerful and the poem had a very distinct voice throughout its entirety. I enjoyed the read.
reply by the author on 08-May-2017
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This poem was breathtaking and absolutely beautiful. The imagery was powerful and the poem had a very distinct voice throughout its entirety. I enjoyed the read.
Comment Written 08-May-2017
reply by the author on 08-May-2017
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Oh, thank you, JJInfinity805, for your review. I am glad you felt my poem's distinct voice.
Comment from Vijay Kumar V
Hi, it's been a long I have read your works and this one I love the way you have penned such fine imagery in a sonnet form is so beautiful ly pleasing especially, "The shore adores where sun beguiled has smiled. They tug your toes as water ebbs and flows." Have a great day. Namaste
reply by the author on 08-May-2017
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Hi, it's been a long I have read your works and this one I love the way you have penned such fine imagery in a sonnet form is so beautiful ly pleasing especially, "The shore adores where sun beguiled has smiled. They tug your toes as water ebbs and flows." Have a great day. Namaste
Comment Written 08-May-2017
reply by the author on 08-May-2017
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Oh, thank you, Lova, for your generous review and for pointing out the imagery that resonated with you.
