O Come Away
I need a longer vacation!72 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This sonnet, O Come Away, captures the reluctant heart that must finally come to the realization that the rest is over and the world escaped awaits your return. Nice.
reply by the author on 09-May-2017
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This sonnet, O Come Away, captures the reluctant heart that must finally come to the realization that the rest is over and the world escaped awaits your return. Nice.
Comment Written 08-May-2017
reply by the author on 09-May-2017
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Yes, Bill, reentry to a workaday world is always hard for me after a fine vacation. The opening lines occurred to me as I was on a plane bound for home. Thank you for your review, as always.
Comment from Poetic Friend
I did not read your first sonnet, but I thoroughly enjoyed this one.
For me, the meter is perfect, and stresses are where they should be. However, I am not an expert with scansion although I write metered poetry.
Is this poem is what a vacation produces, I need to take more vacations.
Bravo!
reply by the author on 08-May-2017
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I did not read your first sonnet, but I thoroughly enjoyed this one.
For me, the meter is perfect, and stresses are where they should be. However, I am not an expert with scansion although I write metered poetry.
Is this poem is what a vacation produces, I need to take more vacations.
Bravo!
Comment Written 08-May-2017
reply by the author on 08-May-2017
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Yes, Poetic Friend, we all need to take more vacations to produce more poems. Thank you for your review. I am glad you enjoyed my sonnet.
Comment from Shawgins
I like this poem because it hits home with me as a lover of travel. It also has an enjoyable flow, my favorite rhyme, the waves refill your prints upon the sand. They tug your toes as water ebbs and flows the salty air embraces souls inland. Is good!
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reply by the author on 08-May-2017
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I like this poem because it hits home with me as a lover of travel. It also has an enjoyable flow, my favorite rhyme, the waves refill your prints upon the sand. They tug your toes as water ebbs and flows the salty air embraces souls inland. Is good!
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 08-May-2017
reply by the author on 08-May-2017
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Oh, thank you, Shawgins, for your review. I am glad my poem hits home with your love of travel.
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
This is a stunning sonnet with the inclusion of the internal rhymes in the first stanza. One of the best I have read. Best wishes in the contest, my friend~Debbie
reply by the author on 08-May-2017
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This is a stunning sonnet with the inclusion of the internal rhymes in the first stanza. One of the best I have read. Best wishes in the contest, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 08-May-2017
reply by the author on 08-May-2017
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Oh, thank you, Debbie, for your generous, six star review. The internal rhymes of the first stanza occurred to me as I departed Puerto Vallarta. Thank you also for wishing me the best in the contest.
Comment from robyn corum
The waves refill your prints upon the sand.
They tug your toes as water ebbs and flows.
The salty air embraces souls inland.
Inhale, exhale the spell that sparks and grows.
Andre,
This seems like a sad farewell to the vacation you've enjoyed recently. I feel your longing to stay and enjoy more of the tranquil pleasures you've found. *smile*
Very nice!
reply by the author on 08-May-2017
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The waves refill your prints upon the sand.
They tug your toes as water ebbs and flows.
The salty air embraces souls inland.
Inhale, exhale the spell that sparks and grows.
Andre,
This seems like a sad farewell to the vacation you've enjoyed recently. I feel your longing to stay and enjoy more of the tranquil pleasures you've found. *smile*
Very nice!
Comment Written 08-May-2017
reply by the author on 08-May-2017
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Oh, thank you, Robyn, for your review. You inspire me! I could use another vacation right now!
Comment from dmt1967
I like this poem as it had depth and I liked the picture as well. The men looking out to sea, a vast ocean; the words and picture fit well together. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 08-May-2017
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I like this poem as it had depth and I liked the picture as well. The men looking out to sea, a vast ocean; the words and picture fit well together. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 08-May-2017
reply by the author on 08-May-2017
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Thank you for your review and for wishing me the best in the contest.
Comment from Oatmeal
Sis Cat,
This is a beautiful poem. I liked it very much. It made for an enjoyable read. Very enchanted flow of words. The flow was smooth. The theme well thought out. Very nicely written.
There was no SPAG. No typos. No homophones. No problems at all.
The words you chose worked well.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
reply by the author on 08-May-2017
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Sis Cat,
This is a beautiful poem. I liked it very much. It made for an enjoyable read. Very enchanted flow of words. The flow was smooth. The theme well thought out. Very nicely written.
There was no SPAG. No typos. No homophones. No problems at all.
The words you chose worked well.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
Comment Written 08-May-2017
reply by the author on 08-May-2017
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Oh, thank you, Oatmeal, for your review of my beautiful sonnet. It is always good to hear from you.
Comment from Ashlie Daza
This is a very well written poem. The words flow smoothly and the rhyming scheme is superb. I guess, your trip inspired you to write this one. Keep on writing great pieces.
reply by the author on 08-May-2017
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This is a very well written poem. The words flow smoothly and the rhyming scheme is superb. I guess, your trip inspired you to write this one. Keep on writing great pieces.
Comment Written 08-May-2017
reply by the author on 08-May-2017
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Oh, thank you, Ashlie, for your generous, six star review. Yes, my trip inspired me to write this one.
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You are quite welcome.
Comment from nomi338
This is very beautiful prose. It speaks to me of many things, covering the many emotions one might feel before, during and even after a journey. I cannot speak of others, but once I am in a new place either t stay for brief time of longer, my mind soon turns to thoughts of that place that I consider to be home. I thought your poem touched on that emotion in a very powerful way. very good.
reply by the author on 08-May-2017
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This is very beautiful prose. It speaks to me of many things, covering the many emotions one might feel before, during and even after a journey. I cannot speak of others, but once I am in a new place either t stay for brief time of longer, my mind soon turns to thoughts of that place that I consider to be home. I thought your poem touched on that emotion in a very powerful way. very good.
Comment Written 08-May-2017
reply by the author on 08-May-2017
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Oh, thank you, nomi338, for your generous, six star review. I am glad my poem touched on your emotions of home in a powerful way.
Comment from Rasmine
Good poem SisCat.
I like the rhyming the best. I always do, but some poems are awesome that don't rhyme. I have to remember that.
I wish you luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 08-May-2017
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Good poem SisCat.
I like the rhyming the best. I always do, but some poems are awesome that don't rhyme. I have to remember that.
I wish you luck in the contest!
Comment Written 08-May-2017
reply by the author on 08-May-2017
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Oh, thank you, Rasmine, for your generous review and for wishing me the best in the contest. Yes, some unrhymed poems are awesome.
