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off the chart genuis

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Comment from Rasmine
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Hello, :)

I think I found a typo, but maybe not:
isn't nutritious enough to feed this ancient wait (did you mean waif?)

Have a good weekend :*)

 Comment Written 11-May-2017


reply by the author on 11-May-2017
    Hi....smile.....I think what you've found is what we all find in poetry ....ourselves. You're not alone Rasmine.....would you like to get something to eat...? Love michael
Comment from Nikki-Nicole
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This is a good read.
I especially like how the first and last stanzas are setup.
Beautiful artwork. The image shown supports the poem. The background color goes well with the art.
Nice video.
Thanks for sharing your poetry.
Good luck with your future writing.
-Nicole-

 Comment Written 10-May-2017

Comment from lalajovanoski
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I really enjoyed reading this piece as it is nicely constructed and possesses a lot of emotions. very deep and full of meaning. thank you for sharing this

 Comment Written 09-May-2017


reply by the author on 10-May-2017
    well thanks...-smile-
    yes it is...ah you're welcome I used to enjoy this. lived it for a while, Anyway I'm glad you enjoyed it. love Michael
Comment from MissMerri
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Hi Michael. I have to give six stars to this because the message of love and yearning is so powerfully woven into the lines about spring and homespun simplicity. I feel the strong emotion in these words and find it remarkable how you are able to put together such powerful images and evoke feelings in the reader that I imagine mirror your own. The verse about the cornbread brings out vividly the longing in every heart for a contented home, a place where "cast iron love" dwells in unshakeable security. What a creative way to express that! To wear your weather, and rotate earth by force are two more of your uniquely original ways of expressing a desire to be with someone who is not yet yours or evidently does not live in your presence, at least. You must see in her the warmth of Spring sunshine, and your heart longs for spring and innocence and the comfort of home where love is baked in cast iron. I can feel the power of this emotional write, "but alas, it is a quiet sower that gathers time." Don't ever give up Michael. Though I may not know of whom you speak, I'm pretty sure she will come, if she has a heart at all. Best wishes from me, and thank you for the courage you continually show to be true to yourself. I admire that. MM

 Comment Written 09-May-2017


reply by the author on 10-May-2017
    Hi Meadow....-smile-
    I see things through me.
    life experience both beautiful and utterly ugly.
    I compare the two differing contrasts in every day human
    being here and explain what ive found. yes all that you said is me. you know. love Michael
Comment from Irish Rain
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How beautiful . I love the reference to 'cast iron.' Simpler days and times when love was understandable, and easily within reach. No, there seems to be nothing nutritious enough today, we are all seeking and searching that more God perfect advent. Just beautiful Mr. Michael, blessings...

 Comment Written 09-May-2017

Comment from Ulla
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Hi there, I give you a five star because I suppose it must be me who don't understand what you're writing. I don't know whether some punctuation would help. As far as I understand you're talking about spring. I'm sorry, I should have skipped. But I haven't hurt your rating at least. All best. Ulla:)

 Comment Written 08-May-2017


reply by the author on 08-May-2017
    Doesn't .....who doesn't understand. No ....you're in line....smile. I would I explain but I do t really feel like it. Love michael
reply by Ulla on 08-May-2017
    True, you caught me out there. LOL
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
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Seasons change diurnally, new lives come out, spring comes, aggrandizement of each object in Nature intensifies with each one's scope of fulfilment comes; I liked the thoughts.

 Comment Written 08-May-2017


reply by the author on 08-May-2017
    hey thanks....love Michael
Comment from Shawgins
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I'm not sure what to make of this poem. Is it really good or just ok? I like that it's very descriptive but I think that's the problem too. It seems like it's just a run on of descriptive phrases. I love them, there great but I guess I just don't get it.

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 Comment Written 08-May-2017


reply by the author on 08-May-2017
    It's really really good....trust me.
Comment from Gert sherwood
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Hello reconciled
I will say the way I read your poem about what ever season it brings the delight of new life like its the beginning of new life that never seems to uncurl.

Gert

 Comment Written 07-May-2017


reply by the author on 08-May-2017
    Smile....actual lay I'm relating spring and life to a woman. But it's personal. Love michael
Comment from Joan E.
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The charming artwork you selected established the perfect mood for your poem, along with the down-home "cornbread" in the cast iron skillet. Your "yearning to rotate earth by force" is a memorable and compelling phrase. Big hugs and happy Sunday- Joan

 Comment Written 07-May-2017


reply by the author on 08-May-2017
    well im im ready Joan...hug me like you'll never see me again.
    my spaceships come in...ET;s going home....handwave....love you Michael