Comment from Bill O'Bier

Excellent

Hello Patty:
When we honestly ask ourselves what will bring us true happiness, we often find that it is having someone who, instead of giving advice, solutions, or cures, have chosen to share our pain and touch our wounds with a warm and tender heart. Thanks so much for sharing this poem.
Wishing you the best...
Bill~

 Comment Written 07-May-2017

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reply by the author on 07-May-2017

Hi Bill; thank you so much for your warm review of this poem. I hope we all can find our happiness,
~patty~

Comment from Margaret Snowdon

Excellent

What will bring us true happiness?

What indeed?

A well-writtern quatern, with a good flow to the words,
and both rhythm and rhyme.

I think good health and love are perhaps the main things that bring happiness - and if we find that love in our lifetime, then we are blessed.

Most enjoyable, Patty
Margaret

 Comment Written 07-May-2017

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reply by the author on 07-May-2017

Hi Margaret; I'm glad you enjoyed my poem about happiness. One of the things that gives me happiness is to read your stories!
~patty~

reply by Margaret Snowdon on 07-May-2017

So nice of you to say so - thank you, Patty. M

Comment from bookishfabler

Excellent

A very pretty poem. Again, no idea if it written correctly. However I think true happiness is getting rid of as much stress as possible. I'm getting there a little at time with this move.
Thanks for sharing
hugs Heidi

 Comment Written 07-May-2017

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reply by the author on 07-May-2017

Hi Heidi; thank you for reading and reviewing this poem. I don't think you need to understand a poetic form to enjoy the words. After all, poetry is all about feelings and perception.

I'm glad you are starting to feel less stress in your life - it is truly a blessing!

~patty~

Comment from Asem.inspirations

Excellent

Wow Patty,

What an interesting lesson on Quatern poetry. I have never seen this type of poem before, it seems very challenging, yet difficult too. Yous is unique in that each line is in the form of a question. I googled Quatern poetry and saw other samples and it is very interesting to me. I may actually try one of my own one day.

I really like your poem and the questions is a very popular one. Is true happiness even possible in an imperfect world such as this one, so full of it's evil and daily strife.

I am enjoying learning from you Patty and I am really going to seek that book or booklet "Elements of Styles 2017". Thank you again for your help and critique. After you assisted me with that story, 4 other Authors gave me further assistance. Fan Story is an education in it's own so I guess I will stay put. I was a little discouraged yesterday, I was feeling a little embarrassed and incapable of ever writing a story properly but I am sure that eventually, I will get much better. I won't give up or at least I will try not to give up but I am a quitter, it was my normal behavior, in the past, quitting and procrastinating, those were my flaws. Well, anyway, thank you again and I hope that your Sunday is full of sunshine and love. God be with you...

 Comment Written 07-May-2017

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reply by the author on 07-May-2017

Hi Tier;
I'm so sorry you were feeling bad yesterday. It is a place to learn here on Fan Story. No one starts out writing perfectly - we all need to learn the tools of the craft. Don't give up - especially if you want to write. Expressing oneself through the written word is an art form - and learning the rules is part of the process.
Hope you have a good day,
~patty~

reply by Asem.inspirations on 07-May-2017

Thanks Patty,

I won't give up and please don't give up on me. I appreciate your help, extremely.

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

I believe true happiness is fulfilled within our own hearts and not by loving someone else or being loved. It is being at peace with oneself and being self-reliant and knowing your own mind and having that confidence to be yourself, your poem is a joy to read Patty, questions many of us ask ourselves and I hope I have the true answer, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 07-May-2017

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reply by the author on 07-May-2017

Hi Dolly; I'm glad you enjoyed this poem. It was fun to write - the idea came to me as I was waking up yesterday. Thank you for your kind words of encouragement,
~patty~

Comment from kahpot

Excellent

What an amazing form (style ) of poetry An excellent read as true happiness I believe is everyone's pursuit, in this form does every line become a question or is that optional, I liked this very much****kahpot

 Comment Written 07-May-2017

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reply by the author on 07-May-2017

I'm glad you enjoyed this poem. It was fun to write - the idea came to me as I was waking up yesterday. Thank you for your kind words of encouragement. (The form doesn't require the questions - that was my concept.)
~patty~

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

Indeed, what will bring us true happiness? If you find out let me know, please. It's what everyone wants to know. Good job with the form and the presentation.

 Comment Written 07-May-2017

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reply by the author on 07-May-2017

Hi Gypsy; I'm glad you enjoyed this poem. It was fun to write - the idea came to me as I was waking up yesterday. Thank you for your kind words of encouragement,
~patty~

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

Love waits in the wings for all. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. There is very good imagery and descriptive read.

 Comment Written 07-May-2017

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reply by the author on 07-May-2017

Hi; I'm glad you enjoyed this poem. It was fun to write - the idea came to me as I was waking up yesterday. Thank you for your kind words of encouragement,
~patty~

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written Quatern. A very strong repeating line makes it always a winner. Your rhyming scheme works well and the topic is something we all search for.

 Comment Written 07-May-2017

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reply by the author on 07-May-2017

Hi Sandra; I'm glad you enjoyed this poem. It was fun to write - the idea came to me as I was waking up yesterday. Thank you for your kind words of encouragement,
~patty~

Comment from amahra

Excellent

You did a great with such a difficult poem. However, I thought the last line in the third stanza, "In its pursuit, can we get sick?? could have been a little stronger. The rhyme word "sick" seemed forced. But great job.

 Comment Written 06-May-2017

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reply by the author on 07-May-2017

Hi; I'm glad you enjoyed this poem. It was fun to write - the idea came to me as I was waking up yesterday. Thank you for your kind words of encouragement,
~patty~