My Book of Poems 2010-2017
Viewing comments for Chapter 28 "Over one thing"a collection of my poetry
69 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
I like the artwork. The fairy looks so full of thought. Sometimes another chance is not the right thing to do.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 05-May-2017
I like the artwork. The fairy looks so full of thought. Sometimes another chance is not the right thing to do.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 04-May-2017
reply by the author on 05-May-2017
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Hi; thank you so much for your lovely review. I'm glad you stopped by to read and review. Your comments are greatly appreciated. I totally agree - some people do not deserve another chance,
~patty~
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Hi, Patty. You're welcome.
Joan
Comment from nancyrabbrose
Your poem is very attractive to look at. I have to say that I don't quite understand your poem. Perhaps the mystery for me is ok. Standing on principle, unafraid, numb. These words don't quite gel for me. But I think you wrote a good poem anyway. It's probably my problem that I don't understand it.
reply by the author on 04-May-2017
Your poem is very attractive to look at. I have to say that I don't quite understand your poem. Perhaps the mystery for me is ok. Standing on principle, unafraid, numb. These words don't quite gel for me. But I think you wrote a good poem anyway. It's probably my problem that I don't understand it.
Comment Written 04-May-2017
reply by the author on 04-May-2017
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thank you for reading and reviewing anyway. I can related to not being able to understand everyone's poems. Sometimes, it just doesn't come together for you,
~patty~
Comment from TAB_that's me
Nice rhyme in this. It is written in perfect syllable count. You might try the presentation with each line centered. Just my opinion, though. Good luck Patty:)
teresa
reply by the author on 04-May-2017
Nice rhyme in this. It is written in perfect syllable count. You might try the presentation with each line centered. Just my opinion, though. Good luck Patty:)
teresa
Comment Written 04-May-2017
reply by the author on 04-May-2017
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Hi Teresa; thank you so much for your review. I was told to do it both ways - so I settled on this because that's the way they're presented on shadowpoetry.com.
~patty~
Comment from cumulus365
Patty, this one is a treat from you. It is so perfect so there is no review to give. The feeling just ooze out and flow like a stream. The meaning is simple- this world is very scary and just one look from a gentle heart would wipe all that away. Best wishes for the entry.
reply by the author on 04-May-2017
Patty, this one is a treat from you. It is so perfect so there is no review to give. The feeling just ooze out and flow like a stream. The meaning is simple- this world is very scary and just one look from a gentle heart would wipe all that away. Best wishes for the entry.
Comment Written 04-May-2017
reply by the author on 04-May-2017
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thank you so much for your warm review of my nonet poem. I was challenged to write this when I came across it on my list of poetic forms. After struggling with it for a bit, it seemed to write itself - I'm glad you enjoyed it,
~patty~
Comment from wondertwin
Fantastic job with this poem/nonet. The syllable scheme is a tricky one to pull off and still leave each line flowing. You proved flow with ease throughout your lines :) Wonderful! Blessings, AmyJo
reply by the author on 04-May-2017
Fantastic job with this poem/nonet. The syllable scheme is a tricky one to pull off and still leave each line flowing. You proved flow with ease throughout your lines :) Wonderful! Blessings, AmyJo
Comment Written 04-May-2017
reply by the author on 04-May-2017
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Hi AmyJo; thank you so much for your wonderful review. Writing a nonet should have a warning label on it - hazardous to your health! I sat here carefully counting each syllable and straining to have the thing make sense! I'm so glad it paid off.
~patty~
Comment from Bill Schott
This nonet, Over One Thing, has the correct set up and forms pretty much a question as to how some small thing makes such a big problem.
reply by the author on 04-May-2017
This nonet, Over One Thing, has the correct set up and forms pretty much a question as to how some small thing makes such a big problem.
Comment Written 04-May-2017
reply by the author on 04-May-2017
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Hi Bill; thank you so much for reading and reviewing. Yes, the poem does boil down to just standing on one principle can ruin a relationship,
~patty~
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes, my friend, this is well written about a relationship in which has broken down and one person wants a second chance well-done regards Jill
reply by the author on 04-May-2017
Yes, my friend, this is well written about a relationship in which has broken down and one person wants a second chance well-done regards Jill
Comment Written 04-May-2017
reply by the author on 04-May-2017
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Hi Jill; thank you so much for your review of this poem. I've decided that writing nonets is its own kind of hell. I really struggled with this one, and I'm glad it has gotten a positive response,
~patty~
Comment from estory
Nice job with this format, I like the way you focus on 'chance'. the poem kind of winds in through these circles of rhythms into that one point, that critical moment of chance, of choice. The big, scary world outside turns you around, and you look for that sympathetic face, someone to hold your hand. We all need somebody. Its tough living life on your own estory
reply by the author on 04-May-2017
Nice job with this format, I like the way you focus on 'chance'. the poem kind of winds in through these circles of rhythms into that one point, that critical moment of chance, of choice. The big, scary world outside turns you around, and you look for that sympathetic face, someone to hold your hand. We all need somebody. Its tough living life on your own estory
Comment Written 04-May-2017
reply by the author on 04-May-2017
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thank you so much for your review of this poem. I've decided that writing nonets is its own kind of hell. I really struggled with this one, and I'm glad it has gotten a positive response,
~patty~
Comment from Lori Korth
Wonderful piece, love the subject.
Agreed, you can tell much from a face if you look deep enough.
Love I'm numb and unafraid
Tho' I wish you'd stayed
reply by the author on 04-May-2017
Wonderful piece, love the subject.
Agreed, you can tell much from a face if you look deep enough.
Love I'm numb and unafraid
Tho' I wish you'd stayed
Comment Written 04-May-2017
reply by the author on 04-May-2017
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thank you so much for your review of this poem. I've decided that writing nonets is its own kind of hell. I really struggled with this one, and I'm glad it has gotten a positive response,
~patty~
Comment from tfawcus
Principles are all very well, but when they are used as a way of maintaining 'face', the results can cause much misery and heartache, as your well-constructed Nonet suggests.
reply by the author on 04-May-2017
Principles are all very well, but when they are used as a way of maintaining 'face', the results can cause much misery and heartache, as your well-constructed Nonet suggests.
Comment Written 04-May-2017
reply by the author on 04-May-2017
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thank you so much for stopping by to read and review. I appreciated the comment about my 'well-constructed' Nonet. This poetic form was much harder to work with than I first imagined,
~patty~